Konoha Ninja Akali

Come on, the writing is very good but there is a little missing

The part about the caged bird in the middle is too poisonous. If the disciples of the Zong family use the caged bird casually, will they be able to survive the separation?

Or this?

The Fist of Shadow is my grandma, the Thorn of Outliers is my mother, I am the black sheep now The magic is good, the knife is also good, but I can't use it You move around, I will die in an instant From now on, anyone can tell me what to do An assassin who doesn't take orders from anyone, he was so beaten that he didn't even know his mother Everyone has a weakness, and their weaknesses are all my weaknesses Just give me a good knife and a designer There are more than 300 acupuncture points in the human body, which cannot be protected

The latest two are particularly disgusting? Don't do this kind of thing in light novels. If you write realistic and dark ones, just think I didn't say that.

My mother was a thorn in the side, you ask me? My name is black sheep

No, I still can't accept it. Kushina gave birth to Naruto for Minato because of the so-called blood. When it's over, you tell me that the relationship between the couple is mediocre, and then you tell me about the Nine-Tails Rebellion. Otherwise, she will die and end it as soon as possible, and let her survive in another way? ? ? Tell me if Kushina recognizes her son after seeing Naruto. If she recognizes the protagonist, should she return her to Minato? If she doesn't recognize him, why did you give birth to him? For your noble blood?

How about it?

This book is very good so far. I hope it won't suddenly make characters like Obito dress up like women like the previous book. It's really too poisonous. This is how the previous book abandoned it.

If you can't write Lily Xiang, you'll deceive yourself by making it look like you're neither up nor down. Since you want to keep Shinkuna, why do you have to take her away? If you have to be unwilling and ambiguous, can you write something practical? The result is a double explosion of Shinkuna and Minato. No one will be satisfied just because of this, no, no, no.

Since the protagonist and Kushina can't be together, why describe the feeling of being together, and finally let Kushina and Minato be together like a deus ex machina? Is it purely disgusting? Is it purely to let Naruto be born? Is it purely to drive the plot and disgust people?

When you put it on the shelves, I'll support you by watching ads.

Logical questions 1. The protagonist is a commoner who enters school at the age of 5 (the system task at the beginning mentions the second year of school, and later the first meeting with the third generation introducing himself to the second year, and the fight with Hinata mentions the age of 6). At the age of 6, he graduated with Chunin strength and joined ANBU. Compared to Itachi: he entered school at the age of 6, graduated from the ninja academy to become a genin at the age of 7, opened his eyes at the age of 8, was promoted to chunin at the age of 10, joined ANBU at the age of 11, and joined Akatsuki at the age of 13 (S-level rebel ninja, Kage level combat power) Compared with Kakashi: graduated from school at the age of 5, chuunin at the age of 6, and jounin at the age of 12. Comparison of pre-entry education resources: Protagonist orphan Itachi: Uchiha family, father Uchiha Fugaku Kakashi: Hatake family, father Konoha White Teeth Sakumo Hatake The protagonist shows strength that is not in line with his own experience, background, and status and creates his own A-level ninjutsu Three generations, Danzo and Konoha senior officials: This is reasonable. This is our Konoha genius. He cannot be a spy. There is no need to investigate. Climbing trees, treading water, and being able to create your own ninjutsu without changing the nature of it. What is this but a genius? The next question is that the protagonist exchanges his own ninjutsu for the ninjutsu given by the third generation. The third generation took out the "Book of Sealings". Popular science on "The Book of Sealing": A forbidden book sealed by the first Hokage himself and kept by successive Hokages. The scroll records forbidden techniques that can cause great harm or even death to the user. This is what Naruto stole, and he learned the "Multiple Shadow Clone Jutsu" in it "Multiple Shadow Clone Jutsu" Science: A-level ninjutsu, an enhanced version of shadow clones, using a huge amount of chakra to increase the number of shadow clones, and can create a thousand shadow clones at one time. Because this technique consumes so much chakra, the Second Hokage considered that people without a large amount of chakra would injure themselves or even endanger their lives if they used this technique. Therefore, he classified it as a forbidden technique and sealed it in the scroll. Naruto is the fourth generation son of the Nine-Tailed Jinchuuriki, who dreams of being Hokage, a pure Konoha man, and the inheritor of the Will of Fire. Third Generation: It's just a sealed book, take it, read it as you please, and learn whatever you can. The protagonist is worthy of being the protagonist, and the third generation thought on his own: This is our genius in Konoha! The next question is, is the author sure that the protagonist joins the ANBU class and not the ordinary ninja class? And it was an ANBU class during World War II? Anbu is so casual? Casually fall in love within the team, casually go on small missions, casually not take medicine during the mission (what is the difference between this and shouting "I am here!" During the mission?), Casually dissatisfied with the arrangements of the top management, casually argue with the leader. Is this ANBU? So the ANBU is casual and the same as the regular class?

I just finished reading Next Door and it was not satisfying. I wanted to find other fans, but after reading the second chapter, I got addicted and died. Compared with the next door, the gap is hundreds of millions of points. 1. I did not write about Akali's feelings, but used a systematic approach. This is actually not a big problem, but the protagonist is too girly, and I think she is a woman at first glance. And this is a male video, so it is difficult to have a good sense of substitution. Even in the transformation story, the protagonist is very sassy. If it were Akali as the protagonist, there would be no such problem. 2. The description is confusing. That is to say, the writing is poor. This is easier to say and practice. 3. YY is serious. All I can say is, I'll go over there and fight.

Author, I am also in Chengdu, and the ban is basically lifted now, but you still haven't updated it.

This

Fortunately I haven't ordered all of this book! After I ordered the full book plus rewards a few times and got scammed a few times, I kept a close eye on it.

It's really outrageous. If I don't want to write about the emotional line, can I skip it? I'm forcing the fourth generation to be married. It's a bit disgusting.

I advise you to cut it, don't pretend to be a dead body, it will disgust the readers who read later, or make a big change and change everything at the end. I really took it, and I couldn't sleep because of my diaphragm.

This Akali is not good. She is so cheating that it is so troublesome to fight a generation. The relationship between the four generations is really disgusting. It looks like giving away a daughter. Just for the sake of the plot, Naruto was born? Manual funny😵

As in the title, it was originally said that there was a modification, and a rationalized description was added at the end, but this obviously didn't work, so the entire paragraph was rewritten. There are five chapters in total, 11.12.13.14.15, All of which have been modified. Then the new chapter seems to be somewhat controversial and has been revised, basically rewritten. If it's not right, continue to change it. You can re-download the new chapter and see it. Let's talk about it if there is any problem. New group number: 377762280 Welcome to dive.

As the title says, Chapter 44 was rewritten, and then I briefly explained the problem of Akali's ANBU not being an ANBU. I don't know if that makes sense.