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I also want to ask the author why this book has so many bad sentences and some unclear ideas? This is beyond my comprehension and is poisonous from beginning to end. This makes me, a serious reader of books, very depressed. To be honest, when I read a book, I actually follow the author's thoughts. I can see from the beginning and the end that the author actually wants to write a book that is not a book that can be read without a head. You can find this out by reading this Please don't care about the lyrics. I have a habit of reading books to listen to songs, because I think some soothing or passionate music can better mobilize my emotions. This can make my thinking more active, allow me to better sort out the plot, and greatly improve my level of empathy. It can also relieve the boringness of reading alone. Here I recommend that everyone give it a try Okay, here we should continue to talk about some areas that need improvement in this book, and some small poisonous points You can see that I have made some marks. This is usually the case when I read books. In the first chapter, I will look at it carefully and carefully, and then judge whether the author wants to write a brainless article or a thoughtful article, and then decide to read it carefully or take a rough look based on your own judgment. I read every novel seriously, Of course we won't read the ones that I think are boring and not good-looking Sorry for going off topic, let's get back to the topic, I marked some typos and some toxic points, I hope the author can read it, and I hope the author can change it First of all, let's talk about the first toxic point, of course it's what I don't like, please don't criticize me. At the beginning, the author compares the pouring rain with the small border town. This is a good point. If used well, it will have a sense of hierarchy. However, maybe the author's writing style is not yet mature, and it seems a bit strange inexplicably. I won't criticize too much I'll just talk about how I think it should be changed. Generally speaking, when writing this kind of sentence, you need to find a descriptive subject, and then use another thing to set off that subject. From this sentence, we can know that the author wants to emphasize that heavy rain is incompatible with this small border town. Generally, this kind of sentence is called obvious and has a clear subject. However, the author obviously has no subject, which makes the sentence have no sense of hierarchy. This shows that the author's writing style is still too immature, but it can also be seen that he is careful. After all, what is the use of using so many descriptions and methods in a perfunctory work? Of course, I have read the following content and added it together to judge. Now I will only give you one page. You may not understand why I say that the author is careful I will explain it to you slowly later, but first I want to make a suggestion to you and the author. When writing a novel or an essay, I suggest writing it first and reviewing it twice. What does it mean? The first thing is to write, and the second thing is to review. After writing it once, it is recommended to review it carefully to check for any missing words or typos. The author made this mistake in this novel. He probably didn't review it a second time, because there were missing words, omissions, and typos in the back. I suggest the author change it Now let's talk about how to improve this. First of all, the author's original text was It was raining heavily and it seemed out of place in this small border town. In this small town, there are only a handful of rainy times throughout the year, and most of them are light rains in spring and summer. But why is it like this today? Heavy rain in winter. Heavy rain in winter is very strange. Do you feel awkward after watching it? This is actually mainly because the author's sentence segmentation and application are wrong. Look at what I changed In winter, it rained heavily in this border town. It was different from the light rain that usually concentrated in spring and summer in the past, so it seemed out of place in this border town. Okay, the changes are complete here. Everything that should be included has been included. Basically, I can add everything that is missing. However, some people may still ask why the following paragraphs, which are very strange, are not added? This is about a setting of a novel, a common setting. That is the narration. We can see that the author writes the narration. It is very easy. What is the setting of the narration? is used to introduce the background and story, so he should not have any questioning sentences, because the narration plays the role of telling the story. You shouldn't use question words. If you insist on adding such words, I will usually add one person to tell the story. For example In winter, it rained heavily in this border town. It was different from the light rain that usually concentrated in spring and summer in the past, so it seemed out of place in this border town. In the heavy rain, there was a small teahouse opposite this border town, and a group of people inside sat together and chatted about something Old Li, what do you think happened today? Why is it raining so hard? In previous years, it would only rain a little in spring and summer, but in winter there is not even a drop of rain, and it is snow. Why did it rain today, and it rained so hard? It's really strange. After hearing what he said again, other people in the restaurant, including Lao Li, because they all knew each other and lived in the same neighborhood, they started chatting along this topic I won't write the rest, because it's too much. I'm not afraid of you guys laughing when I say it. I wrote these words for more than half an hour. It's almost midnight, and it's almost dawn after a few hours. I have to sleep after all, so I won't finish them one by one, waiting for you to discover them by yourself. When the time comes, we can discuss it together here. I am brave enough to come here and give it a general summary based on the film, having watched the whole film. Anyway, if you watch it carefully, you should find that the author writes seriously, with good intentions but immature writing style. This also made me, an old bookworm who has not written reviews all year round, develop some love for talents, so I wrote this review. I hope it can be seen by the author and let him revise it. I have read two unfinished novels by him, and this is the third one. I hope he will stop being unfinished and continue writing well. By the way, let me briefly tell you about the poisonous points of this book. Other than the missing words and missing words, the immature use of sentences, and some inexplicable feelings that a large paragraph is missing in the middle, I haven't found any poisonous points. By the way, the author also forcibly added emojis, which made me feel a little embarrassed when I looked at it. It is also a poisonous point. Okay, I can't continue writing and I don't have time to write anymore. I hope the author doesn't end up unfinished. After all, he still put a lot of effort into it, even though his writing style is immature.