Create a Timeline in the Ninja World

How to say it? I just took a look and found that I can't use my hands, my eyes have been blind for three years and my body is weak enough, and I haven't returned to Konoha yet because I'm in coma for ten days and a half. How can there be so many people on the battlefield to take care of the sick protagonist? Wouldn't it be good to just return to Konoha and slowly develop it? Also, wouldn't it be better to change the blind eye to the one that was blind three days ago? Ordinary people who are blind in one eye should be healed in about half a year.

The thing that puzzles me the most is that the protagonist uses the transformation technique to turn into a pendant and put it on the shadow clone. This is not the seventy-two transformations of Sun Wukong. The transformation technique in Naruto is a blind trick. How can you really become a real egg by transforming into an egg through the transformation technique? The transformation technique cannot change the mass, body size, genes and body structure. If the transformation technique is really so awesome, it must be described in Naruto. If the transformation technique is really so awesome, Naruto's style of painting is: Isn't it nice for me to directly turn into a bird and fly away with the transformation technique? What kind of flying psychic beast do I want! When the team encounters an enemy and is defeated, everyone uses the transformation technique to turn into an egg to change their size and weight. Wouldn't it be nice to have one person run away holding twenty or thirty teammates who have turned into eggs? When I encounter an enemy, I can use the transformation technique to directly change my genetic form into a big toad, a big snake, or a big slug. Isn't it delicious?

I've just read half a chapter and I have to complain. I don't hate loser protagonists, but at least you have to be a reasonable loser. At least you know the basic settings of the original work. Can't injured muscles be completely healed? The palm senjutsu can completely heal without leaving any scars, and the meridians are not damaged, nor are they struck by the Wind Release Rasen Shuriken, and how could the Uchiha clan allow their own people's supplies to be damaged? Moreover, people are generally self-sufficient, and supplies should be handed over through members of the clan. Moreover, the eye was injured for three years, but it was not removed even if it could not be cured. It is still producing pus. It is outrageous. A normal person would have been blind in both eyes for three years.

If you told Minato about Uchiha Madara's existence, Sarutobi and Hiruzen would also know about it. Then the surveillance you are under will definitely be more serious than now. If you tell Minato to rescue Obito, what's the use?

I stopped reading halfway through the first chapter. Waste material is no longer popular nowadays.

Qianming crossed his arms and asked: "Zhisui, do you remember how much bread you have eaten? " "Remember, one pound." Zhisui nodded and said. "Oh." Qianming nodded, and then asked: "Do you remember eating a big snake?" "Snake? Snake meat is a good food, but snake meat is too unpalatable. I haven't eaten it since I was a child." Shisui said. "Really." Qianming said: "Then, let me tell you a story. This story is that someone once ate a giant python and used its internal organs to make poison. However, that poison was just an ordinary medicine for snakes and was of no use at all." "Oh." Shisui still nodded to show that he understood.

There are a lot of poisonous points, but most of them are not important It is mainly to promote the plot. The protagonist wants to be Hokage, but he is disgusted anyway! The image of a swordsman who pursues force has been well described and very profound. Suddenly his style of painting changed and he began to pursue power It was just fame. After becoming strong, wouldn't it be enough to kill thousands of people during the Ninja World War? Who dares to touch Uchiha while you are alive? And there are so many ways to become Hokage, it's disgusting to watch. It's nothing more than various tragedies of change, somewhat like the Holy Mother, and then killing a wave of high-level officials in Konoha. To be honest, I almost vomited when I saw it. It's too deliberate. You can obviously take people away, or the strength of a protagonist in Konoha is his own. It has nothing to do with you, just hang it up! I chose to be Hokage Just like Xuan Yi in the Godzilla book, the writing is perfect, no one dares to mess with it, and no one interferes with the plot for the sake of so-called feelings. Everything is natural, plain but exciting.

After reading dozens of chapters, the plot changes somewhat inexplicably. I just set up the Sword Saint character, thinking that I would rely on cheats to become a decisive and decisive warrior, but suddenly I said I wanted to be Hokage? The reason is that he thinks he can do it? ? ? Have you forgotten how miserable it was without strength before there were plug-ins? Have you forgotten how you were slapped to death in your first life as a sword master? The weather has cleared up and the rain has stopped. Do you feel you can do it again?

Big idea, bad writing, I didn't read it

In a world where ninjas dig out your eyes and put them on directly, your right eye has been injured for three years and is still bleeding...😅

It's too wasteful, leaving no room for development and no sense of risk control. Although the plot is compact and interesting, it can also be tiring, and the luck of not dying many times makes people feel too lucky.

Every time I see the protagonist claiming to be the worst time traveler, I feel uneasy. If it is the worst, can you successfully travel through time?

What I want to see is that you open the timeline and gain strength, and show off in the real world. Rather than the real world that you mainly write about, the first part of the game where the swordsman returns to the village is still interesting, but forget about it after that. When a gun appears in the first act, in the third act you have to let it fire, otherwise you won't write about the gun.

Is the world where the protagonist's clone lives in a different timeline or a different world line? If only the timelines were different, the Butterfly Effect would change the world of the protagonist a lot. Can the author really grasp it? I prefer world line changes. Starting from the protagonist's arrival in that timeline, the changes in the plot caused that time period to evolve into another parallel world. In this way, the butterfly effect will not change the collapse of the protagonist's current time period. Even if there is this kind of world correction power that can force the world to a normal plot, some things that have been changed still cannot be changed back. For example, the school left by the sword master Chiaki in the first time period, I feel is a foreshadowing, and it should appear later. Also, the father of Senju Chiaki in the latest chapters is not dead. Either Hashirama was born without Asura chakra, or Hashirama was born late. If Hashirama was born later, Madara will usually be born later. This impact is still a bit big. Then there is the White Zetsu Chiaki in that future time period. If it is a timeline, when the original Chiaki reaches that time period, will he meet the White Zetsu Chiaki in that time period?

I finally understand why there are so many bad reviews. I read it in one sitting before, and it was pretty good in a hurry. Now that I'm reading more, I've discovered that there are even fewer books. It's not like I'm just reading your book. It feels like it's really confusing.

The writing is very good, I recommend reading more The masterpiece Naruto has many bright characters. Everyone has his own life and is the protagonist of his own life, just like a star in the long river of history. When I watched Naruto, I was thinking, if it were me, what could I do? Can he get more help? The different timelines of each clone create the possibility of trying this way. Entering different timelines seems to be helping those fleeting meteors feel that they can make up for their shortcomings. Completing the regrets of these "protagonists". Let that star become even brighter. However, I just read it today. I saw some book friends complaining about it (it was so confusing and I couldn't understand it). There seemed to be a lot of such troubles. I don't have such troubles at the moment Then I suggest the author to write more. Maybe it can be solved🙈🙉🙊

But now, mastering senjutsu may threaten Konoha guys or Uchiha Chiaki! This made it difficult for Jiraiya. He really hopes that Konoha can have a strong armed force so that it can fight against those "enemies" who appear from nowhere. This is Konoha's dream and Konoha's mission. But if Chiaki Uchiha masters celestial magic, what may happen in the future will be unpredictable! After all, Uchiha Chiaki is an Uchiha, so Jiraiya can't guarantee whether Uchiha Chiaki will play tricks on Konoha! Such a dangerous person. He must not be allowed to stay in Konoha, otherwise Konoha will really be in disaster! "However, the problem now is not to worry about whether he will play tricks on Konoha, but how to get rid of him!" Jiraiya secretly muttered: "How to make him disappear in Konoha?" This problem is difficult.

Looking at Chapter 30, the evaluation of this book currently only has one word for the writing style: "awkward". If it is awkward, it can be deducted from three bedrooms and one living room 😅

A strange feeling of suffocation, I should push it aside, why bother and not settle it?

How should I put it? It's very interesting, but when several timelines are repeatedly interspersed for a long time, do you use the timelines to learn ninjutsu, or do you develop at the same time? Personally, I think it's like writing multiple time-travel novels in one book, which is a bit confusing.

As expected, people like Uchiha Itachi cannot be cleansed. The creators of the comics have said that he is a real ninja - you know everything you need to know about what a real ninja is like. The ninjas in Naruto are just weak, but the strong are the nobles among nobles. Uchiha Itachi is the heir to the most bloody ninja clan in Konoha, but he is willing to humble himself. I am really speechless.

He is obviously Hokage, but the protagonist also focuses on swordsmanship, and basically has no ninjutsu, which makes it look awkward.

? ? ? What's going on, it's over?

Looking forward to the next one, keep working hard

I suggest that we set up a book club group to make it easier for people to complain about anything they want to complain about.

Hey, what about the main god? All of us are one, with a beginning and no end.

There is no need to talk nonsense, this is fan fiction. Anyone who knows how to read fan fiction knows the original work. The author's explanation is just superfluous. No one likes others nagging in their ears.

. . . ? ? ? ? A eunuch?

I feel that after it was put on the shelves, it looked a bit messy and I don't know why I wrote a plot about Asura, which was very abrupt.

When will you publish a new book? I like your style and will support it. This book was finished as soon as I saw it on the shelves!