One Piece World: Go with the Flow

These are just some of my opinions and suggestions, I hope the author will adopt them. Author, your ideas can be written with reference to "Dark General". From what I saw in your latest chapter, it seems that you want the protagonist to have a fight with the navy, but in fact I think this can be omitted because it is inconsistent with the protagonist's original intention. The protagonist originally just wanted to survive in this world. , And then gradually became more ambitious due to the improvement of his strength, and he did not take everyone seriously. I would like the author to modify this kind of character, such as witnessing the ups and downs of human relationships in the world, and only after traveling in the sea of ​​prisons, he can gain his original intention. This way, it will not be difficult to write, and it will be easier to read. Finally, it's about capability development. Author, have you ever thought about being armed in a subtle way? Put the armed color into all the cells in the human body, and then all the cells will spontaneously produce the armed color, endlessly, the color of seeing and hearing is combined with the brain. We must know that our human brain itself can predict the world in 1/5 second. The overlord color can be awakened after the protagonist travels around the world. The development of fruit abilities can be combined with the development of the sight color. Finally, you can edit the author's own world background based on the current known background of One Piece. I think you are the author of your final outline. You will definitely confront the World Government and Imu. I think it will be easier to write by combining the background with the information. Another thing is that no one likes those who are superior, because they are all ordinary people, so just be ordinary and ordinary.

Much better than other pirate novels

Regarding the heroine, my two favorite pirate novels are One Piece: The Dark General and I'm Really Not Interested in Devil Fruits. The two books describe the heroine in different ways. Dark General is a relatively short story. The heroine is not a vase, but her role is not deliberately increased. She mainly focuses on her career strength (I personally like this way of writing, after all, I don't want the protagonist with a healthy body to be a eunuch for the rest of his life 🤫, but the heroine has many roles, so it is easy to be disliked, so it is borderline). I'm really not interested in Devil Fruits. That book has more writing (the heroines are Robin and the Empress), but the characters are well drawn, and the story of the protagonist's journey along the way is also well written. I didn't read the book "I Don't Want to Be a General". I felt that the main character was a bit of a pervert, and the supporting characters were seriously dull, but the results were pretty good, but it just wasn't to my taste. I didn't know if there was a female protagonist in that book. I personally feel that it is not recommended for female protagonists to be original. First of all, the original character's personality must be established by the author himself. This is a big test for the writing style, and it may not be likable. There are not so many things about the characters in the original work. The characters are already standing there. The author just doesn't want to overwrite the character. (In fact, I think this is quite difficult. As the story develops, many authors will let the original characters grow, but it is not obvious in the text, resulting in sudden changes in the character's personality in the readers' eyes 🤭). The original characters already have a certain fan base, and the author's choice of Bellemere is very good. There is no need to change it, just keep writing. It doesn't matter if you have a personal attitude towards Devil Fruit. After all, everyone has their own opinions on whether to eat it or not. As long as the writing is good, there is no need to say that eating the fruit means abandoning the book. What if the author develops a very unique character? This kind of thing still depends on the quality of the book! No need to be so extreme

People will age, no matter how strong the body is, it will fail, the soul will not be able to withstand the passage of time and will become corrupted, mutated and smelly. No matter how evil it is, it will continue to rise like weeds. What to do, swing the hammer, and every time it will forge the belief in saving the common people into the iron bone. What to do, step on the bellows, every gust of wind will blow your thoughts of redemption into the furnace. What to do, quench it with oil with your bare hands. Every sound of quenching will quench the achievements of your life into the blade. This body is made of forged swords. My body disappears into smoke, and no one knows my name. All the things I forged return to dust. This blade is only forged by common people.

Personally, I feel that this is a very good pirate fanfic. The characters in it are vivid and flesh-and-blood. Even the plot in the garbage dump is very hard-working. A few lines of dialogue reflect the style of One Piece, and the creation of Jon is also very successful. It has the taste of a pirate. Luffy always lived in a tavern at the beginning. I was also surprised that the daily guide gave me a fairy grass pirate fanfic.

Pushing the City suddenly crashed before it was released. I felt that it was indeed fate that manipulated people, whether it was about eating people or blowing up the heads of colleagues. This evil came out of the blue and out of nowhere. Who said in the first place: Those who were killed by my sword deserved to die.

There won't be a female protagonist, and if there is, it won't be the same old ones. I hope there won't be a female protagonist, and even if there is, let's create an original one. As we all know, the most popular pirate novels are all about those women, and they are all so domineering that they fall in love with each other and have a heart-to-heart relationship with them. The high-end pirate novels all have their own original female protagonists.

Overall, the protagonist is a person with no faith, flexible bottom line, and extremely selfish person. It can be said that he is a black beard without goals. The protagonist used to be a good person just because the benefits of being a good person were greater, but now the previous approach can no longer bring obvious benefits to the protagonist, so the protagonist has changed his behavior. The protagonist's kindness towards Robin, Will and others is more like the kindness towards a cute stray cat from a person who neither likes nor hates cats.

This is just following the crowd, this is chaos and evil

I really regret subscribing. What age are we now? Come back to amnesia flow? ? ? ?

Isn't amnesia just like changing the protagonist? Poison, goodbye

I really lost my memory after vomiting. How can such a strong person lose his memory now? Even if a golden lion has a rudder stuck on his head, I haven't seen him lose his memory, which makes me unable to stand it anymore.

It can be seen that the author wants to create a protagonist who is decisive and decisive, but the writing is slightly lacking and there is too little foreshadowing. I can only see a character who does not recognize his relatives, and there is really a lack of sense of substitution.

I feel like my writing was pretty good before I ate Piaopiao Fruit, but recently I feel like I don't know what I want to express. On the one hand, the author updates a little less, only once a day. On the other hand, there is not much content in this update, so it will have no impact at all if you don't read it. I hope the author can write more in the future. I am still looking forward to this book.

Seeing the section of Impel Down, one cannot or at least should not

1. What the heck is it to run away immediately after learning something. 2. The protagonist's abilities and talents are kept secret by Zefa. He became an elite lieutenant general before graduation. Such talents do not need to be reported to the superiors. Especially after two years of teaching, if the protagonist has the idea of ​​​​leaving, will he still support him? 3. White-eyed wolf character, he can still talk to himself, has no goals, no motivation, nonsense, has he been ignorant of external intelligence for so long?

I just saw the story about casually killing guards for Piaopiao Fruits. I have a few questions for the author. What is the difference between the protagonist who kills innocent people and the pirates who die in his hands? How could Bellemere and Zefa associate with such people if they don't agree with each other? How will their relationship be handled in the future?

I watched some. Just arrived at the golden lion part. The protagonist is simply Chaos Evil. What you did was off the charts. Extremely selfish and self-centered. Of course it is self-centered and cannot be said to be wrong. But the protagonist is really interesting to watch... Killing pirates, you can't be wrong. But it's one-sided and thinks that all pirates deserve to die... This is wrong. There is a lot I want to say, but I can't. It always feels weird, the protagonist's concept is really...

Are you still playing Amnesia Stream? Fortunately, I only subscribed for a few chapters, bye

The more I watched the One Piece anime, the less I liked Luffy. Instead, I thought Blackbeard was better than Luffy. The more I watched the Wano Country, the more I wanted to destroy Kaido.

Daily poisoning actually gave me this fairy grass, which was the first time.

The characteristic of One Piece is that it has Devil Fruit. If you don't eat the fruit, the essence will be lost 😎. Please arrange it for the protagonist.

Fortunately I haven't subscribed, it looks like I'm going to switch it off

The quality of the later ones is not as good as the early ones. Did someone else write it after I subscribed? It was a waste of my subscription money.

There is no need to write several female characters. Is it just to show the protagonist's ruthlessness? Has the protagonist's personality changed too much from before, from neutral to dark? The protagonist's current personality makes people want to watch it. Maybe his values ​​are different.

. . Nothing to complain about, see you in the next one

Come on, as long as you ensure quality and have a lot of chapters, this book will definitely become popular. Wait until you finish creating One Piece. Looking forward to your creation of Death or Naruto😜

What I like the most is that the main characters of Japanese comics use Chinese names. This is the so-called sense of substitution. It would be better to use "I" even further. Hahaha. Missing.

Come on, author, keep updating every day and you will get more and more readers.

Adjusting the mentality is very important for the protagonist.