The Han of Ji Shall Rise

When a woman invites her father to celebrate her birthday, she feels like a brothel girl who wants to betray her. If she writes about governing the world, she writes about governing the world. She pretends to be a slap in the face and chases women. It is not popular in the Three Kingdoms to chase women. If you don't have a heroine, it's fine if you have a woman. During the war years, women are everywhere, and I have to turn into a licking dog and pretend to be a poem to attract hatred.

I feel that the current pace of this book is a bit problematic. I understand that the author's current description is to pave the way for the protagonist to become famous and establish a network of relationships. After all, the protagonist cannot be recruited for no reason. But when constructing the plot, did the author consider that the protagonist came to Chengdu spontaneously and proactively, with the purpose of being appreciated by Zhuge Liang and recruited by the imperial court. In this case, the protagonist should take the initiative to do something to gain fame. This was normal for that era, and it was also a way for talents to recommend themselves under the inspection system. The plot described by the author is not like this. After the protagonist comes to Chengdu, things are bumping into the protagonist instead of the protagonist. It seems that the protagonist has no initiative and has nothing to do all day long. Then opportunities and relationships automatically bump into each other. Is it really such a coincidence? Such an unreasonable plot arrangement makes the story feel particularly mechanical, and at the same time makes people feel that the story is very dragging, because the story is developed for the sake of development and lacks the subjective initiative of the protagonist. Everything is obviously arranged by "God" and lacks Reasonable causal relationship, in this case, readers will feel that it is all a rigid arrangement anyway, so it is better to skip these rigid foreshadowings and directly enter the main plot, that is, enter the Prime Minister's Palace and start participating in national affairs. That way, at least they can see what the readers want to see faster.

Let's briefly talk about the issue of guarding the street pavilion. Three Kingdoms clearly stated that it was "going against the crowd", which shows that there are many people who oppose it. If the protagonist also opposes it, it probably won't have much effect. If you accompany Ma Su to guard, Wang Ping has already done a good job, and it is difficult to do better than Wang Ping. Look at how the author handles it here. In fact, I feel that defeat in the Battle of Jieting is difficult to avoid. Ma Su is very capable from all aspects. The failure to defend Jieting is mostly due to objective reasons. So it is recommended that the protagonist clean up the mess in the Battle of Jieting, such as capturing Qishan Gui early to maintain the current success, such as persuading You Chu to surrender and put more troops where they are more needed, etc. Try to save Ma Su's life, after all, he is the protagonist's friend.

In fact, it is not recommended for newcomers to write about the Shu-Han Dynasty. It is no less difficult to unify the Central Plains than the Yan Kingdom to destroy the Qin Dynasty. Moreover, readers' view of the problem has changed now. Liu Bei and Zhuge Liang cannot compare with the huge Wei Dynasty in terms of developing people's livelihood or military affairs. The fault tolerance rate is too low. In the end, they even copied Liu Bang's copper coin policy and no longer care about the life and death of the people. Liu Bei's background is also very problematic. His nominal ancestor is so talented that he doesn't know anything about it. The fact that Goat Gong is still alive and becomes his own boss also shows that the Shu Kingdom no longer cares about restoring the Han Dynasty. Liu Bei needs a large number of rewards to win over people before he can take over. Moreover, the conflicts between foreign generals like Liu Bei and local aristocratic forces are all a lot of flaws. Writers of trumpets who don't have a backing up usually can't deal with the shortcomings well. The most important thing for all trumpet authors is to attract as many readers as possible. Those authors who complain that they can't bear to go out and turn right are basically limited to V5 (I know one that has basically started the others). If you want to practice, it is recommended to go to the light novel Harry Potter and Naruto 🏴‍☠️These three can write results.

If you want to show off by copying, why not copy Tao Yuanming, Wang Xizhi, Cao Zhi, and Xie Lingyun in a down-to-earth manner? ? ? If that doesn't work, copy a Tang poem. If the Three Kingdoms were to reorganize the Song lyrics, how could you not reorganize the lyrics? I might even praise Jay Chou for his good job! What a pity for such good writing.

An ancient woman invited you to her birthday? ? This is a whore

If you don't help the Han Dynasty, you will wear the Three Kingdoms

If it weren't for Liu Chan, there would be no chance of traveling to Shuhan. How could you do it if Wuhou, who is so awesome, couldn't fly you? Just how many novels have you read? It's useless no matter how awesome you are if you're not the boss. Unless you become him and change, there's nothing you can do no matter how awesome you are, because he won't even read your suggestions. How can he have some fun if he doesn't hide and seek with beautiful women?

The writing is actually pretty good, but don't waste the poetry. If you don't know how to change it, don't write this kind of plot.

No, you, the author, don't say whether the writing is good or not. You just give your comments at every turn! What do you mean? Your clumsy and clumsy writing style is already annoying enough, but you still talk nonsense at every turn! Who cares? Do you need to write two chapters to thank cctv?