My Vest Script Is Wrong

The introduction is very good, but as soon as I read the text, I lost interest.

It's a bit confusing. It feels like the author assumes that we know everything and doesn't even explain it.

There are too many riddles and too many psychological and linguistic descriptions of supporting characters. . . But it's not a group portrait, and the priority is unclear. As a reader, I just want to see all kinds of vests and identities appear on stage and have a grand curtain call, instead of just passing by like a flowing stream of water.

It is recommended that the author first write a traditional fantasy novel about leveling up and fighting monsters to practice until he can express a plot completely and clearly before thinking of anything else. As an author, your basic skills cannot be compensated by just relying on your imagination. You must at least let readers understand what you are writing.

That Tang Huanhuan instigated others to commit crimes and was caught doing it. Nothing happened?

Very radio, it's okay if it's right, but it's so confusing if it's not right I often write about adding a setting, and suddenly a younger sister is added. The younger sister is still a Riddler, and her strength is also erratic. The later settings are added to make it a little more reasonable Suddenly becoming the second young master of a big family, this is not bad, there are some hints in the front The plot also jumps suddenly, it is about summer camp at the beginning, but in the end it is actually Military training plus, during the competition, sniper smashed the wall, RPGs can explode, but the person was hit, unhurt, just lying on the ground means that he is "dead" I don't even know what this plot is about when the actors touch porcelain. Is it forced to show off and describe the Yu family and the summer camp in profile? . . It's really too radioactive

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The introduction to this book states that it is an infinite novel, but in fact the author has only written about one world so far. Because the scene of the incident is a militarized summer camp, it feels a bit like the urban high school student King of Soldiers The author's character creation is good, but sometimes the description always makes people feel that there is something missing. Although the lack of that point does not affect the story, there is still that sense of deficiency. I haven't finished it yet. The protagonist is planning to kill several old immortals from the consortium. The protagonist is a genius and a cheater. The only weakness is that the protagonist does not want to abandon this body, which means that the protagonist has no worries. However, the author has not arranged the protagonist's escape route, at least not directly given it. The protagonist's cheating needs to follow the system. The summer camp scene at the beginning is the mission location given by the system. I remembered again the real-person chicken game in some novel, what was it called? It feels like a hidden world, a hidden sect, or a hidden family. The current power of the protagonist is relatively weak in my opinion. Because he does not want to trigger a world war, he does not use military force or family power (at least not on a large scale), so the protagonist has very few powers. The protagonist's own power is not the kind of one-man destruction of stars, and there is no means of secretly stabbing and killing people. The protagonist's fight against the consortium always gives people a sense of insignificance. The protagonist does not really control the power, at least for a modern country, his power is too weak, his opponent is too strong, and the protagonist is said to be outside the world, but there is no force, and there are not enough events to support this detached image and concept. When reading, readers will naturally think that he only exists in this world and will only consider the power of his world. The power outside the world is systematic and not his. I suggest that the author write about reincarnation as an immortal and reincarnation as a god next time. I feel that the setting is almost the same. The urban water is too deep and you can't control it.

(ー ー゛) I touched a sister quickly, but the PS crashed, let's just watch it

This is too watery. Several chapters can't cover a single theme.

I'm a bit confused. I don't understand making money here. What is the meaning of making money? The family is so powerful. They are still trying their best to make money, and they don't even mention the use. I don't understand.

I was confused, I thought it was 500, but it turned out to be 200, and I was stuck for 2 months.

So what is the name?