Chronicles of the Martial Arts Sect Wars

Author, I would like to make some suggestions regarding the plot: 1: Don't rush to establish a sect. You can first let the protagonist accumulate experience and reputation. It is best for the protagonist to first understand the court and martial arts forms in this world, and describe the relationship between the court and martial arts, so as to expand the world view, and then establish the sect. 2: After the sect is established, you can focus on describing how the sect operates (such as economic income, etc.). Don't let the chivalry value be omnipotent and determine everything! This is very important! 3: There is no need to have many apprentices, just 3-7. Try to make each apprentice unique, such as different personalities and different martial arts skills (some are good at swords, some are good at boxing, etc.). If possible, you can find an ambitious and utilitarian apprentice for the protagonist and let this apprentice sneak into the court. 4: Make the theme clear, martial arts is martial arts, don't turn it into fantasy halfway!

The protagonist needs to go through a process of change. Not every modern person is born to be a hero and can be domineering and arrogant. The protagonist of this book in modern times is just a kind-hearted and relatively straightforward physical education teacher.

Objectively speaking, the idea is very good, Goldfinger seems to be more reasonable so far, and the writing style is also passable. But I personally feel there are some problems. One is the character creation issue. There is no problem with positive energy, and there is no problem with chivalry, but the protagonist is too emotional - if it is an indigenous young protagonist, it can be tolerated - it gives people the impression that he does not know how to advance or retreat, and does not understand the situation (referring to the part where the protagonist returns to Chengdu for interrogation). This kind of writing can easily give readers the impression of being sharp-tongued and strong-willed on the outside. Such protagonists are often unlikable. Moreover, the protagonist has many secondary speeches (recalling the names of martial arts while practicing martial arts, and the knight must say "how to do it in broad daylight"), which is really confusing. The second problem is the structure. I feel that the author can't tell which plots should be spread out and which plots should be kept as brief as possible. For example, in the interrogation section, where several supporting characters discuss the robbery of the protagonist's escort agency, it can be written freely, but some subsequent things about the Iron-Blooded Changhe Gate can be omitted at all. Because the protagonist does not know what those supporting characters talked about, and assuming that the subsequent plot needs these clues to promote, does the author need to write these clues again (inform the protagonist through the mouths of others)? Assuming that the subsequent plot does not need these clues to advance, then why did the author write these? The third is the issue of details. For example, in ancient times, children called each other by their cousin names, nicknames, or nicknames. What the hell is Xiaoyi? Calling it this way always feels very dramatic - like reading an urban novel. Also, if the protagonist encounters a disaster and returns home, won't the protagonist's sister come out to meet the protagonist? It's really outrageous that the main character insists on seeing her when they have to eat. The appearance of supporting characters also needs to follow basic logic. Furthermore, when the protagonist returns to Chengdu, he is timid about being close to home and has complex thoughts that are difficult to understand, right? With so much energy, do you still have the heart to compete on stage? A good novel must start with details and carefully analyze the logic of the characters' behavior. The fourth issue is the rhythm. First of all, the main plot is unclear. I didn't know what the protagonist wanted to do for a long time. If the main plot is to improve the martial arts level, then doesn't the protagonist plan? Maybe the author is afraid that the golden finger is too big, and the protagonist has a lot of low-level martial arts at the beginning. Shouldn't he give up some low-level martial arts at this time, such as abandoning the stick and sword to focus on boxing, and accumulate chivalry points to exchange for intermediate and high-level martial arts? Shouldn't we brush up on the chivalry points on the way back to Chengdu from Jinya Restaurant (the financial pressure will be reduced)? You all know what kind of behavior can increase chivalry points, but what are you doing if you are still indifferent? Just take a bunch of low-level martial arts disciples? Secondly, returning to Chengdu may be a large part of the main plot. What about the conflict? What about urgency? The protagonist actually competes with his sister-in-law in the street? Does this plot make sense? If you step on your sister-in-law's reputation and rise to the top, will you still do it? It's not that you can't compare, but the most important thing is that it shouldn't be in the street, and you have to consider what significance this plot has in promoting the main plot, and whether it conforms to the logic of the protagonist's behavior. It's been a long time since I've posted a long review. I really like martial arts, so I can't help but be a little verbose. The above is purely my personal opinion. If you don't like it, don't comment.

Is it true that no one has written about martial arts? This kind of quality can be recommended.

For the author's next book, you can refer to the new book "King" with a title similar to the author's last book "The Road to the Mediterranean Overlord", and write an imaginary Western history. His last book "The Road to the Mediterranean" has similar results to the author, and the subject matter is the same. The author's writing style is no worse than him. People are now at the top of the monthly ticket list, and his monthly income is hundreds of thousands. The author has written a Western fantasy history, which is definitely a hit.

It's finally finished. I beg the author to return to historical writing and stop writing about martial arts.

I feel that relatively original martial arts like Baihuaquan are better. There is no need to use the martial arts in Jin Yong's novels, and it is not a fanfic of Jin Yong's novels. Martial arts ≠ Jin Yong.

This book is called Sect Fighting. I thought it would be a tyrannical protagonist, but after reading dozens of chapters, I found that the protagonist is just a fool with a strong sense of justice. He thinks about how to be a chivalrous man all day long, and he keeps instilling in several apprentices how to use swords freely and walk in the world. As long as the road is uneven, there will be no peace. No matter whether you can fight or not, you have to step in and get hurt...,, Honestly speaking, readers who like traditional martial arts will not hate this book, but readers who want to read a book that is self-centered and self-centered, and who want to see the protagonist upgrade and kill everyone will probably be disappointed.

The beginning of the book is quite good. I really don't know why so many people are venomous when they see a paragraph that doesn't suit their liking.

The author should write Western fantasy novels, and can continue to write stories about Rome in BC.