Beast Control: My Pet Beast Is Chestnut Ball!

Understand?

Why is the initial pet not the invincible Sebadoragon

What happened at the beginning? It's not like the protagonist just traveled through time and has lived for 18 years without even knowing that the pet beast is a monster from Yu-Gi-Oh! 18 Years of life in vain?

Basically, when I write about Yu-Gi-Oh!, It's all chestnut balls and nothing exciting at all.

The writing is average, I think you are a newbie

The attribute of the article——Second Grade 2, exciting. If you like it, you can enter, but if you don't like it, it will be very uncomfortable. If you can accept that at the age of 18, you carry a Yu-Gi-Oh card bag on your shoulder and start dreaming about saving the world when you hear a passerby say that someone is going to invade the earth. This is still a good work.

You should give up all the junk cards and choose the European Emperor to always start with the Five Lao Ai

Well written, I couldn't sleep at night!

There is nothing about Yu-Gi-Oh except the card name. Are the effects and skills basically based on the card pictures? No cooperation at all...

I have read twenty or thirty pictures of the author. I haven't seen what your upgrade system looks like. This is not the world view of Yu-Gi-Oh!, And your upgrade system is not clearly written. This is really uncomfortable. It feels like you are clueless.

I hope to write an introduction to each stage, such as how many levels a card master has and how to upgrade. You use physical strength and rarely use soul power, and there is no explanation of how soul power is refined. It is like there are no levels. I hope the author will think about it more! !

The most important thing is that I didn't see the division of strength you wrote. This is very important. The most important thing about the world view of a novel is the division of strength. You didn't divide it. It looks very confusing.

There is also no explanation of your own soul card system. I hope the author can think more about it after reading it. Anyway, I think these are quite important.

The most important thing is that in every battle you write, you only write skills, not attack or defense at all. This makes it difficult for people to guess who is stronger and who is weaker. Since you said earlier that you are not using the world view of Yu-Gi-Oh but an upgrade system, then there should be strong and weak attacks. I think every battle you write is just like whoever has more skills will be stronger, without looking at combat power at all, and the protagonist seems to have not improved. I don't know if soul power is useful. , All of them are physical strength, and the soul power is only used once or twice by the soul cards given, and it does not say how much soul power there is. It is almost like there is no soul power or it can't be used up. I hope the author can check it after finishing it. Personally, it is more painful for me, but your subject matter is very good. Having said so much, I am not saying that you are bad, but I hope you can improve more and write better and better. I also wish the author to become a great god soon.

Adding a sister will not do anything except increase the possibility of poisoning

There are just too many typos 😥

Besides blocking knives, what else is the chestnut ball used for? If it could be like the earliest ones, with infinite proliferation and self-destruction, it would really be okay.