Beicangxian Road

Comment, author, your description is too bland, especially the fighting scenes. I suggest you take a look at the techniques of other famous artists when you have time. It doesn't have to be exciting, but it must be there. You can't just throw a fire talisman out. I really can't stand it.

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At the beginning, the protagonist is given a real immortal enemy, and some of them are beaten. This is not a good writing. It's better to do like a mortal, first come down and fight Ma Liang, then lead out Dao Ancestor, and then talk about it after ascending.

I've been reading too many articles like this lately, and I'm tired of them. Staying slowly practicing Qi, hundreds of cards have not been upgraded yet. I have always felt that the biggest golden finger of a time traveler is the knowledge and code of conduct brought from another world. But the family novel was never written. As if being assimilated into this slow world. Others have been practicing Qi for a hundred years, so can you. Others use Foundation Establishment Pill to build foundation, you should also use Foundation Establishment Pill. You must have the heart of a scientist when traveling through time. After all, elixirs synthesized from various separated elements are also elixirs

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Author, I am a fan of novels about immortal families. Although I haven't read your novel yet, when I saw the name of the novel, I decided to add it to my bookshelf. I hope it won't be interrupted like the previous novels about immortal cultivators. Please! 🙏🙏

I found a little bird in the book shortage, collected it, and read it in one sitting. I hope the author will write better and better, keep updating, and come on! Be careful and encourage!

Two bottles of elixir for raising monsters during the qi training period cost nearly 300 spirit stones. However, the annual salary of a monk in the later stage of qi training is only 56 spirit stones. Did you use your brain to write this?

Start a post about the heroine's name.

Family cultivation novels have a fatal flaw: someone in your family who is close to you is committing atrocious acts of inhumanity outside, and is a heinous person. As a family cultivator, how should you deal with this family member? The sect can still be killed as an abandoned son. Nine times out of ten, the family will make a big deal into a trivial matter, or hide it. No matter what the choice is, many people will give up this novel.

The price system is chaotic and abandoned

I hope the author will make more arrangements for the heroine

I finished reading it in two days. The writing was pretty good, but I still felt like it was lacking something. I felt that the characters were not well grasped, and some parts were out of place.

I thought it was Zhoutianxingchentuna

I'm a new author. I need to improve my writing. Some people say it's too bland. I think it's okay. I don't really like fighting every day. I'm bound to encounter things when I go out. There are too many of them, and I'm prone to aesthetic fatigue. The author recommends a novel for you to read, "Above the Hill". I don't know if you have read it. Although this author is a eunuch in the back, he writes well in the front, especially the plot of the supporting characters. The patriarch Li Changqing and others wrote very well when plotting against the orphan of Jindan. Unlike other novels that rely entirely on the protagonist, the rest of the family are all in the background, and this author sometimes switches to the perspective of other people to describe it, which is very good. You can refer to his writing method. Actually, I think the author should not have directly eunuched it at that time. After writing this paragraph, he could directly finish the book and count it as the first part. This would be better.

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The writing style is really too immature

You have to get the plot right first to be serious. Your data is not rigorous, the plot is old-fashioned and bland, and the characters don't look like time travelers at all, but more like natives.

In Chapter 32, there is an illusion that foundation building lasts as long as 100 years? Funny, do you think you are a computer and can build a fantasy world?

I have been a man in two lifetimes and have no abilities at all, yet I am still so reckless in doing things.

The ninth level of Qi training is just without building a foundation. After several years of wandering outside, there is still only a little progress. I feel that the family is of no use to the protagonist. The four major families compete, and others casually intervene and injure the protagonist. No compensation is given, and no explanation is given. They just say harsh words. Goldfinger is also the background board.

Damn it, technology is developing too fast now. I feel powerless even when reading novels about cultivating immortals. Why doesn't the author make the Golden Elixir Stage more powerful, add some innate magical powers, use Taoism to distort space, and avoid damage, or make the Golden Elixir Stage fighting skills slightly stronger, like the size of a bottle that can lift dozens of mountains, so that I can feel like I can compete with technology and satisfy my fantasies 😁😁😁

A visual sense of novels from more than ten years ago

The author is a novice, I guess. There are too many differences in writing style. There are many wrong sentences and typos in the first few chapters, which makes it very uncomfortable to read.

Good job downstairs! People who time travel keep pretending to have amnesia, so why are you traveling through time? Are you playing with the title?

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The author still pays attention to the word generation and often calls people with the word "shi" as people with the word "zhi"