I Have a Sword That Can Kill Thousands of Immortals

Not a time traveler? I feel like the writing is a bit out of touch with the world, a bit like a child's

The sauce is bubbling, a cup of milk tea, hot popcorn, crispy snow cakes, raisins, and a small bench in the front row to read a big book ~ By the way, please visit each other ^_^

Will traditional fantasy literature eventually become lonely?

The main character has too few scenes. Often we don't see the main character in a few chapters, and all the scenes are supporting characters, as if the main character is the narrator. I thought of appearing for a while, without any sense of presence, and always supporting the supporting characters! There is also a time-traveler who is over 30 years old in two lifetimes. He blushes whenever he sees a woman and doesn't know what's wrong! You don't have to ask how well the protagonist is written, but make sure that the IQ and EQ are within the normal range.

The protagonist's time travel is a complete failure. He might as well have been born and raised in the country from the beginning. In his two lives, he was still so childish and timid, and he blushed when he saw a woman.

This time traveler looks like a fool

It looks very weird. The protagonist doesn't look like someone who traveled through time. His knowledge and every move he makes looks like a beggar child who was born and raised here.

The writing is good, but there are too few protagonist roles. The protagonist is Li Yu'an, not Li Yun or Zi Qingshan. The protagonist's name only appears a few times in dozens of chapters. If it is a war story, forget it. After all, you rely on your subordinates to do things. In a fantasy novel, the protagonist has few roles, his realm has not yet risen, and the background is explained too hastily. Do you understand it? Released all at once, do you think this is a mystery article, giving clues? The main plot has not yet been clarified, but there are a lot of branch plots. It would be fine if the branch plots were explained clearly. It is half-story, without cause and effect, and it is the same Riddler. This doesn't look like the main text, the outline is almost the same.

Under the guise of a time-traveling protagonist, I write online articles about my previous life.

Which author came to open a small account again? His writing style is completely different from that of a newcomer. The writing is really beautiful. Please give me your large account 😏

This. . . The author might as well cancel the time-travel setting. The protagonist in the article does not behave like a person who has traveled through time for more than ten years. Instead, he is a native teenager.

After reading Chapter 24 in one go, there is only one point worth mentioning, let's set up the protagonist's time-travel setting. It's not necessary. Even if we want to set up a time-travel setting, let's wait until he awakens later. Is it just the protagonist? Time traveler?

The character of the protagonist is really hard to describe in one sentence, he just licks beautiful women when he sees them. . .

It's better to cut off the identity of the time traveler. It's not that time travelers are so awesome. It's good to grow slowly. The protagonist's personality is also good. In my last life plus this life, I was almost thirty. From the moment of time travel, for more than ten years, my mind was still like that of a child. . . . Think about it, a grown man in his thirties is like a teenager. Even an innocent heart doesn't play like this. It's better to see the identity of the time traveler. And most importantly. Is this really the protagonist? I saw more than forty pictures. The male protagonist doesn't have many roles. The mind is not growing. The cultivation base is still so small. The story is entirely supported by supporting characters. There is no need for the male protagonist to be so awesome. At least be more involved in the advancement of the story. After watching it for so long. I almost forgot about the male protagonist.

The biggest problem for the author is writing a bunch of characters, but there is only one update every day. If I start writing other characters, almost a week will pass when it is the next turn of the protagonist, and I don't even remember who the protagonist is. How about the author write a few characters and update them.

It's not that cool, what I wrote was just to cater to the movie.

Is the male protagonist too stupid? He doesn't really trust the purple villain who shares his destiny. He feels dissatisfied with his desire to seize the time to improve his strength, but he is willing to believe in Qin Yuan just by seeing his majestic side

After looking at dozens of photos, the protagonist was completely in disgrace and completely disgraced the army of time-travelers! What the hell! I can only say goodbye!

Before it was put on the shelf, the writing was actually pretty good, and it had a bit of flavour. After it was put on the shelves, a bunch of women came out and fell in love with each other. It was really off-putting to see. Abandoned

The writing at the beginning is really good, but as you get to the back, it becomes more and more naive. I feel like the writing is not advancing but retreating.

After reading the first three chapters, maybe the only problem is that there's not much to see, there's no sense of expectation, and it's not that exciting either.

The author is great, is there a female protagonist? I actually want to read a romantic love story in traditional fantasy. Let's have a heroine, ｡◕‿◕｡

The writing is good, but it's a eunuch. The downfall is that it's really not okay to fall in love with a woman when you see her. This kind of writing is no longer popular now.

Why do I feel that the author's writing style fluctuates between high and low? After reading sixty chapters, the writing was quite good at first. After chapter fifty, the writing obviously declined. It was like a different person. The writing became whiter and the writing became more messy. In addition, if the emotional and inner scenes are not well written, write less. Moreover, this protagonist is really embarrassing to the time traveler. He does not look like someone who is several decades old, but he is just a childish child in his teens.

Let's discuss it and update it twice a day 😚

I think he fits Li Jinyan quite well. The green dragon halberd made me uncomfortable.

The first chapter is a little bit about that. Sweet potatoes are easy to grow. The starch content is very high. Before hybrid rice existed in China, it still had a certain proportion of the credit for being able to feed so many people in China. And you are guarding the golden mountain and still go begging?

Let me tell you, the author is no longer a eunuch, but found that writing books could not support himself, so he chose to write novels while being a cowherd. The reason why there is no update now may be because...