The Mastermind's Everyday Romance

I feel that the author's book lacks a positioning. Do you want to write a sweet story or something else? When writing a quick travel story for a female channel on a male channel, you need to position the main line and style well. If you don't write a long world, you won't be able to write a lot of things. This requires positioning the development plot of the story. The current writing style of the author feels like he is writing a story in a nutshell, with too little development in the middle, and all of it is concentrated on the acting. If it is sweet, it is not interesting, and if the story is not attractive, it has been brushed aside. I hope the author can write better and better

I don't know how to read this kind of writing, and it looks a lot awkward. As soon as the perspective of the original protagonist is replaced, the protagonist beeps like a narration. When the protagonist is replaced, a bunch of narrations of the original protagonist are written. I can understand it, but the look and feel is not good.

Isn't this how female videos are written?

Ah, I understand, this is an advanced version of a couple's immersive erotic role play. Good guy

Invincible imagination😓

From the 30th chapter onwards, the male protagonist is purely a supporting character, as if the book is about the heroine's family history. I didn't see any changes to the original plot as the protagonist Gu Meng. In this way, the male protagonist has become a supporting role, and Gu Meng and Yu Meng have been separated, although it is not ntr. What other comment sections said is actually right. Why do so many people feel a bit ntr? It's because Gu Meng did too little. It's all acting, so wouldn't it be all Yu Meng?

The perspective of the male protagonist, the way the female protagonist is written, ah... I'm not used to it.

The only shortcoming of yours is that it is not easy to watch, and you cannot tell the truth from the play, so it creates a barrier for the readers and is abrupt. It suddenly pops up and suddenly disappears, making it easy for readers to lose sight of the story and not have the patience to read on. It seems like this and then that. It can only be said that the writing is not strong enough. It's a pity that it's tasteless and it's a pity to abandon it. It made me feel uncomfortable to watch it. There was a lack of story in the scenes. If there were too many scenes, I would become a clown. The protagonist didn't know the existence of Mengdie, but Mengdie knew the protagonist. It was very uncomfortable to watch them as equals. The previous writing gave people a bull-headed feeling.

I am determined to follow this book of yours and write it well.

Short and weak, written by someone else