There Is Definitely Something Wrong with This Script

Let's complain about the setting issues The first script gave me the best experience, probably because the protagonist has the most roles, the Riddler has the least, and the amount of information is sufficient. Then the Riddler begins. The second script is a little better. At least a few players have made it clear. We readers also know everyone's mission, but the NPC's superpowers are not clearly explained, how to activate them, whether there are any side effects, and whether there are any restrictions. The protagonist obviously has memories, but hey, if you don't write about it, the readers will be like idiots who don't know anything. The third script is even more outrageous. I don't know how many players there are. I don't know what each person's mission is. I don't know what each person is going to do. I don't know. The clues discovered by the protagonist are not told to the readers. Is this how the group portrait works? Without telling you any information, let's watch the Riddler speak in riddles? There is no inner activity of the protagonist Qiuzi at all, and why the protagonist does what he does is not explained. In a group drama, the readers don't know anything, so why are they grouping together? I will teach the author how to write a group drama. What is the real name of each person, what is their occupation, why they play this game, what kind of character they have, what kind of purpose they have, what kind of tasks they have, what kind of ideas they have, how to implement it specifically, and make each character look like a living person. The reader is like God, knowing everyone's context and looking forward to the subsequent conflicts. The protagonist holds the murder script and has the most information, but the reader's experience is like a fool who doesn't know anything. The protagonist doesn't know why he does what he does.

Let me talk about some of my opinions and bad points about this book (I feel that the author may not read it or finish it, but I really hope that the author can read it. I have almost ordered it. I can't spend the money in vain. I hope that the plot I will read in the future can be more normal, so I will mention my opinion) PS: This is my opinion! How can I put it, I feel that I have spent my money badly. I have read it in the past two days and have reached 750 chapters. From about 400 chapters onwards, it is no longer interesting. It's a serious style, but it's obviously not well done. The camp I've seen so far is against this volume, and it's very well-written and sloppy (it makes me feel like I've wasted my money, so the 6 monthly passes I paid to read this book, the author, are gone) Current Feelings The best volume I have written is "Dancer in the Dark". I can only say that I enjoyed watching the protagonist Qiuzi. The character Qilisi was also well written, but the other volumes were very uncomfortable to read. For example, Alpha's character card, give me a kind of work. The author liked the protagonist very much and gave him the invincible ability. However, after writing it, he felt that it was too strong, and it felt like a chip. Around Chapter 750, the actor who played the king of the opposite camp said, "After using it, you will be a god. As long as your mental power is enough to support it." A character card like "I'll support you to do whatever you want." It's ridiculous to be able to play it for a long time. It's so hard to lose. There are also mixed-blood elves from the opposite camp who died suddenly after 15 days of blood curse. As a result, they continued to be comatose until they beat the king without giving a single shot (at this time It feels like there is a high probability that the curse will break out and die suddenly), it feels like the protagonist has completely used up the shark, his personality is different from before, and it is very fragmented I feel that after all, I think many people have read the label of the protagonist like me. There is a woman who wears a woman. The introduction says that she often plays the role of a mastermind, so I clicked in to read it. However, from about 400 chapters, it just feels like it is tasteless and a pity to abandon. The front is so interesting, although the back is boring, but I feel that the order cannot be in vain, right? Even if it's a bit like that now, what if the next volume will be better? Then it feels like the author is trying something very new (in various meanings), for example. . If you are not good at fighting, you can write less about it (but it would be great if the fighting is really exciting, after all, quality is definitely better than quantity). It would be nice to have more functional character cards in female costumes, and Alpha can BOOS in seconds at critical moments. . Here I continue to beat the corpse king, a pope and an angel, two characters with the same background and strength as the big bosses. Even if they beat an ordinary player, even if they get three times the refund, they won't have to fight for several chapters. . Even if the person is very powerful, the description does not convey the sense of oppression and strength of the person. It feels like the protagonist is a cat and mouse and can be completely covered in one stroke. It is a long time. This long camp script is too stretched. Several previous scripts are actually similar, but not obvious. As the script gets longer, the author's aspect is suddenly exposed. I saw several comments complaining, but obviously the author did not see it. . So I feel that the large paragraph I wrote is probably useless (grass, a kind of plant), but I write it high and low. After all, although I don't like writing this kind of thing, it has really bothered me in the past two days. It's okay to try a new direction, but it has to be interspersed. A direct and abrupt change without writing the protagonist at all becomes a bad guy and a cute girl. It is so different from the previous one that I really can't adapt as a reader PS: Again, it's just my personal opinion, but I hope the author can see it.

I prefer Infinite Streaming. When I first read this book, the first script didn't make me feel much. From the second script, I found it became more interesting. Some of the later ones can be optionally skipped, and some are still quite good. As for what other readers said about the "female-driven low-quality writing" and "corruption", that is the reader's problem. If someone loves CP, can I selectively skip it? But talking about corruption in comments is really offensive. All in all, the author should not be too stressed and look forward to the follow-up content!

Finally found a book about role playing ❤️

Smoking incense invites the author to return to writing

It's pretty! I just saw the chapter about the ballerina. It's pretty good. It has flaws, but otherwise there are no problems. It's suspenseful but not bloody. The original story is good. If you like watching suspense and horror (actually I don't think it's scary either), you can watch this. It's much better than some stories that are scary for the sake of being scary. This novel was pushed to me just now. I am also surprised.

The title of the book is a bit misleading, the script is quite good, but the reality part is watery and boring.

(Qiuzi) ps: Draw a fanfic The two-dimensional rookie may not have a very good temperament and posture in the drawing. ʕ •ᴥ•ʔ I haven't drawn a novel fanfic for a long time, but I still briefly touched a picture late at night to express my love for the author's works.

It's fine if there is no heroine, 👍

I proposed that Luo Kun exit the scene as soon as possible, and in my personal opinion try to replace him with a villain with a high IQ. The killing content in the script is more focused on the battle of wits, which can also increase the reader's interest in reading. Luo Kun is a lunatic and fights with the protagonist in a mess. He can recognize the protagonist when he meets him and kills everywhere. It's like a cheat. Luo Kun knows where the protagonist is before he even shows up. No matter how strong the villain is, it doesn't mean he has an open mind. Psychotic villains are more annoying. There are many players and you can always find the protagonist. You say that an intelligent villain is still interesting. But a psychotic villain chases and kills the protagonist as soon as they meet, and the reading interest is gone. No matter how special the script killing is, it must have the foundation of script killing. It is very boring for you to directly fight between the two. Replace Luo Kun as soon as possible, and replace it with a villain with high IQ and high-quality book talents. People will be interested in reading! Author Maybe don't make a permanent villain, Luo Kun is annoying anyway.

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Qiuzi

The second plot was too difficult, and it took me a while to figure it out after reading it. But the author didn't have enough writing skills to write it out, and it seemed too messy. I'll tell you about the situation, and also remind you that the content contains spoilers, so read the review with caution!

The impression painted belongs to

Do you want Dr. Chen or Dr. Chu to treat you today?

"Will the doctor see me today?" "I take medicine very well"

The 2021 Script Killing Role Actor Award Ceremony "Now let's start the selection of the worst role actor in this script. Let us invite the winner of the worst role actor to come to the stage to receive the award. She is - Xue Na!" Host: "Congratulations to Xue Na, classmate, for winning the most tragic role play award. As the only pure girl in this script, after experiencing a series of tragedies such as intimidation, dark temptation, green tea to warm the heart, bathing in a sewage pool, drinking water on the head, and putting a body bag on the head, as a normal girl, you can still perform the role so perfectly. Don't you have a little pressure?" "..." "Thank you to Script Killer for giving me this opportunity, thank you to the system, and thank you to the host. There is still some pressure, but as long as I think of still being on this stage, I will try my best to do my best. I am also very grateful to Officer Zhang for caring about me in this script, the priest for his dedication to us, and the lovely and gentle Qiuzi for his careful teaching. These all moved me, very caring and warm~" "Oh, it seems that our classmate Xue Na is very humble, so this teammate must also get along very well with classmate Xue Na." "Yes, they gave me a lot of help and always protected me at critical moments. I want to meet them next time∀~" The girl on the stage covered her face shyly, which was quite cute. Moderator: "Hahaha, our classmate Xue Na is very shy." "Hey, Qiuzi, why are you up there?" Officer Zhang looked confused, but Qiuzi's shy expression is so cute ˃̶̤⌄˂̶̤. Moderator: "??!!" Priest: "..." He moved to the side with a look of disgust. "Obviously I'm the worst, okay? I'm scared, I have to dance and put on makeup, and I haven't gotten a performance spot yet, but I've been working so hard~ And it's not like Sister Xue Na didn't intentionally not go on stage to accept the award, she just didn't want to come, so I had to help her accept the award..." Qiuzi tilted her head, looking innocent. At this time, Xue Na, who was wrapped in a sack in the corner, was in a coma...

Send a draft. Magical girl Akiko transforms! ()

Touch a blind wife

"Elegant and Easygoing Dr. Kong" Touched the Dr. Kong in my heart (played lovingly by Xu Shuo)... I will paint like this no matter what! () The hair color was not originally like this, but I adjusted it for a long time and couldn't get it out. The result I imagined actually looks a bit like killing Matt... It's not like that! ! ! (Yuanmu It took an hour to lay down the background color. I was too lazy, so I drew it here. I hope my fellow fans and the author will update Modo Modo! The original text was "Journal of Ancient Medicine Nursing", but it turned out that my painting was too thick, so I changed the name. It was not a big problem (

Qilisi

Recently, I have seen a few trainees saying that my sister has too many roles and is useless. To be honest, as a work without a female protagonist, the existence of a sister just fills the gap in my heart. I said that there are many roles at most because they will appear in the real plot after the script is over. Moreover, the sister is also the anchor point of the protagonist. I have always felt that there is no sister. As for the younger sister, the protagonist has long been the same person as Luo Kun, and compared to the drag goddess in Shen Yong, the younger sister is so much more sensible and sensible. Her cold-faced and warm-hearted persona is also very suitable for me. She looks exactly the same as Qiuzi and I find it interesting I'm curious, is my younger sister really so unpopular now? Want to see other people's opinions

I heard that the next script is inspired by , guess the bride Xu Shuo (if not, the bride is too miserable) (guess it right (or Xu Shuo kills all the people who deserve to go to the 18th floor), then complete this half of the draft) (The previous one seems to have been swallowed, this one should not be without banned words... Right?)

I can't draw anymore. Many details on the skirt have not been restored (the lace is decorated with roses and pearls, etc.). I have never learned the violin, so the movements must not be standard. It's not colored because the computer color difference is too serious (although the coloring doesn't look good either). The expressions in the two pictures are slightly different. The first picture is the original text that is calm and sad (cannot be drawn at all), and the second picture is the smiling version that I did not pay attention to at first. Post this while I have just finished the drawing and still feel a sense of accomplishment. It will be a dark history when I wake up tomorrow:-D

Bride

All privately owned

Hey, I didn't get the official image. I drew it based on my impression. Sorry (￣▽￣)

The author doesn't end it or start a new book. Has he given up writing and gone into medicine?

Instead of changing the main account, I opened a small account called "Meng Dong March". I just found out that another small account has been opened that I don't know what it's called. Has this book been completely abandoned?

No one will always be in despair, unless you are a female fan who returned to the trap in 26 years because of Luo Kun, "There is definitely a problem with killing this script".