Heavens: I Want to Live Forever

It's very well written, good writing style, keep up the good work! But if you have nothing to do, please update it quickly, it's not enough

As I write and write, it becomes a wilderness again.

Hiding Xu Xiaojian's power? Still pretending to be a fool and not being discovered for more than ten years? You are taking the readers for fools. It's impossible for someone with such intelligence to go out without someone above King Kong to follow you. You can only go out secretly for one night, and you have to go home during the day. You can't get out of a city. The whole city is surrounded by Xu Xiao's spies. How can you not be discovered? You're wrong about the basic logic. Everything behind it is nonsense. It doesn't make sense at all.

The writing is generally good, but there are some contradictions. You have been hiding for 20 years. Well, I stopped hiding it at the beginning of the plot. You hide it from your father and your brothers and sisters, but you don't hide it from the maids around you. You can also develop your power under Xu Xiao's nose without being discovered. There are too many logical contradictions.

Isn't it possible to write a book without treating the readers as fools?

Since there is a will of the world against the protagonist, why not travel through time and let's go straight to the finale?

If you don't listen to Shen Nong's words, you will be poisoned before your eyes. Arsenic is not as poisonous as this book

Chapter 4 started to turn directly into a dog licker

Chapter 2: Death from poison, the former one, confidant, maid Shunxin, the only one who knows that the protagonist is not simple. The latter one, the confidant among his confidants, the maid Cai Yue, is the only one who knows the protagonist's ins and outs. Where are the matryoshka dolls here? In other words, learn from Lu Xun: There are two trees in front of my house, one is a jujube tree, and the other is also a jujube tree.

It would be boring if every time you changed the world, your meridians would be cut off and you would lose all your skills and become a child. You would have to start over again every time. Where is the symbol of immortality in the title of your book?

Although it is set in the snow, the content caught me off guard. In what age does this old-fashioned bloody plot still exist? The author should work hard. 886

Poisonous, extremely poisonous. There was not a single chapter in the book that didn't persuade me to quit. The author is testing the reader's IQ. No one who suffered from cerebral hemorrhage for ten years could write this thing.

Another studio product must be a waste product!

It's a good thing to say, but it's unconscionable. It's a bad thing to say, and I can't write it.

It was good to look like a strategist, but in Chapter 4, he turned into a licker. Can you believe it?

Who gave him the confidence to establish such a big influence without the knowledge of Xu Xiao? Do you believe that Xu Xiao will know how many times he farts during the day at night. If Lao Xu had concealed it from someone so high, Lao Xu would have died long ago.

I vomited when I saw my first love... It turned out to be a dog licking too! ! !

It's so poisonous that I really can't bear it. Withdrawn.

There is no established force above Tianxiang in the snow. It should be because there are no doors at all, or they were destroyed halfway. There are too many big guys from all sides, and they are all plotting.

The title of the book is wrong,,, the first one can live forever in the snow, and then you will have the prehistoric times. What kind of seeking immortality is this? You have to travel through ordinary cities and ordinary martial arts. Only this kind of world deserves to be called seeking immortality.

Well written, don't write anymore

I have to admit that the quality of Dian Niang's novels has dropped by more than half now. The author probably updated it. It's really poisonous. It's like pretending to be a pig and eating a tiger, but it's not like that. It's like being brainless and low-key and pretending to be cool. It's not like that either. The preface doesn't match the afterword.

Thunder is rolling, Shennong 999

The beginning is so vicious. If you had a golden finger, I would still be able to accept your behavior.

You are still hiding your clumsiness. You think Huang Sanjia is just a decoration.

Such a big and strong man talks about me every day. . . It's just a little gangster character.

I get annoyed when I see someone in the snow, so I try to show off

How to say it? There are too many words, and the language description is too straightforward. It is basically the kind of straightforward writing that unfolds all the inner drama. I have not read Snow in the Snow, but I just feel that I can write such a highly praised novel as "If God Didn't Give Me Li Chungang, the Way of the Sword is Like the Long Night", it will definitely not be like this. In addition, it was the first time I encountered a novel that was also unreadable besides the first-person novel at the starting point. The two are very similar.

It's very well written, I hope to update it more

Compared with Qingyun Supreme, the difference is not even a little bit, it is too far.