Investigators of the Void Realm

In terms of writing style and setting, it's pretty good, and there are no obvious logical loopholes. However, there are really big problems at the beginning. Some personal opinions, why did you write this book? If you just want to write a book that you want to write, there is nothing to say. If you consider grades and income, then this beginning is completely unqualified. It's not so many years ago anymore. The family makes decisions for the protagonist, and the setting of passively starting from scratch and deleting memories is a poisonous point that will dissuade most people. Maybe you have thought a lot and have deep foreshadowing, and it will be very exciting to expand the world view later. But why should others look at it? I can understand that this is to establish a staged main line, which can continuously promote the development of the plot and help start the climax. However, the popularity of Abuse Master articles has faded. Even if it is Ergen's book back then, the results will definitely not be that good now, especially if you are still a newbie on this site. I can't change it, I've written so much. But I hope the author will work hard on his next book. As a non-comic-style work, even if it is to establish a dark and oppressive world view, it must not lose the character of the protagonist. The foundation of wanting to advance and then suppressing is to have a certain height. Without establishing the protagonist and the entire world, it is really difficult for people to read directly from the suppression. Even if you really lose all your power, it will be much better and even more attractive if you preserve the memory through some kind of backhand. At the same time, the sister's act of causing the protagonist to lose his memory did not achieve the effect that the sister said, to live a stable life. In other words, she could not do it at all, so her act of causing the protagonist to lose his memory completely lost its foothold and starting point. The first consequence of amnesia is to be forced to sell the cafe. Even without this plot, it wouldn't be so ugly. The entire plot of amnesia has lost its most basic meaning, and it makes sense for an ordinary cafe owner to be asked for help and involved in the incident after a while. From a reader's perspective, we read books for entertainment. In life, we have experienced a lot of others trying to make decisions for you. Multiple factors affect us and we have to act according to other people's ideas. When this kind of behavior appears in the works we use for entertainment, it will definitely cause disgust. Sometimes writing cannot only be based on the author's ideas. What is written is for others to see. What I write is an online novel, not a story about picking up flowers in the morning and evening. It's rare to say so much, and I look forward to the author's next work. (Now that the Internet is so developed, there are too many interesting books, and the problem at the beginning will cause a large number of people, including me, to give up directly.)

Sanzhang persuaded him to quit. If he couldn't stand such a plot, he had to be beaten from being a great person to a loser, and then climb up from a loser bit by bit? Or is it your only relative who beats you to pieces and says nothing for your own good? It's boring and I can't stand it

If I were the male protagonist, the first thing I would do when I regained my memory would be to kill his sister. If nothing else, the male protagonist had no amnesia. At least Chen Xiangxue, a B-level martial artist, would not have been skinned and made into a doll. Incidents such as the invasion of the Sheath God would not have forced the male protagonist to almost die. The funniest thing is that he finally got rid of the "White Emperor's Walk" before losing his memory. Such an act would be taken seriously by others.

It is recommended to at least indirectly describe the psychology of the protagonist and his sister... Otherwise it will always feel incomprehensible and even a little disgusting. If you really want to keep the protagonist away from the investigators, at least give him a new look, pack him up and send him away. What the hell kind of operation is it to just beat him half to death, cure him of amnesia, and then leave him there? This is not equivalent to telling an explorer who has already sailed out to sea that it is too dangerous to leave. Then he was crippled and lost his memory in the middle of the ocean. The sailors on the ship ran away when they saw this, leaving him with a compass missing and no memory of how to sail the ship. He looked at the sea with a confused face... This is more dangerous than before!

According to your way of writing, it would be better to just dismantle the first three pictures and throw them behind and use the method of recalling them. Now I only see that the abilities and memories of the protagonist whose life is intertwined with strange events have been deleted and they are called good to the protagonist. No matter how you look at it, it looks like a psychopath's plan to take revenge. Playing the protagonist to death... There are also chapters 789. He died inexplicably, lived again inexplicably, and lost the only money inexplicably. He woke up in the hospital and was rescued by someone unknown. The opponent inexplicably thought he was dead. Your description is too stream of consciousness...

When I saw Chapter 4, I couldn't help but browse the comment area. The author really thought it would be better to leave the content of the first two chapters behind. After reading the first chapter, I thought the setting and everything were pretty good, but in the second chapter I almost choked to death. In the third and fourth chapters, I found that the protagonist was beaten in vain.

The sense of deus ex machina is very strong. In the forced start, he was beaten by Tiansheng's own sister until he lost his memory. He also suffered an attack that would be fatal to ordinary people. The reason for the attack was to treat the protagonist's fantasy impotence? In the end, the impotence was cured, but the protagonist's family was ruined because the sister from heaven beat the protagonist into useless things, and the heroine was transformed into a containment-level doll (infertile). So is this a work about the treatment of infertility? This deus ex machina's sister "doing it for your own good" directly caused family members to die. If the story is to be rounded out, will the deus ex machina have to be used again? (Confusion) After reading the free chapter and reading the content in the comment area, I no longer dare to order.

This book was also very successful. Many people came back and wrote a lot of suggestions before abandoning the book. I feel that the author wrote the plot too hard. Even if the book becomes famous in the future and many people read it, it may not be able to survive the first seven chapters 🙂

No wonder no one read it, I was told to quit after four or five chapters, it's such a clichéd beginning.

Let's go back to the pit and continue to start Keyboard Warrior. What I want to say is a more refreshing question. I have seen the protagonist's first encounter with Xiamu, and I saw the author describing the protagonist's attitude towards Xiamu like this: "In view of the fact that Xiamu dared to kidnap Lu Cheng's lover, Lu Cheng had already filled out a death notice for him in his heart. Single. The real God of Death does not send out notices, he always sends death notices directly." My first reaction when I saw this was to read back the plot, and then I found that Xiamu was not dead, and it seemed to be handled in the same way as Shana - fell into the sea and ran away. I can understand the author's emphasis on supporting characters. It's not easy to portray flesh-and-blood characters, and you also have to consider the issue of ambush, but the way of letting the tiger go back to the mountains and then continuing to disgust the protagonist personally feels very un-fictional. Internet articles can accept very complex backgrounds and entangled main lines. The story of "Grass Snake Gray Thread Faultless Thousands of Miles" is well written and can make people talk about it, but the small plot and small copy of the Internet article do not support such repeated entanglements. When the plot reaches Xiamu, I think it ends very cleanly and happily in Mozhen. Although it leaves a small tail for the subsequent plot, the dungeon itself ends very cleanly. Other plots such as Ge Pei Liao and Shana all have regrets of one kind or another. It doesn't matter once or twice, but if the protagonist fails to do his best every time, it will make people feel uncomfortable. If this book is compared to Mystery, I think this book is more realistic than Mystery. The author's writing skills are stronger. The disadvantage is that it is not enough for online writing. It is obvious that the secret plot ends very cleanly. (The copy I'm talking about is not a whole volume of mystery, but a small plot that makes up a volume. If it were a whole volume, it would be like the descendants of the evil god in the first volume living until the second volume)