Wizard: Start with the Secret Mark

The writing was too anxious. For example, when you are promoted to a wizard, what is the difference between a newly promoted wizard and a third-level apprentice in terms of strength and knowledge accumulation? Is it a bit natural to just let them teach? Moreover, the protagonist started experimenting as soon as he was promoted to wizard. He didn't do any accumulation of wealth or knowledge, so he just used the apprentice's knowledge to conduct experiments. I don't understand why it has to be written in such a hurry. A few short transitions can be used to allow the protagonist to have a period of time to learn the knowledge and wealth of a formal wizard. Even if the pace is accelerated, there should not be a lack of transitional chapters 1 or 2! In my opinion, after becoming a wizard, you must at least reflect a "class gap" and not just the awe of an apprentice. From the perspective of looking at the problem, these things are just castles in the air and must be confirmed with actual items! For example, the knowledge that formal wizards have access to, for example, the value of items that formal wizards have access to will increase several times. For example, what an apprentice has worked hard to learn all his life is only something that a formal wizard can accomplish in a few days. So in the beginning, because of a manse grass, the conflict between an official wizard and the protagonist seemed very low, which directly lowered the mystery and integrity of the official wizard. A grass with less than 100 magic stones was enough to make a formal wizard look down and challenge the apprentice? It's too cheap. The wizard's wealth accumulation must be several times that of the apprentice. Therefore, when the apprentice comes into contact with more than a dozen magic stones or dozens of magic stones, the wizard must come into contact with items ranging from hundreds to nearly a thousand magic stones. Only through the manifestation of this economic gap can the gap between an apprentice and a wizard be highlighted. The setting of the secret pattern is quite thoughtful. The book is interesting, but don't discount it because of some unreasonable little details. Come on, author.

The author failed to make it clear that no matter what position this psychic medium has been assigned in your heart. In the eyes of readers, this girl is a superfluous person, someone who takes advantage of the protagonist in vain. You have to give something corresponding to how much you get. There should not be people who give things away casually, either by signing a master-servant contract, or by using means to control, and giving things away now and then that. They are not freeloaders. It's not much better to exchange something useful for yourself than to give it away for no reason. Either write clearly what the psychic paid to get these things from the protagonist; or explain clearly what the protagonist likes about her and why he has been supporting her unilaterally and unconditionally. At present, it seems that it's the same with or without her, so there's no impact.

The author writes well, focusing on wizards and without any messy foreshadowing such as the Knight's Breathing Technique; but there is a very fatal flaw There is too little background foreshadowing. There is no explanation at all about various organizational profiles, character styles, items and their effects, socially recognized rules, etc. The whole book looks fragmented, the writing is very laggy, and the protagonist's growth curve is unclear and there is no sense of substitution. The author of these things can take it for granted that "I think *** is like this"; but readers will always be confused when reading the book, and may even misinterpret it. This book is a good book, and there is nothing toxic about it so far, but I hope the author will seriously consider completing the background, otherwise I'm afraid my subscription performance will be worrying.

Tell me who you are! ! !

Very beautiful, very wizard-like, mysterious, weird, but attractive. However, I feel that the previous chapters are particularly incoherent, as if the boundary is not done well, switching around and jumping around, and the plot is fragmented. The last few chapters have been much better.

Lacking the core values ​​of the wizard, equal exchange, giving away this and that without signing a subordination contract, the rate of return is all based on conscience?

I have a question, is the protagonist's school so easily invaded by other wizards?

There is no need to forcibly reduce your intelligence. These chapters are simply unreadable.

It's really good. 🙂 A pure wizard novel. Don't be a eunuch. Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

Did your book plagiarize Xianlu? ? ?

I'm really baffled by the last few chapters I've read. Are you missing a bunch of things?

That little psychic saw the existence of the second ring, but she didn't tremble with fright, so she felt frightened by the male protagonist's unpredictability. . . Poor details.

Are you a eunuch? It is a pity that this rare work of conferring gods in the wizard stream is gone like this!

I feel like you are a line of egrets ascending to the sky

Without saying anything, he suddenly became a eunuch😇😇. This is the sadness of reading books by young authors 😤

Is this book going to be mixed with the Cthulhu mythology?

Wouldn't it be too limiting to only absorb moonlight? If there is a red moon series, is there also a black sun series?

This writing style is okay, I'm not a novice, right?