Scumbag Ichiro: Rebuilding Ashina After the Demon Slayers

All I can say is that the hot springs are extremely poisonous. When I read it, I looked at the expression of the old man on the subway on his cell phone. It's now five o'clock in the morning. I stayed up late to read your novel, and ended up going down even before I started going high. The protagonist did not show any intelligence that he should have. His teammate was a virgin. He suppressed and suppressed from beginning to end. He was deceived inexplicably, encountered a powerful enemy inexplicably, and lost his arm inexplicably. It directly made my reading experience worse. The key culprit was saved by the Notre Dame teammates. I didn't know if revenge was possible. It was not fun at all. I just threw away 1 yuan to vent my anger. I didn't have the confidence to see the chapters on the shelf.

Why is it written like this behind the hot spring? Aren't you feeding readers? Since you have been tricked, you will naturally want to take revenge. Where is your dignity as a general?

To be honest, what I saw above was pretty good, but I hardly saw the growth of the protagonist, or the growth was not obvious. When encountering elite monsters and small bosses, he started to become weak, and then he became weak again after taking drugs. Are you Genichiro or Ultraman? I don't want to read some cool articles, I just want to ask how many chapters do you plan for the protagonist to have a normal body? Isn't it like Detective Conan that after so many chapters, he is still 9 years old?

I don't know why, but many well-written fanfictions have poor results. I read "Le Qing's Bizarre Adventure" before, and the writing was simply amazing. The plot was foreshadowed in the first chapter, and then buried in the last few chapters. I was shocked at the time, that someone could foreshadow the story like this. The rhythm of the novel is also very in line with Jojo's style, using various stand-ins to fight wits, but the results were not good, which made the author very sad.

If nothing else, Lalang CP looks a little uncomfortable.

Just as Saliwan was filling the cup, he suddenly felt a chill and couldn't help but tremble, like a little lamb being stared at by an adult cat. He subconsciously looked to the west and saw a little dragon man walking slowly towards him. The oath of gold and stone, the inner potential, the tears of farewell, the nourishment of sunshine. Various buffs surround his body. Both hands carry a large curved sword shining with starlight on his shoulders (Wandering Soul Exile +10 Dark Moon Light Sword Enchantment), and there is a red tear sword on the left waist. Danger! The souls of all the dead people in Sali appeared, and they were so frightened that they ran away. Saliwan suddenly stopped, because in front of him, there was a man waiting for him with leisurely time. I glanced at him with an emotionless look, as if a dead person was looking at another dead person. I slowly used a bell to attach thunder and lightning to the ice spikes on my left hand, and then used rosin to attach flames to the ice spikes on my right hand. Saliwan didn't dare to delay, so he turned around and ran in the other direction. But before he ran far, he found a man walking slowly towards him in front of him. Although the man was completely naked, only a crotch cloth covered the key parts of his crotch. But the sense of oppression against Sullivan was the strongest. Facing him felt like facing the sun. Because, he is carrying a Guandao on his back! ! ! Danger! Salivan was split open and he was about to urinate. He cursed and ran away. The familiar scene reappeared. Directly in front of him was a man whose clothes were burning with sparks of fire. His left hand, in particular, was burning with the red fire of Shura, and from time to time the blue light of the source glass shone. Carrying an immortal sword exuding red evil aura on his back, he prayed for tears. Amazingly, he is a full-level Shura wolf in divine attire. He gave Sullivan a cold look, then took a white knife in his left hand and slashed his neck. (Paper Man Rafting) Then strike a pose. (Yaksha Lu) Finally, he sprinkled some pieces of paper on his body, and then the blade of his right hand lit up with purple fire. (Flying Snow of God) "Ha, my blood is boiling, I'm going to do it, Saliwan!" . . . . . A man riding a horse joined the battlefield midway. After the man dismounted, the horse actually disappeared. He rang the bell skillfully and quickly. (Imitation teardrop) "Please invite the King of Elden!" Then he changed to another bell, knelt down on one knee, raised the bell high and began to pray.

It's a pity that the title of the good article found in the comment section of Station B was not given weight for the keywords "Demon Slayer" and "Sekiro". The weight of the tag is lower than the weight of the title. As a result, articles written by others with 10,000 to 20,000 words will be ranked in front of you.

The author must write more! Don't forcefully finish the book, and don't forget the title of your book. In Demon Slayer, Muzan is the main line, but you still have to rebuild Ashina! Don't cut the outline and end it hastily. I think I can write at least another hundred chapters, such as the reactions of all parties after Ashina's birth, but it will be a bit dangerous later on, just don't step on the wrong side.

Personally speaking, this fanfic is not considered excellent. It is definitely an above-average fanfic. I really like reading fanfics, but I rarely read them all. Of all the fanfics I have read, there are only two that left the deepest impression on me. One is Jojo fanfics. "Lee Sin's Bizarre Adventure" and one is a Pokémon fan "Pokémon Master". They are both very good fan novels, but they only came out with such high-quality works after writing several books. Therefore, the author does not need to belittle himself. He has already written quite well.

As a friend, Shinobu has no sense of propriety. He stretches his hand too far and wants to kill Kuro's enemy/old friend without permission. Some people may think it's nothing, but I think it's okay for Daizu to decide such an important matter on his own rather than endure it. Lei's friends can withdraw.