The Pirate’s Silver-Winged Star

Well, the subject matter and content are fine, but there are several parts that I genuinely found uncomfortable to watch. First, you said you needed to develop your Devil Fruit, but then you used it in front of all sorts of people. Didn't you want that? A Devil Fruit that's suspected to be a Mythical Zoan appeared in the East Blue, and you used it in front of the Marines.

The biggest taboo in fan fiction is haphazardly constructed skills and various unnecessary extra settings. Simply writing Monster Hunter elements well and placing them in the One Piece world is a great idea; adding concepts like heaven and hell is really unnecessary and only makes the reader feel confused. Then each character's skills must match their abilities.

Would it kill you to develop peacefully? Why resort to the Op-Op Fruit to cause trouble? Are the benefits of doing so greater than those of developing in secret? Exposing yourself directly will put you under the scrutiny of both the world's forces and the public, potentially hindering everything you do afterward.

Author, writing a farming/settling story in the One Piece world is problematic in itself! What's the defining characteristic of One Piece? Isn't it Devil Fruit battles? In the first forty chapters, there were pitifully few battle scenes. The protagonist got the power of Monster Hunter but didn't fight to make a name for himself or battle those strong characters.

The ancient species' maximum power level was only around the Three Calamities, but it's a different story with an alien god like Ghidorah.

Well, Elder Dragons don't feel as classy as Mythical Beasts, and they're easily mistaken for Ancient Beasts. And with so many choices, he still chose the path of a pariah, becoming a GMJ. He even learned assassination techniques. With such a great Devil Fruit, why would you learn assassination techniques?

It's too much of a mix: sacrifices, dragons, teaching, heaven, hell, coups... So many elements together create a chaotic feeling.

Brother, you're an Elder Dragon, yet you go around recruiting followers and turning them into Elder Dragons too. What's the point?

I was initially intrigued by the title, but after a dozen or so chapters, I was so disgusted I had to give up. It's like a work by Gu Long, but instead of focusing on plot development, it's just about recruiting henchmen… and all the events depicted are completely wrong. 🤫

Is this book definitely One Piece fanfiction? Or is it a babysitting story? I've read dozens of chapters and all I see is the protagonist acting as a babysitter. I knew something was off about this book. I didn't see the fight scenes I wanted, and I didn't see the protagonist develop his character; all I see is him taking care of his underlings.