Death Card Archmage

It's well written It's obvious that the author has a lot of ideas and a lot of foreshadowing. The background is grand. Different from the stereotyped mage warriors and the like, the author's setting is very novel. This alone is worthy of recognition.

It gives me the feeling of a brave man cutting melons and vegetables along the way to spawn monsters, enter the dungeon (the underworld), persuade the devil's men to rebel with his mouth escape, rescue the poor person (Anna) who was caught and abused by the devil, and then end the evil life of the devil, gain friendship, and gain +1 for the team.

It looks pretty good. I would like to make some suggestions to the author. Since the protagonist has traveled to "The Other Side" and still has a system panel on him, let's describe more about the continuous improvement of the panel and other cool points to ensure that we always have a sense of freshness and immersion. The most important thing is to feel cool! Looking forward to your follow-up stories, come on, don't stop updating!

Chapter 4 is recommended to be rewritten. A national experimental base has a dusty dilapidated hut? Still using perishable wooden bookshelves?

After reading seven chapters, I feel that the protagonist has been weakened. It was originally based on the concept of [Death], but it mutated into the concept of [Plague], and its performance plummeted.

The character and temperament of the protagonist, Diaosi, is irrational in every aspect, and his character status and behavioral positioning are also deviated. It is similar to the character and behavior of a real ruffian who matches the status of a general.

There are many shortcomings. I will tell you one point that I can't stand the most. In a supernatural world, between greatly strengthening personal power and playing support, the protagonist chooses to play support. I just haha.

The book is good, but why do the first dozen chapters feel like I'm watching The Mechanic?

You think it looks like a machinist, but I think it looks like the movie The Matrix. The protagonist is the variable used by the mastermind to evolve. Also, guys, this is a cool article, so don't expect a battle of wits or anything like that.

It's a bit messy, and I can't understand the upgrade system. I don't even know whether it will be upgraded automatically or manually when the experience is full 😰 Also, I don't see the designer's feeling at all.

It's hard to tell whether the enemy is strong or weak, it all depends on how the author writes it

I haven't read it yet. When I write about the Necromancer, I hope it doesn't involve the Virgin and has a female protagonist. I don't think the Necromancer is suitable for these two things.

Is the character based on the Super Mechanic in the early stage? Later on, it doesn't feel like it's immersive and it's a bit out of place.

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A precious experimental subject has a much higher status than a garbage security guard.

Undead

Do you have any ideas about writing Necrons 🤓

How should I put it, the level setting is redundant. I still don't understand what the mechanism of over-level killing is... It's a bit confusing.

Not bad, not bad, but the hatred of the dead towards the living is not expressed strongly enough. It is recommended to strengthen the expression of death intimidation and death terror. Also, since it is the undead, it can definitely control Cthulhu. I hope it can be added to express the death terror and distortion of the undead, which cannot be looked directly at.

There are too many typos 😅

It's a bit like a super mechanic, but not good enough in all aspects.

Necromancer? When I saw this newly coined term, I lost interest 😰