Mortal: Poor Taoist Han Yun, Fellow Taoist, Please Stay.

Doesn't the protagonist, a reincarnator, even have any skills? Do you have to follow the routine of Changchun Kung?

There is no distinction between priority and priority. When you read the fic, you are all about cultivating immortals. Just go through a few chapters of the martial arts plot. You have to grind through it. And you don't have to start with the same starting point as Han Li, right? Do you have to start with Qixuanmen?

The author should think more about it when arranging the identity of the protagonist in the future. As a "reincarnation", the protagonist is not a rookie. The protagonist is a "reincarnation" with experience, cards and a small treasury. After being taken away by the main god, 80% still has a lot of things. So calling the protagonist a "senior reincarnation" is not an exaggeration, but the protagonist's behavior is really not worthy of the status of "senior reincarnation". When I saw someone fighting, it was a life-and-death struggle. The protagonist approached within 10 meters without saying a word. I was really worried! Not to mention rashly approaching people with force without understanding anything. Are you really not afraid of death? Just a pistol. For a reincarnation who has experienced many worlds, shouldn't the protagonist understand that the sense of security that a pistol brings to people is really not enough? Then there was the short video recorded by Nangong Wan, which shocked me. What kind of hobby is this? It is really difficult to understand what the author considered in arranging this plot. It can only be said that the author is indeed a novice, and it is easy to get excited when writing, and it is even easier to fall into the excitement of writing small tricks. It is recommended that the author find a friend who has your own three views and has a similar understanding of the novel as you to try it out and help you improve.

The plot is too serious. The protagonist has his own golden finger and develops quickly. Depending on your situation, there are better options. It always follows the path of the original work, which makes people feel like they have no desire to read on.

The author writes fan fiction without knowing the plot to make it mysterious... Are you stupid? Can you achieve results by writing like this? Readers come to read the fan fiction to grab the treasures and resources in the original work. You are deliberately playing mystery and disgusting readers...

My combat experience is too low, I don't want to be a reincarnation person struggling for life and death, and needs to be improved.

Do you want to take a look at the two words at the beginning of the title of your book? The protagonist is a reincarnation who does not know the mortal world. What is the difference between this and the aborigines?

For a mortal, there are so many plots, and I still don't understand. It's so pretentious to talk about my past self. I am still cultivating immortals. A reincarnation who has survived countless plots. How can I survive without knowing the most basic emotional processing? I'm speechless.

I have absolutely no desire to read it. It was written by AI, right?

I read a few chapters and looked through the book reviews and the author's responses. I feel that Pig's Knuckle is too presumptuous. The author said that he introduces the background at the beginning, but the first chapter seems to have written a lot but did not explain much of it clearly, so I see many book friends are finding fault. Then, I'm too lazy to say more, just my personal opinion. . . . ——The above represents my personal opinion. Don't ask where the flying flowers will go. It will be cold if they stay, and they will be hurt if they fall. Injured in the whereabouts.

What is a little bit poisonous about the previous article is that the protagonist who has experienced dozens of reincarnation copies is a weakling in terms of combat effectiveness. If the iron slave rushes over and shoots three times in the chest (without hitting the head?) And nothing happens, he should have realized that it is a puppet or a zombie, so he should have taken advantage of the trick and summoned a new super controller. Afterwards, he should have used his backhand to take out a few times when he sensed the evil wind coming from his back. Even if he does not have the strength experience of the reincarnation, he will always have it, so why is he a weakling?

Your plot is either an anime plot or an original plot, please

Does the protagonist, Lord God Reincarnation, know about the mortal world?

Borrowing the building to promote books, Wang Chan, the protagonist of "Mortal Demon Flames", is welcome to taste it

You are always Han Li: Han Yun: There are also descriptions of psychological activities. It's like writing an essay. I'm really speechless. I suggest you read novels written by others.

Finally, there is an author who is not afraid of grabbing the little green bottle. Nowadays, mortal fan fiction is really speechless. If you play with physical training and don't grab the little green bottle, then you are playing with physical training. It's funny. You have already written fan fiction and you are still afraid of this and that. Damn, your protagonists are all time travellers, and they still play time closed loop. And if there is a time closed loop, the first person who cultivates to Dao Ancestor will directly interrupt the cultivation system, and will also let the subsequent people cultivate to Da Luo and Dao Ancestor.

Updated today, this is to collect monthly tickets 🤭

Brotherly love is deep, you should write about it, Wu Dong.

It looks like the rhythm of a eunuch 🙂

How could it be so bad? This book,

If it doesn't look good, it's better to focus on the original work. The animation is very good, but animation is an audio-visual language after all. When you write a novel, you use words. The sense of substitution itself is not as good as animation. The writing style is also a big reason why it is boring.

A fan book I read before, "Mortals Begin as a Casual Cultivator", analyzed the settings of the original work in detail. It was quite reasonable and well-founded. The author can learn from it and create his own original work if there is no setting part. I wish everyone can write better as they write👌🏻! ! !

The author was writing randomly. At first, the protagonist had no reaction after seeing iconic words such as Han Li, Zhang Tie, Doctor Mo, Qixuanmen, etc., Indicating that this world was not the novel world he had read. The author himself also replied that the protagonist had not read the novel Mortal. Later, he often said things that could only be said after reading the novel Mortal. It was uncomfortable to read, and it was uncomfortable to read without thinking. The author may have never read Mortal before writing this novel, and re-read it during the writing process. As a result, he was affected and often wrote words indicating that the protagonist had read Mortal novels. Of course, it is more likely that the author has read the novel Mortal, but wanted to write a pseudo-aboriginal novel in which the protagonist has not read Mortal, and did not handle it well when writing. As a result, the protagonist in the beginning has not read Mortal, and later there are often some words or psychological activities that are impossible to say without having read Mortal.

Get more, they're all on the shelves. Haven't saved your manuscript yet?

After three months, I clicked on this book again. Thinking about whether you have changed, I read the previous chapters. There are descriptions of the characters' actions and expressions before the dialogue, which make the dialogue fuller, but there are still dialogue forms similar to scripts in the previous chapters. By the way, author, you should have reset the previous chapters. When I read the beginning, I felt that the beginning of the second chapter was very good. I subscribed to 150 chapters and read the content, and I realized that you have made great progress.

The knife has been issued. Brother, hurry up. Is it in stock? If it is in stock, you can vote for it. The writing of the fan type mortal is really good, 😁