Start Your Trip at Hogwarts

It's a headache to watch. The gifts you buy for your family at Madam Malkin's are all made using dark magic to make the sizes come from, and they are not the ones sold in Knockturn Alley. Why did you write this paragraph? Describe family ties to the protagonist's goal of becoming stronger? Family love is a test of writing. If it is not written well, it is not as simple as the beginning of Qidian Orphanage. Sometimes you think your writing is great but others find it too awkward.

How can I put it this way? The beginning feels so draggy, and it's only divided into chapters after chapter 30. Secondly, I think like many HPs, they forcefully fit in with those children. It's weird for you as a teenager to always want to have fun with ten-year-olds, but I still like the plot, so keep going (actually, the reason why I don't like 80% of HP novels is because they forcefully please children, but some of them are obviously written in a way that I think is very poisonous, and some are more downplayed and I feel more comfortable watching them)

The protagonist's personality is really unlikable

I really can't stand it anymore, the protagonist has a weird temper, he's also very irritable and always makes mistakes! Those who didn't know better thought the protagonist was a real kid! It's hard to understand that it's obviously time travel and rebirth, but the mind is also lost along with it! It's better to just write that the protagonist was born as an indigenous person so that I can still understand it!

Many common senses are wrong

When you're at university entrance age, it's almost the same as Hogwarts graduation age. I haven't read the content yet. Is this Hogwarts admission notice a job offer? Or admission?

By the way, wasn't Hagrid's wand repaired by Old Bee?