What Should I Do If Mortal Falls into a Box?

I have invested 100 points, and I don't plan to get much in return. I originally wanted to give a reward, but unfortunately the author did not sign the contract. I think the cheats in this book are not that big. This is the highlight. I hope the author will try to control the speed of the protagonist's upgrade in the future. Don't be too fast, and he will fall behind. Just be a little faster than Han Laomo. It is best not to raise it too high. You are in the early stage of the golden elixir, and he is in the late stage of foundation building, and he will form elixir quickly, otherwise it will be too poisonous. Don't go looking for Old Demon Han all the time. At most, go to him only when you need some particularly high-grade, particularly old elixirs. Also, Old Demon Han has entered the world of immortality, so don't write him down as too stupid and naive. Another thing is that entering the Spirit Beast Mountain may strengthen the spirit beasts. I suggest adding some restrictions to prevent the spirit beasts from exceeding their own realm. There are spirit beasts in the Nascent Soul Stage in the Golden Core Stage, which is very poisonous. Of course, this is still a cool story, don't be too abusive to the protagonist. You can run away to the Chaos Star Sea like the original Han Lao Mo, but don't be too abusive to the protagonist. This is just my personal suggestion, I hope the author will adopt it.

To be honest, I wasn't surprised at all that this book collapsed. When the author wrote this book, he wrote it based on changing some of the regrets of mortals, but I would like to say that there is a problem in writing this way. The difference between A Mortal's Cultivation of Immortality and other novels is that it has a unique flavor for mortals. You are the protagonist and you are on the line of life and death accidentally. Every supporting character seems to have his own story but he may die in the next second. The little people are struggling hard. The core of Mortal is different from other books. Other books focus on portraying characters, using characters to promote the plot, and then using the performance of the characters in different plots to deepen the characters. On the contrary, mortals focus on the plot. Eighty percent of the characters in the book can be said to be NPCs, and the purpose of these characters' existence is to show something. For example, Mo Caihuan is used to show the difference between immortals and mortals, Doctor Mo originally showed that people's hearts are unpredictable, and ancestor Linghu and Senior Brother Cheng of Luoyun Sect show that the road to immortality is hard to find. A series of characters are used to show a cruel world of cultivating immortals. The reason why The Legend of Mortals Cultivation to Immortality is attractive is the "mundane taste" shown in the novel, which is unpredictable in the world and the road to immortality is hard to find. The protagonist asks Li Feiyu, who is not able to cultivate, to cultivate immortality in Mo Caihuan, which destroys their other qualities of immortality and makes them look like the supporting characters in other novels where one person achieves enlightenment and ascends to heaven. Dr. Mo's tricks are not revealed before the protagonist is slapped to the ground. It does not reflect the sinister nature of people's hearts. Instead, it gives people the impression that the protagonist is vulnerable to a blow under the halo of the protagonist. It is okay for the author to write a mortal fanfic and want to change the fate of some characters, but when making changes, the characters must be fleshed out. The plot does not need to follow the original work, but the branch lines must be full and reasonable. For example, the author's Li Feiyu, after the changes in the Qixuan Sect, experienced some things and became a knight. He is equipped to do chivalry and justice for the rest of his life so that he can leave some stories in the world. I feel good about the author writing this. However, the author arranged for the protagonist to give Li Feiyu the spiritual root and arrange Li Feiyu to cultivate immortality. It is nonsense. First, it does not fit with Li Feiyu's immortality, mortal struggle and wonderful character. Second, Li Feiyu didn't have any description of his mentality when accepting all this, which made it inconsistent with the character's character. Li Feiyu, a man who was about to die, suddenly learned that he could cultivate immortality and no longer had to die, but he didn't have any mental activity, so he accepted it casually? Third, it is very difficult to write after doing this. Based on Li Feiyu's character positioning, how will he arrange himself after cultivating immortality? Will he be a knight-errant in the world of cultivating immortals or a knight-errant cultivating immortals in the world of ordinary people? The knights in the world of cultivating immortals are so nonsense based on the mortal world view. After cultivating immortality, are you still a knight in the secular world? If Li Feiyu doesn't cultivate as an immortal, can't he be a knight? If Li Feiyu becomes an immortal, will he no longer be a knight? Then why portray Li Feiyu as a knight? Let's talk about the plot. The fight with Doctor Mo is originally a plot that is very good for shaping the image of the protagonist. This plot can describe how the protagonist accepted from an ordinary person on earth to become Zhang Tie, and how hard the protagonist worked to survive in a few years. The battle of wits and courage between the protagonist and Dr. Mo can be mixed in. The author can take care of the result in one stroke. There are also Tainan Xiaohui and Shengxian Conference. The author said that you want to change the fate of the supporting characters, but what about those innocent cultivators from Tainan Xiaohui? Isn't it too much to quietly remind them that Song Wen has a problem? They are more malleable than those famous supporting characters, that is, characters that the author can write in depth and then brush off. The Foundation Establishment Pill and the Seven Sects are points that cannot be bypassed in fan fiction with a starting timeline and location in Tiannan. They should be well written. If you don't want to follow the crowd and enter the bloody dungeon, then the Immortal Ascension Conference can be well written. Not Entering the Yellow Maple Valley has a new idea by adding the Spirit Beast Mountain, but you can't just report the topography and place names. Can you add a plot of the visit? For example, describe the appearance of the Library Pavilion to reflect the spirit of the Spirit Beast Mountain and the atmosphere before the invasion of the devil. You can also write several events that happened in the Spirit Beast Mountain to achieve the same effect, but the result is still mentioned in one stroke. Some suggestions for the author: When characterizing, you should be targeted and use plots and worlds to shape the protagonist. For example, the protagonist in this book likes to tell jokes and jokes, then use some events to shape the reasons why the protagonist does so, such as enjoying the hardships under the high pressure of Doctor Mo. When creating supporting characters, try to avoid the key supporting characters in the original work and develop some supporting characters from outsiders, such as a few casual cultivators from Tainan Xiaohui and several senior brothers from Han Li. The general direction of the plot remains unchanged, but minor plot changes are made. For example, instead of going to the bloody dungeon, it will be changed to the Ascension Conference. The original book briefly mentions the killing of monsters in the open sea, but I focus on describing it myself. The above are my development and suggestions. If there are any differences, please discuss them together. I hope the author can write the novel he wants, and I also hope that we can see an excellent mortal fan.

Don't talk to yourself, pig's feet! ! ! ! ! ! Forget it about humming a song, you are just talking to yourself throughout the whole article, talking about everything, forget about the ordinary world, the world of cultivating immortals is poisonous. It is not a serious problem to mutter a few words occasionally, but when you have said a lot, you will have "just finished speaking", etc. This is something wrong.

There are so many words and I haven't signed them yet. Let's cut them. After all, not everyone is forgetful If you like writing this content, you can completely re-open a new book with similar content and sign it first.

Come on! This book is very good! 😁😁

It only has 120,000 words. A good book is not afraid of being signed or not. More than 400,000 words have been updated by ordinary people in obscurity. Today's young people are too impetuous, and there are very few mortal fans. As long as the plot is not too bad, by the time it reaches more than 400,000 words, it should be better than driving screws in a factory. If it is more than 1 million words, it should be better than ordinary small bosses. Mortals without word count are not called mortals. The charm of mortals is the slow-burning word count. Therefore, it basically takes the mid-term to exert force.

It's unreasonable that sword skills can be enhanced to produce spells.

Really good🙂

It's really good. It's rare for a mortal to have such a good fan. Come on, author 😁

Invested. Come on! ! ! ! ! !

Now when you travel into the mortal world, it's all licking by Han Li, the dog-licking protagonist. . . Especially since there is no Butterfly Effect copying the original plot, even their actions are the same as the original.,,. . . . .

😥Suddenly the book is finished!

I just watched it, don't let me down if I invest 1,000.