Starting by Treating Naruto

Haha, when I saw that Scorpion made his parents into puppets, it was okay to feel guilty. His parents were killed in the war by Konoha White Fang. Those two puppets, father and mother, were made of wood by Scorpion himself. They were not human puppets at that time.

The protagonist is eleven years old and hasn't opened his eyes yet. Are you sure he's not a loser? He also said he was a slightly worse genius than Neji. . . Also, Hinata opened her eyes at the age of four or five, and she still needs the help of the protagonist to open her eyes at the age of ten?

This is not a personal attack. I hope the author can read it and give him some suggestions. I haven't read this book yet. I'm just giving some suggestions to the author's first two books (K Naruto and Conan fan). To be honest, I really like reading the articles written by the author. Because many of the ideas are very interesting. For example (the self-created martial arts ninjutsu in Naruto: The Strongest Master, and the Kawara Serum in Conan.) And it can also be seen that in order not to write down. The number of cheats given to the protagonist is limited. The main opinion is that I hope the author can think carefully about the broken parts (especially the parts with a large time span) and whether the time to enter the next plot is correct. Is there anything left unfinished? If you plan to write the plots in this chapter in reverse order in the next plot, you must make an outline. Don't finish it. You haven't filled in the holes dug in the last chapter. There are two things that are special about Naruto; One is the second time when the protagonist became famous, during the Third Ninja War, the most exciting part at the end seems to have been skipped directly. The second part of the scribbling about Nine Tails is even more outrageous. It jumps directly to 12 years later. If you plan to, you can supplement it in the form of memories (to be honest, you will dissuade a lot of people if you do this. The reverse chronological method feels very high-level in literature, but if you write an Internet article like this, it is wrong.) But you haven't written much at all. What happened in the Nine-Tails Rebellion? How the protagonist group was born, I was confused until the end. In Conan, the highlights are all there. You are about to get the second Yayuyu serum, you have got all the treasure boxes, and you will go directly to the next story. (Are you going to let us make up this part of the plot?) The early stage was okay, but in the later stage, there was no transition between some cases, and it went directly to the next story inexplicably. There are more than one or two of these. I hope the author can improve it later. To be honest, your writing has great potential and your ideas are very interesting. But I hope you have an outline when writing. You can add it at any time when you come up with interesting plots. Every time before writing new content, take a look at the content of the previous chapter and your own outline to see if the new chapter is connected properly and whether the new content deviates from your expected outline. Don't let yourself go as you write.

The subject matter is very interesting, but it's a pity that the author's protagonist who cultivates immortality and possesses a first-grade spiritual elixir and a third-grade divine tree is too dramatic. Naruto's biggest mistake was to waste the Nine-Tails chakra at the beginning. While looking down on Bagua Kongzhang, I still want to learn it. It feels like it will end up being just showing off for the sake of showing off. If you don't like immortal novels and heavens, just leave. It's a pity that expectations are too high

Curing diseases should be quite interesting. In the past, I often saw people getting stronger through cooking.

This book is so great, it will become a classic when it is finished. 😍 Come on and update! 😎

The protagonist, a man, was pregnant and gave birth to a child. In terms of immersion, I really couldn't get into it, so I slipped away. Finally, about the medical system, the protagonist must at least know medical skills, at least medical ninjutsu. The result is nothing. If he is sick, the system treats him. After the system treats him, he rewards the protagonist. Is this system sure that he is not his biological father?

Come on, the writing is very different and very good. I really like this type of book. The writing is very creative. I think this book is still very good~(o´ω`o)ノ

Naruto did not destroy Konoha, proving that he was indeed brainwashed by the kaleidoscope genjutsu.

The more I look at it, the more something is wrong Naruto spends money to play a prank? Then why did he eat rice with ginseng sand? Why drink expired milk? When he was a child, he was basically beaten and scolded, accompanied by hunger I can only say that it is very poisonous, this book is not suitable for me, let me express my opinion, it is indeed a poison every day