Scumbag Ichiro: Rebuilding Ashina After the Demon Slayers

All I can say is that the hot spring scene was incredibly toxic. While reading it, I had the same expression as an old man on the subway with his phone. It's 5 AM now, and I stayed up all night reading your novel, only to have it start to decline before it even had a strong beginning.

Why is the description of the hot springs written like this? Aren't you just feeding the readers shit? Since you were tricked, of course you have to retaliate. What about your dignity as a general?

To be honest, the beginning was alright, but I barely saw the protagonist grow, or rather, his growth was barely noticeable. He kept getting thrashed by elite monsters and mini-bosses, then he'd take some drugs and get weaker again. Is this Genichiro or Ultraman? I'm not looking for some wish-fulfillment story; I just want to know how many chapters you plan to let the protagonist reach a normal body? Are you going to leave him like in Detective Conan, still nine years old after so many chapters?

I don't know why, but many well-written fanfictions perform poorly. I read "The Bizarre Adventure of Lee Sin" before, and it was absolutely brilliant. The very first chapter laid the groundwork, and then the last few chapters revealed all the plot holes. I was amazed; I never thought someone could lay out foreshadowing like that.

Putting everything else aside, I feel a bit uncomfortable watching these forced pairings.

Just as Suliman was filling the cup, he suddenly felt a chill and couldn't help but tremble, like a lamb being stared at by a grown cat. He instinctively looked west and saw a small dragon-man slowly walking towards him. A vow of unwavering resolve, inner potential, tears of farewell, and the nourishment of sunlight surrounded him.

I found a great article in the Bilibili comments section, but the title is a bit of a shame. The keywords "Demon Slayer" and "Sekiro" didn't get much weight, and the tag weight is lower than the title weight, which means that other people's articles with 10,000 or 20,000 words at the beginning will rank ahead of yours.

Author, please write more! Don't force a premature end. Don't forget your book's title; while defeating Muzan is the main plot in Demon Slayer, you also need to rebuild Ashina! Don't just cut the plot short and end it abruptly after defeating Muzan. I think you could write at least another hundred or so chapters, such as the reactions of various parties to Ashina's reappearance, but things get a bit risky later on. Just avoid making any mistakes.

Personally, I wouldn't call this fanfiction outstanding, but it's definitely above average. I quite enjoy reading fanfiction, but I rarely finish a whole book. Of all the fanfiction I've read, only two have left a deep impression: the JoJo's Bizarre Adventure fanfiction "Lee Sin's Bizarre Adventure" and the Pokémon fanfiction "The Pokémon Master."

Shinobu, as a friend, lacked discretion and overstepped his bounds, attempting to kill Kuro's enemy/former friend without authorization. Some might not see it as a big deal, but I feel that this meddling was unacceptable; such an important decision should have been made by Kuro himself, not Shinobu. Rai's friends can now withdraw.