Desolate Era: Seeking the Way to Immortality

The plot in the original work in which the God-King threatens the protagonist with the heroine is enough to make people speechless. Nowadays, fans are still copying the routine of the original work, except that it has been changed to the God-King threatening the protagonist with a child. It seems that the writer can only play within the framework of the original work, and can never escape the shadow of the original work, even copying such disgusting routines.

The biggest poisonous point of this book is that it doesn't know the plot. In the original book, Ji Ning was plotted against you, and you will be plotted against him as well. After Wu Jianmen's plot, he will probably expose his clone and threaten his son, and then he will probably be plotted by Old Man Yuan later. You have no plot or something. The plot of the original book is acceptable, but this is a fan. Fans arrange this kind of plot for ghosts, so it is better to read the original book.

This vanilla is just plain disgusting. It advances the plot just to advance the plot. It's so blunt that you can't swallow it. Consider this book your pinnacle. It's well written. Don't write it next time.

Update time description: The new book issue will contain one chapter at 12 noon and one chapter at 18:00 every day. If there are special circumstances, they will be specifically explained in the last updated chapter. During the new book period, it needs to be continuously updated, and it also needs promotion time. Old friends, please be patient for a while. The manuscripts saved in the new book period will be updated after they are put on the shelves. After all, Sui Feng is a part-timer and cannot compare to full-time masters, but he will definitely update diligently! I hope you guys can support me more! Sui Feng's greetings!

You really have no right to say that your grades are poor. There are several major bad points. Book friends will comment on you, but you either don't care, or you are too lazy to change them... Going your own way will only attract readers who have similar ideas to you. If it's not bad, it's a ghost.

I really feel speechless. I have to forcefully arrange all kinds of violent conflicts. I can obviously practice well, but because of this and that, I am always in life and death crisis. I just vomit blood. You will die if you practice hard for a while. You are obviously very qualified and with the help of the cyan mist, you can take off after practicing honestly for a while. You have to forcefully arrange various brainless plots. Abandoned, abandoned, poisoned to death🤢

Come on, author, don't give up. Keep up the quality. As time goes by, your grades will go up if you get a few more recommendations.

A rare Manghuangji fan 👍

This kind of novel is just for fun. It has to talk about romance and love, and it is written as a romantic drama. If you don't rush to the street, it is unreasonable.

I can be considered an old book friend of Sui Feng, from the previous book Asking Questions to this book Immortality. Generally speaking, the writing power and writing style of the book Chang Sheng are much better. But there are still some problems. The overall layout is good, with foreshadowing and suspense, rather than a straightforward narrative. It is definitely much better than a short story. But as far as the plot is concerned, there is not enough innovation, it is a bit bland and cliché. The most recent chapter is just like this. The protagonist just appears at the end. Most writings may be like this, but it might be better to make something new (of course I haven't thought about where to make something new here)! The only thing that makes me feel poisonous is the hostility. Although the protagonist's mentality will change somewhat when he comes to such a wild world, Suifeng's way of writing it feels a bit stiff. Then there is the Blue and White Sea of ​​​​Consciousness. I just feel that the opening is a bit too big, but when I think that it is caused by the mysterious seal pattern, it is barely acceptable and reasonable. Then the problem lies in this mysterious seal tattoo, which is also the protagonist's biggest golden finger. It depends on how Sui Feng writes in the future. It is worth looking forward to this secret. After all, this follows the protagonist II, why does it appear, and what is its function? Full of mystery and suspense! Going back to the plot, perhaps Sui Feng is not good at describing emotions, and the writing is very stiff, which makes people feel like they are worthless. For Vanilla, being the heroine is definitely not enough, but being a confidant is still okay. So when describing Sui Feng, I suggest that the wording should be concise and not use some vague words, so that it can be described clearly. Of course, Vanilla's own monologue can be admired more! (Personal suggestion) If I write about the heroine in the future, I personally hope that the heroine has some background, and it would be best if she comes from the same story. As for the heroine, it's better not to be poisonous or torture her to death. Uemoto asked if the heroine can handle it well. If she can't control it enough, she can become invisible😄! Returning to the overall view, the recent plot was too bland and had no important points. At the Fairy Mansion of the Red Dust, I read the comments from book friends. Indeed, it was better to go down to the sea and find that there was no sense of summons. It feels a little abrupt. After all, this island has been discovered for a long time. What has not been explored? In summary, from an overall perspective, it gives people a very good impression and will not cause dyslexia. This is a major advantage. Even book friends who have not read the original work can watch it directly. Secondly, the characters, the protagonist is still standing and has a physical form. But there is one thing, although there is no big problem, but I will mention it here by the way. The protagonist is new to the Tieniu tribe and has no problem getting to know the Tieniu tribe. He accompanied him all the way to Jade Dragon City. He was too enthusiastic later on. The protagonist aims to cultivate immortality, and although worldliness is indispensable, he will definitely not have too many interactions with the Tieniu tribe in the end. At most, the protagonist will help the Tieniu tribe if something goes wrong in the future. Too much ink will be a bit misleading. Of course, this is just my opinion. What special arrangements Sui Feng has will depend on his own performance. Third, for Shuangdian, these chapters have laid the groundwork, but it doesn't feel like enough. Since entering the Jade Dragon Army, there has been no explosion of Shuangdian, and the feeling is very dull. Shuangdian still needs to be continued, thrown out bit by bit, and it feels good! The above is all just idle talk. Suggestions are welcome. Turn left when trolls post!