I'm Really Just a Mage!

The plot is a bit stiff and incoherent.

Overall, after reading it, it is a good invincible article. The author's writing is good, but he doesn't overwhelm the protagonist. The pace is fast. It can be seen from the introduction and storyline that there are quite a lot of holes dug. I hope they can make up for it in the later stage. I also hope the author has an outline. If there are too many holes, it will be easy to collapse and easy to be scolded. There are also some shortcomings. For example, a skill will pop up from time to time in the early stage. I think it is not a wise choice to save the time of unboxing. Then at least I should talk about the skill. This is a cool point after all, and it can also improve the word count. It is also a free chapter. I always feel that there is another problem, the early time process is too slow. I always feel like it's impossible to do so much in such a small amount of time. For example, from a student to an honorary major general, did it seem to take only two days or one day? But overall, this book is still good. (The above is my personal opinion, please don't comment if you don't like it)

Xia Yuyan: Xu Xiaorou: He Zixin:

You are in such a bad state, you have to stand up, let me tell you the number, 5 updates a day! Understand the applause

The starry sky changes, the system descends, and Hanhai Star becomes a game of life and death. Cracks in space suddenly appear, alien beasts are raging in the world, and all races in the starry sky are coming one after another. The ancients are watching, and gods and demons are whispering. But... In this disaster, there is always a clear stream. When people are still struggling for survival, Lin Luo, who is blessed with strange luck, has opened his system treasure box [Ding, your colorful magic talent has arrived! Ding, your artifact has returned! …… After regaining his weapons, he picked up his staff, a world-destroying halo in his left hand, and a set of Ten Thousand Swords in his right hand. His endurance was higher than that of a warrior, and his stealth skills were even more slippery than those of an assassin. PS: When the source of the system was revealed by Lin Luo... "Good guy, the authority is actually in my hands?" This book is also known as: "The God of Law's Wrong Path" and "The Lover of the Goddess of Luck" (a light novel, with a relaxed pace, it is refreshing, but it also has a healing aspect)

You should first clarify what you want to write. My feeling now is that you want to write a cool article, but you can't lose face. You want to pretend to write something meaningful, but the result is that you don't look the same now.

Three poisonous points for me 1. Everyone can see other people's four-dimensional attributes, which means there is no privacy at all. 2. Except for the male and female passers-by with CP, it seems that all the female supporting characters surrounding the male protagonist have unrequited love for the protagonist. What should I do? I was very disappointed when I watched it, and within an hour of knowing the protagonist, the older brother introduced his younger sister to the protagonist. The younger sister also had the intention of liking the protagonist. Oh my god. What kind of plastic affection can lead to someone else's sister being handed over to someone else within less than an hour of knowing him? 3. What happened to the protagonist's luck? The system is so childish that a temporary patch restricts the protagonist? ? ? Is this system so low-level? There must be lucky people and unlucky people in the world. But if someone is unlucky, you won't be able to patch them up? You can see how disgusting this system is if you can't treat everyone equally. The above three points are the poisonous points for me personally. I wonder if the author will scold me...

It started well, the team was really poisonous. . . First of all, this team does not have that kind of apocalyptic atmosphere at all, just like a few people playing a browser game. . . The atmosphere was too relaxed. At the beginning, everyone was struggling between life and death, and then the national team was all playing. . . The protagonist joins the team to seek shelter. However, all the team members are terrible, and the protagonist keeps a low profile. It does not show how the protagonist becomes stronger or practices. The introduction states that the protagonist should be a cool sword mage. However, when he gets a swordsman talent, there is not much description. In the next second, he will directly fight monsters, and the swordsman skills will be directly upgraded. You can at least talk about the speed of the protagonist's sword practice after getting the talent. . . Then I kept relying on the system to brush up my attributes, and the talents and training that were one of the highlights were not reflected at all.

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There is no sense of involvement at all, and it feels a bit confusing.

So what exactly did you write? The writing style and setting concept are obviously good but why is the writing so messy? Nothing is clearly explained. There are so many characters.

I don't know what I'm writing about. There are few battle plots, and the excitement in the unboxing session is useless. Inexplicably, during the fight, there are several pages where I keep fighting with others, and then suddenly fight again, and then there are all kinds of suspicions. Did I miss it or read it too quickly? I don't understand, I slipped away, and I was confused.

To be honest, the writing is okay, but the biggest shortcoming of this book is that the description technique similar to flashbacks makes people complain. The results are shown, and today people are baffled, and then I write the reason! Emmmm, as long as the author likes this way of writing, as a reader, I don't like it, and I'm very disgusted! ! Let me give you a little suggestion. A lottery plot like this can be a good way to improve the word count. Although I don't know why the author likes to omit this, but as an ordinary reader, I still like the lottery plot!

Xiaobai, the author is a straight man. The first three chapters are very confusing. She directly targets the captain to be his wife. The favorability of the team soars. With the classic pretense and low-level Versailles, there is a 999 artifact that is directly given to that taste.

What the hell? The plot jumps around a lot at the beginning. There is no chapter about the important skill Ten Thousand Swords Returning to the Clan and Thunder Nine Heavens. It's hard to read, so I gave up.

I thought it was quite meaningful at first, but now I can't stand it anymore. I don't even know what the meaning of profession is now. Are there any profession restrictions for learning skills? Are there career bonuses? Why is the sword cultivator's defense weak? Can't sword cultivators increase their physical fitness? What are you afraid of when the first level never dares to draw the wheel? Don't dare to write and turn out to be garbage, but don't want to give too many good things, and you can't keep up? So just ignore the turntable? Do you want to get around it when a system patch comes later?

The author has little writing experience, and after reading around chapter 20, I was really "embarrassed" with my toes on the ground: the whole article was full of nonsense, and the actual content of a chapter of several thousand words was less than a hundred. In the chapter comments, the author said, "The early stage is more about daily life...", You mean your daily life, you are really trying to persuade me to quit!

The plot is a bit confusing, the connection is not smooth, and some plots are too sudden. And maybe the author has a complete worldview in his mind, but you didn't express it in the book, so some parts are incomprehensible.

Does the author write a book without logic? Many places have been omitted, and the protagonist's growth process is gone, and he suddenly becomes stronger and upgraded. Moreover, many places are unreasonable, and the author cannot come back to them at all.

Well, the parts of this book that involve upgrading may actually be upgraded and then written blindly! 1. How can the system not automatically upgrade you after you have saved enough experience? If you upgrade as you wish, then in theory it is possible to directly upgrade from level one to full level! 2. If a white treasure chest yields a golden talent, then what should be found in a golden treasure chest? What is the purpose of grading treasure chests? 3. A high-grade white piece of equipment costs 50,000 star shields. How much does a low-grade white fruit knife cost? How many billions of billions of stars does golden equipment cost? 4. What's the use of different professions? You can achieve the effects of finding a job in all professions by relying on skills, so what do you need to do professionally? 5. What is the normal leveling speed? In this chapter, it is enviable that the new military star can level 26 in 7 days, and then the protagonist can level more than ten levels in one day? Can a single effort compare to the efforts of millions of others? I admit that I haven't read many chapters, but you can also check to see if there are any of these questions.

The most annoying thing about this all-in-one novel is that the protagonist learns all kinds of skills, including a hammer and a stick, and every backbone. After learning so many skills, he also adds cheats, and the system is a little more powerful than the supporting characters. Moreover, many skills are just to make up the word count. After learning two or three chapters, they no longer appear, or are even never used at all.

I saw this post written by someone else and wanted to join in the fun. If you have any comments you want to complain about, just say them here. They will never be deleted. If possible, I will change them in the article.

The writing is not pleasant, likes to make plots, skills are used first and then described, the logic is not smooth, and it is uncomfortable to read.

My suggestion here is that you read the novel for two years before writing it.

I persisted until chapter 55, but I couldn't stand it anymore, bye!

I feel like as long as you don't read the experience-related content written by the author, you can still read it. The experience gained from defeating monsters fluctuates hugely. Also, doesn't the upgrade automatically increase with experience? Won't the experience of having a dozen level 2 spiders in a row be reduced? This level 3 spider knows how to ambush the protagonist. Is it necessary to wait until all the younger brothers are dead before challenging the protagonist in a duel?

You can only read the first 10 chapters of this book, and it gets too confusing after that.

Alas, if you don't have good writing skills, don't just write what you're not good at. You're just messing around with upgrades and professions. I know you want to write your own system, but the effect is really unsatisfactory. It's better to use a system that everyone is familiar with. It saves trouble and gives a sense of substitution. I'll withdraw it now.

I already know the process and ending after reading this introduction, so why don't I watch it? . . . . . . . Emmmmmmm

Please give me a new book title! ! !