One Piece: When a Cultivator Disguises Himself as an Ability User

First of all, the advantages are that the author's setting is very detailed and the logic is basically smooth (this kills half of the One Piece fans in one instant). Long Kirsu's golden finger is also very powerful. How can I put it... It just gives people a sense of expectation. Moreover, the author's sea voyage events are also very exciting, attacking the Celestial Dragons, which is very, very exciting! Then there are shortcomings. The shortcomings are also obvious. The current pace is a bit slow. I can understand that the author wants to explain the settings in detail, but the pace is indeed too slow, and there are too many interactions with asl... Fortunately, it is not following the boat. If it were, I would give up directly. In short, it can be said that this is a novel with a promising future. Good luck, author!

How to put it, it's hard to comment. It's hard for me to understand that one person says that they want to build a world where everyone is equal, while the other person directly uses people to make elixirs and make mummies to drive them.

The setting is too long, and the author of the previous section on cultivating immortality skills is definitely enjoying himself. He wants to write it in a high-level way, but in fact it is all nonsense.

Can someone tell me that this book is still being sold at both ends under the guise of being non-CP? Later on, I couldn't bear the fact that I was gay.

I thought he was the Blood Emperor, the Lord of Mysteries

Does it mean that you don't go to conquer all the worlds and become trapped in the world of pirates? 😰😰😰😰

Just tell Garp that I came from another world? ? ? The last time I saw such a naughty person was in a Naruto fanfic. I traveled through the Uchiha. I was afraid of genocide. I told the Hokage that I came from another world. My soul was searched. All the comments were one-star. I was scolded all the time.

1. The first few chapters are already confusing. Garp was in his prime at that time and his hair was black instead of black and white as the author wrote. 2. When I met Garp, he said that he did not want to be a navy, and expressed his disdain for the navy in his words. The time traveler's arrogance was really bad for his liking. 3. This protagonist relies on the golden finger of cultivating immortals and has inexplicable self-confidence. The top combat power of One Piece is not far behind that of a cultivator, let alone the protagonist who is a little shrimp in the cultivating world. 4. One Piece is a passionate comic, and each character has his or her own persistent beliefs. This arrogant protagonist really looks like a despicable villain.

Ah, come on, author, I think the writing is very good. There are many settings in Xiuxianzhan. I just hope to intersperse some later to remind people of the previous settings and prevent them from forgetting the previous ones after reading the later part. Well, actually, since there is a setting of aura, and considering the plot of the original work, I think the aura of the Grand Line can be higher than that of the Four Seas, and the second half is higher than the first half. Different islands also have different aura contents. This can better explain why some people become stronger quickly after continuing to sail. When I was about to leave the world of One Piece at the end, I felt that I could extract the spiritual energy of the entire world through formations. Jedi Tiantong cut off the dragon veins and reduced the concentration of spiritual energy in the entire world, thereby reducing the number and intensity of strong men and Neptunes, achieving the purpose of protecting ordinary people, and also enhancing the protagonist's abilities.

After reading five chapters, it's not my cup of tea. Leave a mark with your claws.

This opening is a bit too self-indulgent. I'm writing a fan story and setting up a lot of settings.

Well! The main character's name is so awkward. A name can affect the reading experience. It looks really awkward. To be honest, the plot is good and the writing is good. But the main character's name is so awkward that I can't read it.

It's okay. It's okay to write at this pace. Just change your introduction. If I hadn't seen that comment, I would have crossed it out. It's too abstract. Please change the last two sentences.

Your reason for changing the name is really strange. There are the Pirate King and those from the Kingdom of Flowers, so wouldn't it mean killing them all as you said?

The name of pig's feet is awkward and uncomfortable to read.

The author likes to write the protagonist's inner thoughts directly in narration. It feels a bit like the first-person novel ten years ago. It's very uncomfortable to read.

Ah, when I saw the Blood Emperor, I thought it was a mystery, but I didn't expect it to be a cultivator of immortals. This is not easy to write about. The Western fantasy style blends well with Japanese ones, but the traditional cultivating immortality stuff is not very easy to integrate.

I haven't read Chapter 20 after a week. The setting is really ugly... I almost want to give up. I can't stand the setting... 😅 Can anyone kindly tell me where to start?

After reading more than twenty chapters, how can I put it, a common problem in many novels is that you want everything, so the setting of the exercises is very complicated, requiring 6 clones. Each clone is equivalent to a different race, and must practice different power amplifiers. It is typical to want everything, and it can suppress the progress of cultivation and combat effectiveness. There are too many such settings, which is very unpleasant. There are a lot of resources, but the upgrade is slow. On the contrary, it is not as good as some novels with simple settings but unique features that people like.

Wenqing described too many other things,

After reading the title of the book, I didn't want to read The Immortal and the Pirate. The combination of these two misguided elements is like adding sugar to a hot pot.

The protagonist's name is Lang Xiaoming, and then the pirate changed his name to Lang Kilsu. I naively thought it was just a name, but then I found out that I was naive. The format of this article is "The first sentence: ten characters of Langkisu, four characters of Langkisu and five characters. The second sentence: ten characters of Langkisu. The third sentence: ten characters of Langkisu, four characters of Langkisu five" Anyway, 200 words out of 2,000 words in a chapter are derived from the four characters of Langkisu.

The author especially likes to write some settings, and he repeatedly emphasizes them, and he also likes to write about the environment. Many chapters are about the environment, which takes up half of a chapter. And he also likes to write some chapters that are insignificant, have nothing to do with the main plot, or even have nothing to do with the branch plots. They are just nonsense and cannot be counted in daily life. If this book can dry up the water and refine the current 1.7 Million words to 1 million words, it should be very good. Now this is too difficult to read. I lose my patience every time I read a few chapters. It makes me anxious. The author also said that it is expected to be finished at 1.5 Million words. If it can be refined to 1.5 Million words, the result will be much better. Now I can't even finish the free chapters. It's too difficult.

This is a very watery book

I really like this book. It is not easy to write about immortals and pirates well. There are some flaws, but overall, the flaws are not hidden. It is a good pirate fan novel.

Many authors have a misunderstanding, that is, to cultivate immortality and Taoism, one should be pure of heart and have few desires, but in fact it is too general. Everything that makes you think that it will hinder you from becoming a god is just because you are too lazy. Don't always say that you need to refuse temptation to cultivate immortality, or that you need to control your desires as a cultivator. They are all excuses. As long as you feel you need an excuse, you can say 10,000 words to justify it.

Most readers don't like expository text. Serious immortal novels will not include so many setting instructions. You, a pirate fan, have so many setting instructions, but they can't play a big role in promoting the plot. Doesn't this push most readers away? 😅😅 No matter how good the plot is, it can't save it.

I was scolded when I read it on QQ. It was totally illogical and I felt like I had never read it before.

The author is a great talent, and it looks like an AI novel. 90% Of the content is explained in the introduction, so now I don't read novels written after 2025. Even the starting point has been ruined. I have almost never seen a novel that does not use AI. They all use AI. The AI ​​language logic is really insulting the readers' IQ. I have written several novels using AI and designed dozens of novel writing software, but the core is still a large data model without a soul. Now I have the sequelae: I hate reading AI novels!

If I say it's not good, the creative settings are pretty good and the plot is okay; if I say it's good, the descriptions are long and complicated. It's like a girl wearing black stockings but suffering from athlete's foot 😥