Shonan Trip

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Soldiers have invested in "Taoyuan Bandit Suppression" and collected it permanently. Come on together

It's a bit slow to catch on, but now I personally like reading this kind of novel.

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Personal opinion, don't comment if you don't like it. The writing style is very good, there is no obstacle to reading, and the writing is smooth. But the foreshadowing is a bit long, and I don't know if you want to write a slow-burn story or something, but I feel that the reading is not that smooth. I have already written six chapters, and I have not seen the theme of the novel. It can also be said that I have not seen the contradictions in the early stage. Only conflicts can lead to climax. It feels flat and not very attractive. It is suggested that you can artificially add some contradictions😁😁😁

I read six chapters carefully in one go and found it quite interesting. The inclusion of elements such as Shonan Weekly and OneNet not only enhances the sense of immersion but also has nothing inconsistent, which is very well handled. Maybe it is a slow-moving novel, and the plot progress is a bit slow. Thank you for updating, you have already invested! Stay tuned later.

After reading the first three chapters, I felt that the words and sentences were long, and there was also a sense that the classical Chinese was not classical, and the modern was not modern. The key point was not grasped at the beginning. If you click in, you may not be able to stand it, let alone continue to look for the highlights of the work. The first three chapters are just a facade, I hope they can be taken care of. And the introduction, you know. I don't like telling lies, and I don't want to tell lies to deceive others, unless it's water, so I don't blame you for what I said is a bit sharp.

Everyone says you have a long road ahead of you. It is true that many readers nowadays do not like to read a lot of foreshadowing. But I think it's okay, even though the amount of information is a bit large. I read the first few paragraphs several times.