Shrouding the Heavens: Beyond Redemption

Not bad, much better than the one next door. That one was truly a brain-thrombosis-inducing disaster! A powerful body dared to run to the hiding place of a fully-developed holy body, wasn't he afraid Huang would slap him to death!

Speechless, since a hegemonic body uses a sword as a weapon to preach, it is like a big man using a needle to embroider flowers. What else is a hegemonic body? The hegemonic body is so insignificantly developed. That hegemonic body is not created by beating.

It's pretty good, much better than the Ji family's Overlord Body. At least your protagonist goes out to train after reaching the Four Extremes.

Why does every fanfiction have to bash Ye Hei Xiao Shitou? Does it make your protagonist seem so awesome? It's utter nonsense.

Don't ever copy the plot from "The Legend of Zhen Huan" where they use mud to shake off the blood of a quasi-emperor; it's incredibly mindless.

Your invincible body isn't imposing enough 🤭. Why do you all like to play dumb to fool others? Why not just use an alias and be upright? Be more imposing! Your invincible body isn't even as imposing as the one in the original work.

I get annoyed just seeing swords now, and the Yin-Yang Cult too. A prodigy from a great imperial family gets bullied, and that's it? The current plot makes the protagonist feel less present than Wang Teng and Qi Fei.

That's a narrow-minded approach! Since Ye Fan saved King Jiang, has he concealed his identity? He used to conceal his identity because he had no powerful backing; being alone with such a treasure would attract attention, so he concealed his identity to avoid unnecessary trouble. Why is the protagonist doing this? He has a powerful backer who can support him. He's fearless in battle against opponents of the same realm and can even conquer across realms. So why?

When writing about the heir of a powerful family, you need to capture their arrogance and pride. This is difficult to grasp. The arrogance of someone born into a position of power is what fits the character. For example, there's a clan here that has been wealthy and powerful since the Ming Dynasty, yet they are reasonable, proud but not contemptuous. They believe, "I am stronger than you, but I will not look down on you."

A powerful body, a sword as a means of proving one's Dao—this has cut off the paths of countless fellow cultivators. I'll persevere for a few more chapters, or I'll give up.