Traveler in the Wandering World

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In an old-school martial arts writing style, the protagonist's survival depends entirely on luck!

He shouted loudly to confuse the wind, said loudly: Don't hide, I'm going to sneak attack! ! ! ? Said loudly: I want to turn it up! ! I'm going to increase the output of monsters! ! ! ? Said loudly: Eat the "hidden" weapon quickly, Okay, okay, I know your book is very loud and I can't afford to offend you.

After reading ten chapters, I was a little confused. Even though the protagonist has been practicing martial arts since childhood, in modern times, he still has to go to school and live a daily life. The only martial arts he practices is to keep fit. He has never fought. He can fight with a person who has practiced martial arts for more than 20 years. He has been practicing martial arts for more than 20 years. Fighting is inevitable, but he can't defeat the protagonist 🤔

Tell me your point of view. First, establish a character for the protagonist, a math genius and a Baguazhang genius. But you don't feel it at all. Some of the plots are super embarrassing. It doesn't matter if the protagonist is an ordinary person. The characters are there and there is no way to look at them. The upper limit of the protagonist is the author's knowledge.

To be honest, the writing is not bad, but it is too ink-filled. Too much nonsense. Why write down useless things in such detail? If it weren't for Wang's age. Strong tolerance. But a younger new reader doesn't have the time to read your book.

Very well written. I hope it can be maintained. The upper limit is just the world of high martial arts. Don't end up going to the ancient world again.

The writing is quite good, let me share my thoughts. Sanren said that the biggest problem of this first world was that the early pacing was not well grasped and it was too slow. I agree with this, but he said that the early stage was not well written, and the journey to the ancient tomb in the middle and late stages was slightly unsatisfactory, but I disagree. I just think that the most exciting part of this book is in the first half. On the contrary, in order to keep up with the rhythm, the writing in the middle and later stages was inevitably a bit anticlimactic, and the context was quite different. However, in order to keep up with the rhythm, it was not incomprehensible. It was not until the end of the first chapter and the last few chapters that I felt that I had regained my rhythm a little. The procrastination in the previous article is true, but I feel that too hastily advancing the plot in the middle and late stages is not worth the gain. There is no need to be so hasty. Compared with other books of the same type, as a mission world, this plot is already long enough. Maybe the author is starting to be greedy and wants to write the entire story in one world. In fact, I don't think it is necessary. I can write a natural ending. I feel that it is too big and can be separated. This first story is more than enough to be divided into two or three worlds. In short, the author can control his own rhythm and not be too influenced by the outside world. It is good to write slowly. Personally, I feel that he should try not to rush the pace for the sake of the plot. It used to be my personal opinion.

Newbie, new book, hope you all can support it! I will update steadily until it is finished.

Brother Sanren, come on. The chapters on the ancient tomb have become smoother and smoother lately. It seems that he has good writing skills and the interior scenes are just finished 😎