Small World of Heavens

This combat power is really awesome, the planet-level mental power is 330 kilograms, it's so funny

It's not as good as a running account. It's self-absorbed and self-obscene from beginning to end.

Will the protagonist become as inhumane as Chen Ang? I personally don't like inhumane people.

Running account for self-entertainment

I feel like my abilities are a bit too much, so let's just talk about chapter 20. I also have planet-level mental power, and the data with a pretty awesome name are so impressive. I can't even mention it with one sniper rifle! The 155mm howitzer that is used a lot by Laifa International cannot withstand it. According to the author's data, it is estimated that those with a caliber exceeding 30mm will not be able to resist, let alone rockets, missiles, etc. I feel that the investment does not match the output.

When I saw the words "revival of spiritual energy", I had no desire to read it. It was always related to pretending to be a pig and eating a tiger.

Ming Dynasty City Gate

😅The most speechless thing is, why can the faith of ordinary people be given once? That ghost can give it every month?

The words are emotionless and the plot is just like reading the outline of a novel. Even if you want to quickly advance the plot, some places should be written in more detail. The plot must also be reasonable For example, when a sect was established in the late Qing Dynasty, what is the core program of your sect? I have to mention it anyway. It doesn't have a core program and just relies on hypnosis. It's too dry. Moreover, it seems that hypnosis is too powerful when written like this. There must be restrictions at all, otherwise you can hypnotize the whole world by yourself. A lot of places that could be written are not written, the text is too dry. Some places are really attractive to read Write it well. It is best to optimize the opening few pictures. The setting of combat power must be rigorous, reasonable, and at least self-explanatory, otherwise the combat power will easily collapse.

Author, what you wrote is not the plot, but the outline! The characters have no appearance, expression, preferences, or even lines. The plot is dry with no description of scenes, and even the conflicts are mentioned in one sentence. There is not even the character, demeanor or expression of the protagonist, like a running account, without any sense of substitution. 🙂

I started performing a few magic shows and gained 1,000 faith points. Then I stopped performing and went to develop some religion in the late Qing Dynasty.

3. Choose the character's point of view well and give it strong emotions Many times, the story reads like a running account outline because the characters are rigidly drawn, making it difficult for readers to empathize and empathize. So at this time, it is very important to choose the appropriate character point of view and give the character strong emotions. As for the issue of perspective, Yan Xijun made this concluding statement in "Never underestimate the issue of perspective, novels with confusing perspectives will end up being thrown away": Make yourself completely integrated with the perspective of the character in the scene. To put it bluntly, the truth is: you can't cheat, dear! So, once the viewpoint is selected, generally it cannot be changed at will (unless it is the kind where two viewpoints are interspersed, but it is more suitable for movies rather than novels). So, after you have figured out the main plot, subplots and general structure, you must immediately decide whose point of view to tell the story. In the submissions and novels that I usually come into contact with, the most common one is the third-person protagonist's point of view (it is indeed the safest one~). As for the first-person narrative, several friends have complained to Yan Xianjun, "I can't put myself in the first-person perspective" ~ "Silent Confession" by "Rao Xuemanfeng" For delicate readers of girl magazines, this first-person narrative is the easiest way for them to empathize, adding a sense of a tragic heroine to this youth story. Therefore, this is not a first-person problem, but it does not match certain specific stories and audiences. In short, when you choose the final point of view character (that is, whose point of view the story unfolds from), dive into their life, truly become them, think clearly about what information they know and what they don't know, and then start writing! 4. The dialogue must be useful. Otherwise, please delete it. I have to complain. There are often long dialogues. A has finished speaking, and then B says bla bla... This situation is the place where I am most likely to feel "this is too much like a running account" when reviewing the article. Here I have to call myself out, and once again break the wall of Amway's "Writing Tips: How to create dazzling dialogue?" " And "Writing Tips: Conversation is Conflict! Conflict! "Conflict" these two articles. Dear children's shoes, when you find that the word document in front of you is inevitably filled with long paragraphs of dialogue (if your goal is Hemingway's "Hills Like White Elephants", you can automatically ignore this sentence), it is time to sound the alarm~ 5. Appropriate description of details and environment can add points. I don't know if you have noticed that in some articles that are widely criticized as "dry and like running accounts", there are very few descriptions of details and environment. The wonderful theory of details (from Mizong): "Details must be written, but not everything has to be turned into details... Which details should be written in a reasonable allocation." In Mizong's view, one type of detail is to enhance the sense of reality, just like the pattern of a stamp on an envelope; the other type of detail appears for the sake of connection and reference, such as the name of Fujii Tree in "Love Letter".

Seeing the bullet makes me laugh to death

What exactly do you want to write about? ! Mess

There are a bunch of typos, and the space is cubed, not squared. Is the math taught by the PE teacher?

In this novel, the Qing government set by the author is so brainless. If the Qing government in reality were like this, they would have died seven or eight times earlier.

Is the protagonist gay, drooling over the muscles

Thank you book friend for correcting me. I didn't write well. I didn't have much confidence in it at first. When I saw someone else correcting me, I was a little surprised. Surprisingly, there are still people reading this book. Since there are people reading it, I should write it well! If you have any good suggestions, you can put them forward!

I've reorganized it so you can look back and see how it feels! Thank you

Thank you for the reward that I only read book reviews. Thank you to all book friends for your support. Thank you.