I Really Don't Want to Study at Hogwarts.

Pig's Feet is like a mental illness, and the writing is a bit confusing. At present, they are all talking incessantly. It has no style and flavor of cultivating immortals at all, nor does it show the methods and abilities of cultivating immortals. It is just messing around here and there.

The first three chapters scared me (ﾟ⊿ﾟ)ﾂ Later on, I also agreed with Hermione's forced freedom for the house elves. Anyway, when I first read it, it felt inexplicable and too sudden From my personal point of view, house elves, first of all, are very pitiful. They are obviously so strong but they are enslaved Secondly, if a certain value of a house elf is immoral (or bad, illogical) in Hermione's perception, then if the house elf corrects Hermione's values from the perspective of "justice" as he understands it, should this behavior be recognized in human society? If a race regards being enslaved as the meaning of its life, are people like Hermione just naive and arrogant people who are intoxicated in their own heroic dreams? (Of course, the abuse plot in the book will not be discussed) I feel that this behavior is indeed advanced from the perspective of human values, but is it a sin to force the elves to accept their own values?

I thought Teacher Bai would be the protagonist's Taoist companion in the future, but in Chapter 68, Ron saw his true form and took advantage of him? The protagonist's attitude seems not to be surprised at all. When did the protagonist and Ron have such a good relationship? Anyway, it was quite disturbing to watch. The previous chapter was well written, but suddenly this chapter came and I felt like I had eaten a broken melon seed. How does the author plan to arrange Teacher Bai in the future? After Chapter 68, directly arrange for Ron to be a Taoist companion (is this what the professor said Ron will have good luck?), Or does he pretend to be nonchalant and continue to guide the male protagonist in practice and then fall in love over time? Or is it like the relationship between Huangtian Emperor and Liu Shen? No matter how you write these arrangements, they are quite discouraging. Come on, author💪, I hope you can revise Chapter 68 again. After looking through the posts, I feel that not many people are quitting due to system problems and the slow pace of plot development. Chapter 68 has definitely persuaded many people to quit. I saw the author said it has been changed emmmmmmm, come on

The King's system + Eastern cultivation system + Harry Potter world, a wonderful combination, keep up the good work!

I just read Chapter 68. The previous chapters are acceptable, but to be honest in this chapter, I don't like the plot that much. After all, Bai Chenchen is considered an important character. I thought her role in the plot was the kind of character in Dou Po Li Yao Lao who never had a partner for life, or a key supporting character who could be with the protagonist in the end (I thought the key character found in the article was the key to life, so I always thought that this supporting character was one of the protagonist's harem or the heroine). However, looking at the plot, Ron was taking advantage and Bai Chenchen's reaction felt a bit strange. (The protagonist didn't take advantage of it at all, and suffered a lot.) It's wrong for them not to be together according to the development of the plot (Ron and Bai Chenchen). The character of Ron has never been likable because of the original work. I don't know how it was described in the original work, but in the movie, he is really not as cute and handsome as other people of the same age. In the end, he married Granger, so most people (including me) were envious of him and thought his various behaviors in the original work were very annoying. However, the main reason why he was disliked was his various behaviors (jealousy, villainous heart, etc.). Even if these behaviors are regarded as the character of a child, they are still very annoying. I personally suggest making a minor change so that Bai Chenchen peels off his skin and wears clothes and is not taken advantage of (or Ron faints and the protagonist solves the problem and Ron is protected by the godhead to start the subsequent plot). Otherwise, I will feel uncomfortable watching the plot in the future.

I feel that the IQ of the protagonist and supporting characters are not online, and the world view is very confusing.

I seriously feel that I need to change the protagonist's golden hand. It's really disgusting to see someone take advantage of the protagonist's golden hand and see him completely naked.

Cultivation, Hogwarts, transfer students, and the elite points system sound like a terrible combination.

Haha, look at the introduction, Zhang Qiu is a beautiful woman, well, I disagree with her aesthetics.

I was shocked by the three people who forcefully licked their faces at the beginning, so I took my leave.

I hate the system the most. Why? Because you were having sex with your girlfriend at night, but the system wants you to break up with your girlfriend immediately, otherwise it will be erased. So I hate the system.

How should I put it? It's messy, it's too messy. I suggest you stop writing and read the previous chapters from the beginning again. Your setting is okay, but it's too messy when you intervene. The relationship between the protagonist and the trio progresses too fast and I can't understand it. What about the appearance of the snake? It's okay. If you have a relationship with Ron, just be together. Otherwise, it looks a bit like that. It's just my humble opinion.

Ah, is the protagonist's name serious?

Even if it's free, it can't be like this. The cultivation of immortality has not even started in the 20 chapters. It's all a lot of fooling around. Harry Potter, a high-risk person, probably doesn't even know how to die.

First of all, I know that some readers have objections to my "full rhythm, not focusing on the subject of cultivating immortality". In fact, I do too. I am not saying the following reasons to excuse myself or to dislike readers who point out problems. I am a newbie and I don't think I am good at writing. All my mistakes are my own fault. Even if I were asked to rewrite it now, I can see that some places are just too draggy, and there are actually better plot arrangements - those readers who pointed out the problems are right. Secondly, I also want to talk about the reasons. When I was setting it up, I found that putting the Western magic system and the Eastern cultivation system together was a disaster. The most difficult thing was that the standards were not unified. We use the mages in "World of Warcraft" as a benchmark. Ordinary mages are fire and frost mages, as well as space magic such as teleportation. Advanced magic is group teleportation and group damage spells. However, in the contemporary Eastern cultivation system, after condensing the Yin God, it is already possible to cut mountains with swords. If you practice further, all kinds of magic weapons are omnipotent. How many rounds can Jaina go under Sun Wukong? Can Dumbledore at his peak defeat the newly blackened Alsace? How many minutes does it take for Han Da Mo to defeat Voldemort? The two are not the same system at all and are really incomparable. Compared with the magic system of "World of Warcraft" (which has been gamified), the magic in the orthodox world of Dungeons and Dragons and "Harry Potter" is even lower-level. Dumbledore only played "Fire Burn" once before he died when he was dealing with the attack of the Inferi. The most powerful thing among other wizards is "Avada Gnawing the Big Melon". I have estimated that if the writing is really relaxed, according to the traditional settings, the immortal cultivation system can be upgraded to the later stage of foundation building to completely crush all the wizards in the "Harry Potter" world. Isn't this just a piece of cake? I didn't know until I started writing that all the novels with the theme of "Western Fantasy and Eastern Immortal Cultivation" written at the starting point failed without exception. Now I understand why. It's like mixing vinegar and honey. It's so difficult. But I want to give it a try. Who has watched futures and cultivated immortality since childhood? Who hasn't had the dream of "the undefeated East vs. The undefeated West"? The reason why the beginning is so slow is that I am used to this rhythm. The most important thing is that I still want to "nest" the Eastern Cultivation System and the Hope Magic System first so that they have a common benchmark and pulse in the same direction, and then use the plot to advance together. In this way, the Western magic system can move forward from the settings of "HP" itself, and the combat power will not collapse due to the huge disparity between the two systems. In fact, in my opinion, the Western fantasy system has its own set of standards. If it can continue to develop (similar to the organization and promotion of the Eastern practice system by the great masters of Chinese Internet literature), it may not be possible to reach the point of cutting the galaxy with a sword. The Eastern cultivation system is too obsessed with combat effectiveness, but if time magic and space magic (such as "transformation", etc.) Are added, it may not be able to enrich its connotation and expand its denotation. So the Eastern and Western fantasy systems lack a process of measurement and development, but are an attempt to attract new ideas. I know it's difficult, and I know my early writing was messy, but I still want to try. Thanks to readers for their support, and to those who pointed out my mistakes. People of my age don't know what's good and what's good. I'm just telling you what I think. More importantly, I want to share with you my original intention and intention of writing such a story. I actually wanted to write a story comparing the Eastern and Western supernatural worlds that is "fun" for us. And you can't write it down. When Da Shenzi and 2 opened a new book, they said, "Online novels are like this. With a fast pace, there is no need to think about a complete story." I just want to write this story well. I know that my understanding is still very superficial, and I have to grow slowly through trying. Thank you again. You are the driving force for me to move forward. Let us continue our cultivation in the magical world to the end.

There are also nonsense and useless complaints throughout the article. When describing Luna, I have to compare it with all the girls I have seen before, and I have to re-describe other girls. It is like a beauty pageant, and I just missed the score. Umbridge's ugly face was rambled on for three or four pages. In fact, Harry and Zhang Chun both deserved to die because they really accepted this nonsense. This kind of nonsense is the kind where you don't even need to read the content, just scroll through it, and you can understand the plot intact, without even a single omission. And the whole text is like this. I wrote one hundred and thirty chapters in a week and a half, and half of it was filled with nonsense, which is the so-called low word count. Also, the protagonist's character is very speechless, and he does all kinds of inexplicable (in the eyes of others) troubles, and it can also make the supporting characters like him, which is really a bit forced. And judging from Zhang Chun's emotions, they look exactly like NTR's character. Being taken away by Luna was also a forcible deception, and you were afraid of scaring others. Don't you usually scare a few people just to store up negative emotions?

Introduction is like a term used in self-hypnosis

It feels quite interesting, but judging from the current character creation, the protagonist is not worthy of Hermione at all. Although Hermione before the dental surgery did not care about appearance so her appearance is not outstanding, but in terms of her personal qualities, it is really incompatible with an ordinary person like the protagonist... If it must be matched with CP, let's strengthen the portrayal of the protagonist's quality and personality. Or it can be done without a female protagonist. I feel that the protagonist is suitable for being single and will be very happy. Ginny's words will do, too.