Paradise of Heavens

The dialogues don't need to be so rigid, and the interpersonal relationships don't need to be too rigid. Pay attention to punctuation and segmentation of dialogue. Also, your real book is not a book about the environment. Don't always describe the environment deliberately. Pay attention to the character's personality. Also, don't let your own mentality fit into the character.

What are you writing about? Damn it, I want to laugh, I look at it, I just want to laugh when I look at it

The author, to be honest, I don't even know what words to use to describe this book.

I don't know if you can continue writing with your mentality like this.

It seems that the content is different from the introduction. The dialogue at the beginning where the protagonist is deceived into an MLM organization by his friend is a bit embarrassing.