Mortal Brother Lu

In terms of content, it can be said to be relatively excellent, but there are some things that I hope the author does not do harem stories. It is best to have a single heroine or no heroine. As for the description of the characters, I hope it will be richer. The content of the story should be more reasonable. Compared with the fairy tale genre, it should be reasonable and the character creation should be more down-to-earth (if the author can update it twice a day, I will recommend it to more people)

The protagonist is a bit indecisive. The old man has sacrificed his life to teach the protagonist that no one is for himself and will be punished by heaven and earth. The protagonist even lets go of those who want to kill him and only kills him as a last resort. The family has been forced into this situation and yet he is still so soft-hearted. At least he must be decisive in killing, a bit like a holy mother.

When writing about mortals, the protagonist feels particularly defeated if he doesn't snatch his "little bottle". His achievements are in the future. Opportunities are in front of him, and he is afraid of the highest achievements of those who have the opportunity. What other worlds does your protagonist travel through? What's the use of knowing the development trajectory of the original world! You just go and hug his thigh tightly, follow his steps, and in the end pray that he will share resources with you and become an immortal and an ancestor together. I personally think that since you can travel through the world you don't know, what's the point of not changing it or subverting it? Think about it, "You are the one who can send blades to Mr. Wangyu or put a sack on his head." Han Paopao, Han Tianzun, can he, does he dare, does he have a chance. "You have this opportunity, and you can do it, but in front of the law, you can only think about it."

This is an incomprehensible novel, a novel in which the protagonist's IQ is not taken into account. It is a very good novel about human beings cultivating immortals, but it has to be changed to fate and calamity. It is a mess and makes no sense. Goldfinger is inexplicable. The existence of Goldfinger is to add trouble to the protagonist, right? Otherwise, the main character, Feng Linggen, is quite good, his cultivation speed is also fast, and there is no such mess as those garbled seven-life calamities. This book is a failed work adapted by a fan.

They came to kill you and take your treasure, but you won and were let go, and they even forced you to make excuses, is that all? Jiang Zi Xiu Xian? Go home and raise pigs quickly

Senior Brother Lu, as long as you are rich and noble, don't forget each other! I'm asking for help 😁😁 (Please be more refined!)

How should I put it? The first dozen or so chapters are good, especially the first chapter, which can be deleted. Chapters 2-13 have nothing to do with the protagonist, and even if they are, they should be later. This way of writing that you can't see the male protagonist in more than ten chapters will make readers feel that it is very dull and has no sense of involvement at all.

Just messing around! It's okay for the protagonist to have a small chance with Mr. Han. If you dare to change the fundamental chance, just wait for the future Mr. Han to slap you to death! 😅

As proof of this, when I saw the debate about luck, I knew that this book was starting to collapse. It would be better not to write about the three flowers and five qi cultivation methods, although it has already collapsed since the beginning of Golden Finger. . But this time, those book friends who were able to persevere were the ones who collapsed. The previous book was written in this way. It was written about the improvement of luck and cultivation, and it collapsed immediately. The author ended it not long after, and it still saved some popularity. The author of this book can only say to prepare the ending, no need to write anymore, start a new book.

I have read dozens of chapters so far, and I have already encountered two obvious poisonous points. 1. The protagonist went out with an old woman who behaved suspiciously without knowing the details of the other party, and was unexpectedly knocked unconscious. 2. When the protagonist was dealing with two casual cultivators who clearly had the idea of ​​killing people and seizing treasures, he defeated and released each other.

After reading the comments, I no longer have the desire to read anymore. A common problem among authors writing novels nowadays is that people want to kill you, or even your whole family! When your cultivation is stronger than his, and you can press him to the ground and rub him, you will say something like "I am stronger than you, but you are too weak, and I have no desire to kill you." Then you will let him go easily. After that, the person who was let go will try his best to find someone stronger than the protagonist to kill him, and then the protagonist will say something like He would say something similar to "I have let you go, why don't you live well and come to trouble me" before killing him. Every time I see such a plot, I am speechless. The current author is really broad-minded. In a world where people can eat people, they can let go of a person who wants to kill his whole family at any time. I admire him.

I looked at more than a dozen of them, but I didn't understand what they were writing! The plot is very fascinating!

To persuade you to quit, are you practicing the prehistoric Dharma in the mortal world? The Tao, Dharma, and principles of each world are different. How to cultivate is different. You cannot properly learn high-level re-creation methods. You will be confused just by practicing Qi and building foundation.

It's pointless if you don't snatch Han Li's little bottle. Really, don't fucking say you can't snatch the bottle.

Does anyone have any good fanfics about mortals cultivating immortality? The ball is gone

There are too many secondary settings, including an awesome game at the beginning that makes you look like a picture of the gods, and then there is the various frustrations of a family cultivating immortals. There is nothing mortal about it.

I feel like your writing is broken. I don't know if it's an illusion 😥

The protagonist dances very happily, has wind spirit roots, and can also refine weapons. You are sure that you will not be preventively killed by the bosses of other forces. In the original work, the old Korean demon Gou reached the Nascent Soul stage, and he made a splash when he was fighting against the Mulan people. He was immediately targeted by the divine master, and the old demon Hehuan also used a secret trick. In this article, the old demon Han actually got involved with the God of Transformation early on. Are you sure there is no Nascent Soul demon who went searching for souls out of curiosity?

I just want to know how many people were persuaded to quit in the first chapter? Chapter 1 report of persuading people to quit!

What is it about? The protagonist often turns into a cross-dressing boss, and the person who is reborn through time travel has the IQ of a child and has the IQ of a child?

That's nonsense. Do you talk about cause and effect in the mortal world?

If you become a child through time travel, will your IQ also become that of a child through time travel? How awesome are the Qi Practitioners you wrote about each and every one of them? Which Nascent Soul Ancestors are afraid they will be scared to death? The writing is as bad as it gets. At the beginning, you knew that Grandma Shiling was lying to you, but you still followed her to the third level of Qi training? In the end, he was saved by someone else and didn't die. Damn it, I thought you had a trump card before you dared to follow me. But it turned out you didn't have anything? There is no one else writing this. You can't even give away a person's head

Changed to look incomprehensible🙂

I have read some and I feel very good Friends, please read the original work before reading the fanfic I seriously doubt that many book friends will read the fanfic before finishing the original work Their state of mind It doesn't look like they have finished reading the original work They still have the urge to have the protagonist be invincible in the world 's cool article tag I only read the first half of the sentence and started to comment I couldn't read a whole sentence, and understanding it is also a problem Reading is not the purpose, just to communicate with the author The author tells the story, if you don't like it, you will walk or skip it Don't read the story, just focus on the dialogue

It feels very messy. It would be great if you just write your own system. This one is so speechless.

I've seen so many. You are the first person to lead so many people and even 7 sects. Going to Chaos Xinghai. Let's not talk about the messy theory of cause and effect written before, this is very poisonous.

It's really poorly written, far different from other fan fiction.

A new book written by mortals, starting from Wulonghai. I haven't seen much of this kind before. I would like to recommend it in case the author stops writing.

Too many magic changes are poisonous. Very poisonous

The book wasteland has moved on, and the tower defense is the public enemy.