The Most Powerful Show-Off System of Internet King

Fan fiction is difficult to write, and Net King may be one of the more difficult genres to write in fan fiction. So no matter what the level is, I have always supported the author. However, this book does have some poisonous points that I think. 1. The protagonist gains the ability to completely leapfrog at the beginning and then goes to junior high school to abuse food. This point has been mentioned by many readers, so I won't go into details. 2. Regarding the heroine, the emotional progression is too rigid, the love logic is completely confusing, and the interaction is extremely poor. It feels like the heroine is designed just to have a heroine. From the very beginning, I had an inexplicable good feeling. Later, the heroine took the initiative to show her good feelings, and then the inexplicable protagonist began to have further contact. There was no foreshadowing or progression. I can only say that you like it. 3. The battle process is monotonous and repetitive, basically taking turns to use skills (which is a bit close to the original work), but because the readers know the protagonist's strength in advance, the whole game becomes a boring game. Moreover, words like "I'm going to use my full strength" can appear several times in a game, and then it is discovered that I still haven't used my full strength. This description makes people feel confused. At the same time, most of the battles are crushing or teasing, and there are rarely close matches. There is a serious lack of tension and excitement required for battles. Even in the rare balanced battles, there are protagonists who "pretend" on the side, but in fact seriously interfere with the atmosphere of the game. There is also a supporting role behind the judgment that "the protagonist will not be wrong." 4. Character dialogues are not spiritual. Dialogues are a good way to shape characters, but they are all used by the author to push the plot, and the ambiguous addition of modal particles such as "ah" and "ah" cannot reflect the atmosphere and character at all. It has the opposite effect, and the content of the dialogues is boring and unnutritious. For example, in the game between Hyotei and Tatekai, the dialogue between the protagonist and the Son of God on the coaching bench, and the domineering confrontation that was supposed to replace the old and new dynasties, the author really described it as the yin and yang of two children, and it was completely impossible to tell that the protagonist was a college student. 5. It's said to be pretentious, but really... It's very childish. It's not so much pretentious as it is provocative. It lacks depth and is not three-dimensional. To talk about feelings, it is the evaluation of the protagonist when he participated in the national competition when he was U-17: "playing house". 6. This may be a controversial point. The protagonist has shown interest in almost all the beauties who have appeared (I almost want to remove the old lady coach). Note that I am not talking about "appreciation" here. In short, the sentences and words are too vulgar, which makes the female characters lose their original charm, and makes the protagonist's character seem to be an LSP. It's not that I'm against stallions or anything, but the author's understanding of female beauty is still at a very low level, limited to appearance, body shape, etc. (Almost no character description), making the female characters who should have added color to the plot boring. 7. The point of abandonment is the chapter between 227 and 228. The article contains the truth, but this chapter really persuaded me to give up. I can't quite understand why an author would use the reason of not enough subscriptions to explain his one update a day, saying that he needs to have a meal, and that he has other books, but never thought about why his own books are not enough subscriptions. I believe that those who have not quit reading this chapter are the author's potential readers. After all, many chapters have been published, and they belong to the people who are supporting you. However, such readers and the author are disapproving and perfunctory. Actually, I feel from this book that the author doesn't have much understanding of the reason why Net King is popular. Maybe the author just likes the pleasure of being invincible and crushing all living beings in his book. So I also wonder if the author is not obsessed in reality, and the book is not subscribed enough, and there is no such pleasure of crushing, so he just lays down and updates. But what really touches people about the Net King is never the crushing and being crushed, but the self-breakthrough in adversity, the never giving up in despair, the gritted teeth and perseverance in powerlessness. However, I regret that I have not seen these, whether in this book or out of the book. So if I were asked to summarize, I can only say that this is a book written by the author for himself.

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I'm speechless. I endured it in the front, but in the back there is the realm of selflessness. I wonder if the author has watched King of the Internet. When will copying skills be perfect? ​​It's just the most basic selflessness, okay? Moreover, when Ryoma faced off against Yukimura in the national competition, Mikiya said that the seamlessness minimized the physical exertion of the selflessness and did not consume a lot of physical energy at all. The author is completely too open-minded. He wants to come up with every idea, and he wants to write the protagonist to be awesome, sometimes in a fantasy world, sometimes in a light ball, and sometimes seamlessly. Various supermodel skills were used crazily, resulting in not one being written well. And it's not that exciting to watch at all. The protagonist's strength reduces the dimension and strikes, and the max-level account slaughters the novice village, and the protagonist is still complacent. Who can watch this?

This is too ridiculous to write. He is a first-year professional who can only hit the ball. I can't even play with it once it's fired. It's too open, it's too poisonous

There are too many references and it's too strong, and the writing is a bit awkward.

If you don't go to junior high school, you will be a professional. Why don't you go to heaven? If you are already a professional, then why go to junior high? If you don't go directly to U17, then the next step is to punch Oni Jujiro and kick Byodoin Phoenix.

The protagonist of the strongest pretense system is not worthy of it. The pretense is not good enough, the pretense is rubbish, and the plot is messy. Has the author watched King of the Internet?

The combat power has jumped. It is so powerful in the early stage. How do you write it in the later stage? Just write two chapters and you will be invincible. What should you do?

I found that only the narration and the protagonist seemed to be talking. In one chapter, no other characters spoke 10 sentences. The whole process was narration or scenes. The protagonist flirted, the protagonist spoke, and played a small role, and then it was gone. The scenes, character settings, and images of Dou Po ten years ago were all better than this one. You are not like each other. The characters are not distinct. Your true personality is cold, funny, nymphomaniac, extroverted, introverted, etc. You don't know anything. You are just pretending to fit the theme of the novel and pretending to be cool for the sake of the system. The system is a tool, but what about people? Who are people? , Why does he attract people and spend money on him? Attracted by one's own abilities? Or is it accompanied by time? There is nothing described. Other characters are like puppets, slap someone in the face, and then they will lose all their money, sell iron and work for you, (there must be rules for this!), Overall it is too obscene Not to mention other characters, as if they are air, without any introduction, hastily summed up in a few sentences, and you don't know what the supporting characters are like. If you feel the supporting characters in the book based on the prototype of the supporting character of the Net King, it will not match the original design, and the image will collapse, just like that. For example, in Dou Po, Xiao Xun'er is unswerving, and then the fan instantly turns into a nympho who falls in love with the protagonist. There is no explanation or foreshadowing. The setting is as if he can love you at first sight, and he can also love others, which collapses the character image and the three views of the setting. So the character setting image must be well designed, and whether a novel is well written, the beginning is the most important golden impression. The first ten chapters of the author seem to be talking to himself. The whole process is self-directed and acted, so users don't have that sense of immersion

Many people don't enter the realm of selflessness, okay? When they come to you, everyone will enter the realm of selflessness.

The protagonist's strength is too high, and he has no fire point, and the information has not been checked (~￣▽￣)~

I guess the author was trained by Tsinghua University. When I write novels, I think about myself as a foreigner.

It's fully booked, can you update it soon? The beasts are updated every day, and I'm almost out of mood.

I admit that I like to read pretentious articles, but are you a bit too pretentious?

The author of Ballball has updated two more chapters 😆

Do you want to decide to go back and write that book properly?

It's not that I'm stepping on each other, there is a big gap between the king of the same network and the one next door.

I couldn't stand it after reading two chapters. How can we play with it hanging like this? It's boring.

Can this also be called fan fiction? . .

The timeline of this book is just so confusing. Has the author actually watched Prince of Tennis? Feng, Huadi, Riji, Taocheng, and Begonia are from the year before the plot, and Longma is from the year before the plot. If the protagonist is in the same grade as Ryoma, then Ryoma should have enrolled in Qingxue. If the protagonist is in the same grade as Feng, then why has Feng gone to doubles? Feng only started playing doubles with Liang in the third grade. So what grade is the protagonist in? There is also Ochi Moonlight and the others, who graduated before Atobe enrolled in school and have never met each other. . .

Actually, I think you can still see it if you ignore those places.

Speechless, I use ten 666 cards to play a game.

I don't know why it's a bit embarrassing to see the protagonist acting cool, like a very proud little kid. 🤔 Still hope to see cooler, fresher and refined pretense