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Because I have watched Fate, I can completely accept it as long as the character's lines are not too abrupt (because the image has been set in my mind, which is the advantage of most fan fiction), and the author's control of the character's lines is very concise. After reading it, it feels a bit like Hemingway who doesn't use many adjectives. The most rare thing is the rationality of the plot. The author always grasps the protagonist's thoughts, which is to become stronger and survive. The plot that follows this idea is very reasonable (this is reflected in the fact that there is not too much psychological description of the characters, that is, every time they see a character, they start to think randomly, which completely reflects the protagonist's desire to become stronger and survive). Anyway, go for it! I feel like this is another great fate fanfic that is similar to the beginning of The Eighth Crown, but I hope the protagonist's abilities become too broken. After all, that's why I gave up the Eighth Crown. I hope that more attention will be paid to the development of existing abilities. The fierce battle of passion and strategy will make people like it more than one-size-fits-all, but if the author can write the feeling of One Punch Man, just pretend that I didn't say it. I'm even more looking forward to the main line now, the 12-player battle.

The Lock of Heaven can be transformed by the pollution of Kuanglan... Are you kidding me? Even if you can transfer it, if you dare to transfer the gold pickup, King's Treasure House and EA will fight you desperately if you blow yourself up on the spot.

The setting is not rigorous and there are a lot of bugs. The author is still tough on it.

Joan of Arc? Do you think this is Joan of Arc? (Pointing to Artoria's chest)

It would be outrageous for a knight to be able to transform the Lock of Heaven without dying. Lancelot's dirty hands touching Jin Shining's other treasures made him angry and take out EA. This is equivalent to face-to-face NTR. Jin Shining was so angry that he directly opened the omniscient and omnipotent star? ? The golden image collapsed.

Brother Brush has a + agility, and also has the mind eye skill, the protagonist has c agility and everything else is e. It's outrageous to be able to beat him 😅. To put it bluntly, the protagonist's master Kotomine Kirei can kill the protagonist.

After reading 151-252, it seems that the author thinks that the belief of "in order to live" is low-end? Why? Could it be that your belief in becoming stronger in order to live a better life for yourself and to become the final winner in the trial is inferior to anyone else? This is outrageous

There are too many setting bugs. I feel that the author has only read Fate and not checked the settings carefully. The simplest red rose thing that can break monsters can only break monsters. Why should Iax break it? Iax's thing is a standard technological creation. If you say that Iax is not hard enough and can be broken by Red Rose, I don't understand why I can break it with monster breakers. In addition, I remember that except for the twin family ones, there is only one magic seal.

I remember that after IXA's spear form is inserted into the ground, it can release spike attacks from the ground, which can be regarded as mid-range killing. But in the hands of the protagonist, IXA is completely used as a shield, which is too bad.

How does berserker hide from EA? Just relying on his agility to dodge is weird. EA is not a light cannon, but a space-time rupture that cuts through the world. Even the space is distorted. How can you still dodge normally? Just hard cloud

I hope you can write about Jin Shining's torture of Coyote! If the aura wasn't too big, don't talk about counter-attack! Can't even do it up close

How should I put it? There are too many bugs in this book and there are too many deviations from the original work. It is obvious that the author is not particularly familiar with the Fate series and has probably only followed part of it. The author's plot arrangement was okay at first, and I could tolerate it at first, but later on, many people posted corrections to the author, and the author did listen to part of it, but he never thought that he would learn more about the settings and complete the settings. Logically speaking, it would take about thirty minutes to understand them all. I hope the author will think more about the next world, understand more, and be more rigorous. Since he wants to write, he should understand more, otherwise too many bugs will really affect the perception.

The author should hone his writing skills. The image and rank he first appeared on showed that Pig's Foot should be a taciturn, ruthless persona (at least that's what his external mask should be), but as a result, he turned out to be just like a dead salted fish after half a show of pretense. The battle scenes are simply incomprehensible. The descriptions of various treasures are not rigorous. Even the descriptions of the battles are too pale. The subsequent battles are even more like playing tricks. Are you forcibly feeding me a mouthful of poison? During the shooting part, the setting is that if you kill a servant, you will get an ability, which will affect the life-and-death duel two years later. It will either draw, kill, or even lose. What do you mean by serious injury? What if someone picked up the peach? You won't write it this way, but I will think so. Not rigorous! In the section of the cattle car, the silk threads in the front will be dissolved and will have no effect. Here you run for a while and then suddenly arrange them! ! Although there is a seduction scene, I beg you to act more like him, at least he is Alexander. Forced wisdom! ! The swordsman part was just like playing house, and I gave up when I saw it. I don't understand what you are writing at all

The argument in this book is that the author's own setting is not rigorous. It is outrageous that Crazy Orchid can transform the Heaven's Lock. This is even more outrageous than hiding from EA. You must know that the Heaven's Lock is a very special anti-god weapon. The most important thing is that he trusts not EA but the Heaven's Lock in the Treasure of the Flash King. The most important thing is that the Heaven's Lock is conscious. Everyone who has read it knows this. The author actually wants to use Crazy Orchid to transform the Heaven's Lock point setting itself. It's very forcible to feed poison, and Crazy Orchid's transformation of the Noble Phantasm can only use the material of the Noble Phantasm itself, and cannot release its true name. To put it bluntly, it is almost the same as Shining's throwing Noble Phantasm, except that if Shining turns on omniscience, it is estimated that the true name can be opened, but the magic power is not enough.

Anime shows the spirit of each character and the spirit of pursuing what they want without hesitation, even if it is ridiculous, but they don't give up. However, most of the stuff written by fans just likes the female characters in the plot to find women. The content is always about the troubles the female characters bring to the protagonist, and the protagonist has to solve them. Isn't it interesting? It doesn't have to be so good to write pornographic novels. Don't you make more than this? ?

The Lock of Heaven, which cannot be dyed by black mud, is dyed by Kuanglan... Kuanglan is not Berserker but Beast.

I really feel that the protagonist's attributes should not have been set so low from the beginning. That kind of rubbish data can't compete with the Son of Light, the King of Conqueror, and King Arthur. It's ridiculous that he can be hacked to death casually.

Let's not talk about Kuanglan's ability to transform divine weapons. Let's default to the author's setting. The knight can transform the Lock of Heaven without dying with his bare hands. But the description of Diarmuid is too much. In the animation, when the heroic spirits were fighting against the big-eyed cuteness, Diarmuid was willing to break his own Noble Phantasm in order to restore Saber. Such a warrior who adheres to the spirit of chivalry actually resents his opponent because of his lack of strength? Will you feel proud when you have a slight upper hand?

In the eyes of the author of this book, Gemstone Ong and Crazy Orchid are invincible in the world, Crazy Orchid directly transforms the earth and the moon, and Zhu Yue's inhibitory power is rubbish. The brush is really harmful to all things. There is nothing that can block the red grab. Even if the root is pierced, it will be dead. The panel of one C and four E can stand head-on with the Emperor. Can the author please check what the use of divinity is? Do you really think it's a debuff?

When he was young, Lord Chong was very handsome, and his goals seemed to be justice. He had the combat power to fight against servants, and he could even defeat a single servant under certain circumstances

How should I put it? I won't say anything if you draw the Cross Tail and you can fight with the Lancer. I think it is a strengthened Noble Phantasm, but if you can cut off the inevitable Huang Qiangwei by breaking the line, it is ridiculous.

If you don't want to write, can't you finish the book directly? It insists on serialization and interruption. Isn't this a deliberate attempt to mess with our investments? Geneva! Get your money back!

"Listen!" (Declaration) "I give you magic power, and you work for me!" (Your body is entrusted to my command; my destiny is attached to your sword.) "Those who are captured by the Holy Grail, those who can hear it, and those who have similar opinions to me, just squeak..." (Those who respond to the call of the Holy Grail and follow this will and principle, respond to me!) "I have agreed in advance that when I come to you, I may or may not do good things." (I am the one who accomplishes all the good deeds in the world, and I am the one who combines all the evil in the world.) "I have three command spells. Be obedient to me within seven days. After it expires, you can do whatever you like." (Seven days entwined with the three great words and spirits) "I will not reimburse you for your travel expenses here. You can figure it out on your own... These are the conditions. There is no shady story. The final right of interpretation belongs to the Holy Grail..." (Come through the Wheel of Suppression and appear! Guardian of the Scales!)​

I should be deeply grateful that I read the entire book before reading the comments, otherwise I might have missed a good book. At the same time, I also deeply saw and understood the difficulty of the author from the comment area. As a reader, I still deeply hope that the author can complete this work. There is a saying that goes like this: "I have tasted the sweetness and bitterness of the world, and I know the warmth and coldness behind the words." There is no need to care about other people's words. I hope the author will stick to his true intentions and make progress together with the work.

Got sprayed to death by a bunch of trolls, ugh

After raising her for a while, why did she become a eunuch? Even if you take some time to update once a week, if you are willing to read what you write, you will eventually follow up. Those trolls will eventually give you rewards for subscribing and recommending tickets, so why listen to them?

It was fine in the front, but the power system in the back was completely broken. Uncle Shining didn't take it seriously. He raised his hand and waved the big dog to kneel down. He didn't take Mother C seriously and gave her a slap in the face. Slipping away

Do you want to update it or not? If so, please let me know.

Matou Sakura's problem was that she directly destroyed the magic circuit and blocked the imaginary attribute information. How could she be designated by the seal? To put it bluntly, she was reluctant to part with magic qualifications and believed that inheriting magic was the best love. To put it bluntly, Sakura would be better off without magic qualifications.

The recent condition of not killing the master is a bit awkward. The protagonist is the real person. This condition completely gives the opponent an opportunity and a human shield, which makes people uncomfortable. It's enough to do as little harm as possible, and just accept it if someone forces it on you. Agreeing to such conditions seems like the protagonist is too promiscuous. Isn't it just to survive? Shen Yong shouldn't be so careless.