Dragon Ball: the Starting System Is Out of Order

Isn't the heroine Lan Qi good? There is no need to step on two boats, the boat will split by itself

The heroine android No. 21, I think it's okay

The heroine can be a size 18. Bulma is very beautiful and nice, but to be honest, her personality is not suitable for being a wife. The one she is most suitable for is indeed Vegeta.

The progress of the plot is inexplicable. Some things can be done in one go, but you insist on making accidents without thinking.

I really can't bring a name like Li Ming into the Dragon Ball world

Looking at the final development of Goku and Vegeta, it is actually the development of two paths. One is Goku's martial arts route, and the other is Vegeta's warrior route. No one is higher than the other. After Super Blue, both of them went their own way. First of all, regarding Super Saiyan, you also mentioned in the book that you need S-cells, high combat effectiveness and a calm and pure heart to ensure that S-cells continue to grow. After the protagonist went to the universe, he provoked a lot of enemies, killed everywhere, and was emotionally unstable. The protagonist's heart is not pure to begin with, and his state of mind is not calm. How can it be possible to increase S-cells? Moreover, the higher your combat effectiveness, the fewer S-cells you need. Vegeta also transformed at Bulma's house. He thought that Frieza was dead. He had no hatred and no killing. He only retained a warrior's heart and fell in love with Bulma again, so he could truly calm down. And the protagonist has followed Vegeta's old path. Logically, his S-cells will not increase, so how can he transform. Second, how could Myers teach the protagonist to be at ease. . Maybe the angel likes the protagonist? To put it bluntly, in Myers' eyes, the protagonist's actions are not much different from Frieza's. The only difference is that Frieza's combat power is higher and his ambition is greater. Goku has a sincere heart for martial arts, Vegeta has a sincere warrior heart, and Tianjin Fan is similar to Song Que, who has nothing else but a martial arts heart. The protagonist has an impure heart and is full of distracting thoughts, so it is impossible for Myers to look at him differently. Third, even if Myers gives the protagonist the ultimate freedom, he will not be able to learn it. There are prerequisites. It is a divine control skill. It requires the realm of a god. That is, only by comprehending the breath of god can you be qualified to learn it, not by learning it. With the breath of God, you can understand the breath of God. If you learn the breath of God, you will have the power of God, and you will truly reach the realm where you can fight against the God of Destruction. If you don't have the breath of God, how can you learn the power of God. Fourth, when it comes to the ultimate freedom of mind, we have to talk about earth martial arts. After practicing earth martial arts to a high level, and with the breath of God, you can perfectly connect to the ultimate freedom of mind. When you reach the realm of Kame Sennin, although there is no breath of god, there is a realm similar to freedom of ultimate intention. There are many warriors. The only thing lacking in martial arts practice is the earth. From the martial arts of Kame Sennin to Bobo's heart as still as water, they are all in line with the ultimate freedom of expression. Fifth, regarding the full power of the super match, the protagonist did not dare to fight Frieza in the super match before fighting Gula. The article said that it consumes physical strength, but you are in the full power state. Goku can use full power for 10 days without consuming it. Full power should be the most perfect state of a Saiyan, and it is similar to normal consumption. . How come it consumes so much energy? Sixth, Broly's question. Super's theatrical version has a new Broly chapter, so it can be considered the main chapter. Why did you write an old version of Broly? I can't understand Seventh, Broly is too violent and doesn't understand the ways of the world. The protagonist doesn't know how to teach Broly how to read and digit? In the enlightenment stage, Turtle Sennin will also teach Wukong to learn culture. It doesn't mean that he wants to be a scholar, but at least he can understand the world. The protagonist doesn't even know how to let Broly learn to read? Broly's current mental age is obviously that of a child. If you let Turtle Immortal educate you for a period of time, and let the gods educate you for a period of time, wouldn't it be better than what you taught him? I am nothing. . Some opinions

The plot jumps inexplicably, without any logic. I write whatever comes to mind. The author's own ideas are probably not complete (I mean all the relevant characters in one thing, the images of everyone's actions and thoughts, so detailed that I opened my eyes, propped up the upper body with my hands on the bed, and the quilt fell from the neck to the abdomen. I don't want to describe this paragraph in words, but I have to have this image in my mind when writing the book). Some places are skipped because I don't know how to connect them, and then I just don't write things that everyone should know. The novel is not like this, so why is there a large part of the novel full of nonsense? Just for connection. For example, I go out to play with friends in the morning. This is the author's way of writing. It is too lean and is also a normal way of speaking. But in the novel, you must write it as getting up in the morning, getting dressed, washing up, going out to buy breakfast, and after breakfast to find friends. There are many actions in life that are too repetitive, so we ignore them. If we don't write them down in the novel, they will seem out of touch.

Post it yourself and pretend someone will read it 🙂

In the first few chapters, private goods are added. When did the original Super Saiyan work say anything about squeezing life force? At most, physical strength is exhausted quickly.

Are there too many private goods? This is the first time I heard that Super Saiyan consumes lifespan in exchange for power.

The main character's fighting ability is a little bit uncomfortable for fans. It feels like everyone he meets is a little bit stronger than him.

Super Saiyan 2 and 3 are Kryptonite transformations? These two settings have a certain feeling (leaving aside the original work). If you understand the young Son Gohan and the young Trunks, when you see the enemy, you will be a super two, but you can directly combine to become a super three. The only thing that saves life in the original work is 100x Kaio Fist super blue (used by Sun Wukong when he first dueled with Hit), and his lifespan is shortened only when he is overloaded beyond his body's endurance limit. It's not that you want to make excuses (from the original work), it's just that your second setting is unreasonable, so I'm complaining about it.

It is recommended not to have a female protagonist. If you want a woman, can you turn Vegeta into a girl?

The heroine must have been led astray by Kishimoto. Working in the fields is just a boring social decision. It is even more impossible to find food 90% of the time. Goku in the super is so powerful that he can hunt all over the universe. What kind of treasure can't be obtained normally? Can money on the earth that is exploding all over the place still be money? As long as you want to spend a lifetime in just a few days, the setting has taken you astray. The heroine directly makes her feel the dangers of society and easily leads her through it. Really watch the girl ♀ No one will read these words.

The plot jumps too fast Go up the tower at the beginning Cause, process and result Only the process and result are written You need to read how those fanfics are written

I don't know why you wrote the first two poisonous points, and there's no need for them. For example, eating raw flesh and blood, is this necessary? The system is broken, it is better to replace it with the inherited one.

Author, there is a problem with your golden finger delivery! ! If the inherited broken system is still acceptable, since the protagonist broke it himself, hey! This has persuaded me to quit. I must express this regret. You have let me down. Your introduction has misled me.

This book God of Destruction is so weak. If Buu absorbs Vegito during lunch, he will be on the same level as the God of Destruction😄

This book is not suitable for Dragon Ball fans!

Sure enough, the names of the protagonists in fan fiction are almost always out of character.

I want to say that Shenlong can actually do anything. To resurrect a dead person, he has to recruit souls and create a body for him, and his strength remains unchanged when he was alive. Even the enhancements obtained through soul cultivation remain intact. So, can Shenlong really not enhance people's strength? If Shenlong can create the body, it can create blood vessels and cells. Lifespan depends on the vitality of cells. If it can create cells, it can create new cells. Shenlong can not only increase people's lifespan but also increase their talents. So the upper limit of Shenron is not how strong the person who created the Dragon Balls is, but how strong a person Shenron can resurrect. If Shenron can resurrect the God of Destruction, then Shenron can create a God of Destruction level body. Find Shenron to customize his body, use the God of Destruction's body as a model, add Broly's blood, add Frieza's blood, add any powerful blood, let Shenron adjust the appearance to his own, then change the body, and become invincible

You just make a wish and get it. Knowledge of martial arts in the entire universe is enough.

How should I put it? The author is the most optimistic author I have ever seen. Although I haven't read it much, I am following it and waiting for the author's new book to be released.

Let's write another one of your novels

I don't like reading it. I just read two chapters and there are two problems. One is eating raw flesh and blood. Although I am hungry, which is understandable, I just don't like it. Maybe as a modern person, I am disgusted with stuffing bloody things into my mouth. The second one is that the author does not know about Dragon Ball, and the writing is not rigorous enough, and he changes the settings randomly.

The settings are too loose. Please read the original work carefully when setting the settings.

What the hell, it's not Warhammer 40k, this author keeps reading and the plot xl

I want to know why we have to take the road of domineering and have the déjà vu of a domineering president.

I have read Chapter 84. The existence of the system is eaten up. It is seriously inconsistent with the title of the book.