The Pirate’s Silver-Winged Star

How can I put it, the subject matter and content are fine, but there are several parts that I really feel uncomfortable watching First, I said that I want to develop this fruit and use it in front of various people, don't I want to do that? A fruit suspected of being a phantom species appears in the East China Sea, and it is used in front of the navy. If people turn around and immediately tell the headquarters and send people to investigate, what should you do? Among the pirates, whoever eats phantom beasts is either imprisoned in a big prison or is the top powerhouse in the sea. You didn't take it into consideration and used all the forces to know you. Why are you so obscene and underdeveloped! Second The character of the protagonist is like a good old man, who hates evil, saves children, kills pirates, saves the navy, kills nobles... In this world of cannibalism, the image of a good man is really uncomfortable to watch. Even in the navy there are many bad guys such as Colonel Mouse, Colonel Monca, Colonel Gas and so on Third The Pirate World is a world where people rely on talent, and people cannot become stronger through practice. The supporting characters written by the author are all known to us, and their talents are at an average level. The supporting characters with good performance in any One Piece book are basically original characters, which only allows for greater room for development. Readers do not have fixed impressions and thinking. We have all known the old characters for a long time. If you give them various enhancements, they will definitely not be able to replace them. Fourth The protagonist looked like a nanny, saving this one and that one. Rosinandi was probably going to save him later and gave him medicine. To be honest, the author was not so kind as to travel to the world of One Piece. He was probably betrayed and betrayed by his companions within a week.

The most taboo thing about fan fiction is disorganized skills and various unnecessary extra settings. It would be a very good idea to simply write the monster hunting stuff and put it in the pirate world. As for heaven and hell, there is really no need to add them. It will only make people feel confused when reading. Then the skills of each character should match the abilities of each character. Just like you would not ask Luffy to learn swordsmanship. Assassination skills do not match the protagonist's abilities. For example, Xunlong, Xialong and the like are more suitable to use assassination books. The protagonist only needs to learn the three colors of domineering well, and then when fighting, justice will come from the sky. Just one word and that's it. Each monster has its own style. Zhanlong is a great swordsman, Honglong is a berserker, Broken Dragon is like a martial arts master or fighter, Jilong or Siyinlong can learn from Magneto, Ice Dragon can learn from Qing Pheasant, Flame King Dragon can For example, Ace can release fire blasts, Steel Dragon can create hurricanes, Dark Wave Dragon can control tides and lightning, and can trigger tsunami rainstorms and thunderstorms. Heaven and Earth's Glory Crying Dragon can create earthquakes and change the structure of the earth's crust like the Shock Fruit. Glory Black Dragon is a collection of natural disasters. Are you forming an army of hundreds of dragons just to fight the boss? Think about it, if you are a mobile natural disaster, who else can be considered the boss? Are you going to challenge the generals one on one? Why challenge one on one when you can fight in groups? Of course it's for the sake of being handsome. I just want to see a group of ancient dragons flying in the sky, storms, tsunamis, lightning, earthquakes, meteors and volcanoes erupting. Then let the Explosive Scale Bomber plow the ground, a group of male and female Golden Silver Blue Sakura Fire Dragons spitting fire, the beast dragon species and the tooth dragon species collective dragon carts, the Super Saiyan Monkey's pigs advance suddenly, and finally the red dragon ancestor dragon comes over, and the opponent can throw directly. Why did the Beast Pirates lose? It wasn't because there were too few powerful phantom beasts and fruits grown in ancient times. Since the protagonist had mass-produced fruits, he should be open to recruiting people. You see, a person as strong as Kaido and one of the Five Emperors would be beaten to the point of exhaustion. Thousands of phantom beasts and fire dragons would fight in a cartwheel, which would be too much for any force.

Stable development, will it die? If you have to use the fruits of the operation to do things, are the benefits gained from it as big as those from secretly developing it? If you directly expose yourself and be watched by the positive and negative world, you may be interfered with whatever you do in the future, and you may even directly make money, lose your life, and be chased and killed by the navy or CP organizations. In order to promote the plot, I just threw away my brain, which is also awesome.

Author, there is something wrong with you writing about farming in the pirate world! What are the characteristics of pirate novels? Isn't it just a devil fruit fight? In your first forty chapters, there were very few battle scenes. The protagonist took the power of the monster hunter and didn't fight to become famous or fight those strong men. Why did you write about pirates? If you write about Naruto's farming, it's more reliable than Pirate's farming. As the saying goes, if wealth doesn't return home, it's like walking at night in brocade. If you have the strength, you don't fight. You might as well not write about the protagonist getting Tianhui Dragon. Originally, I was very excited when I saw Tianhui Dragon. The more I look at it, the more disappointed I am. Even if you try two tricks with Bucky the Clown, you are better than just being a nanny.

The upper limit of ancient species is only three disasters. It is different if it is an alien god like Ghidorah.

How can I put it, the ancient dragon species feels less stylish than the fantasy beast species, and it is easy for people to think of it as an ancient species. But with so many choices, I just want to go the route of a street rat and become a GMJ. I also learned the art of assassination. What do you think of learning the art of assassination with such a good fruit? It's like taking the path of Naruto in the world of pirates, without any beauty of muscle power of pirates. Just look at the catalog at the back, it's not very attractive.

Too complicated, sacrifice, dragon, teaching, heaven, hell, coup. . . So many elements come together to give people a chaotic feeling

Big brother, you are a kind of ancient dragon. You go around recruiting younger brothers and make them become ancient dragons. What are you doing?

When I saw the title of the book, I was very interested in reading it. After reading more than ten chapters, I was so addicted that I was persuaded to quit. There is Gu Long who doesn't do things well but is accepting his subordinates. And all the incidents are wrong 🤫

Are you sure this book is a Pirates fanfiction? Not a nanny article? After reading dozens of chapters, I saw where the main character was working as a nanny. . I just said that this book felt weird to me. I didn't see the fight I wanted to see, but I wanted to see the protagonist's development, but he was there to take care of his little brother. . .