The Ashes of Hogwarts

The problem is that the Harry Potter world is a low-demon world, and not much can be burned. If it were a high-demon world, the relationship would be better.

The first chapter is very good, quite attractive, but why is it so proficient in breaking the chapter? I seriously doubt that a veteran will open a new account.

What I wrote in the beginning was pretty good. Very nice too. Since they are already teachers, I originally thought that the author would not have much interaction with Hermione. But later on, he actually accepted Hermione as his goddaughter. This is disgusting. Is the author forcing a wave of Hermione's traffic? No matter how you look at it, it feels awkward, just like being forced into an official position. Abandoned

Then there is the issue of the protagonist's combat effectiveness. Well, if this is the ending of Ashes, then I think it will at least be a king-level combatant, the kind who can go down to London with a big sword and disappear.

Patch, an indomitable man

Suggest changing the title to "High School Students Travel Through Hogwarts to Become Harry's Boy Mother"

Ashes has been a bit busy lately. Ashes can be seen everywhere.

This isn't a good start. If I were to write it, I would never write it like this. Forcibly playing with the mermaid plot not only fails to fit together, but also creates a huge sense of fragmentation.

I can't stand the second chapter. Are you planning to write another Tang Monk? Novels and movies are different. Writing like this gives readers the feeling that you are in the water.

Well, let me ask, is there a fireproof girl in this book? I always feel that Dark Souls III is incomplete without a fireproof girl. It can be said that the fireproof girl is the essence of Dark Souls III. Personally, I fell into the trap of Dark Souls because of the fireproof girl. Otherwise, I would basically never play a game like Dark Souls. It's not bad for a wolf.