Investigators of the Void Realm

From a writing and setting perspective, it's quite good, with no obvious logical flaws. However, the beginning is a major problem. Some personal opinions: what was your purpose in writing this book? If it was simply to write a book you wanted to write, without any further explanation, then this beginning is completely unacceptable if you're considering sales and revenue.

Three warnings to quit? Can't stand this kind of plot? Does it have to be about going from being powerful to being utterly useless, and then slowly climbing back up again? And it's your only family member who beats you into this state, saying it's for your own good? It's pointless, I can't stand it.

If I were the male lead, the first thing I'd do upon regaining my memories would be kill his sister. Putting everything else aside, if the male lead hadn't lost his memory, at least Chen Xiangxue, a B-level martial artist, wouldn't have been skinned alive and turned into a puppet. Events like the Sheath God's invasion wouldn't have nearly killed him. The funniest part is that he finally escaped the "White Emperor's Walker" before losing his memory, and now he's back to being someone's servant.

I suggest at least indirectly describing the protagonist's sister's psychology... Otherwise it just feels incomprehensible and even a bit disgusting. If you really want to keep the protagonist away from the investigators, at least give him a makeover and send him away. What kind of crazy move is it to just beat him half to death, make him lose his memory, and then leave him there?

Following your writing style, you might as well just dismantle the first three chapters and introduce them later through flashbacks. Right now, all I see is the deletion of the protagonist's abilities and memories, which were already intertwined with bizarre events, all under the guise of doing it for the protagonist's good.

Having read up to chapter four, I couldn't resist browsing the comments section. The author really should have just left the first two chapters at the end. After reading the first chapter, I thought the premise and everything was pretty good, but the second chapter almost made me choke. And in the third and fourth chapters, I realized the protagonist just got beaten up for no reason.

The story has a strong sense of deus ex machina. The protagonist is forced to start by having his older sister appear out of nowhere, causing him to lose his memory and suffer attacks that would be fatal to most people. Was the reason for this attack to cure his fantasy-style impotence?

This book is quite successful; many people who abandoned it came back to write a lot of suggestions. It feels like the author overdid it with the plot, and even if the book becomes famous and attracts many readers, it might not last past the first seven chapters. 🙂

No wonder nobody reads it; the first four or five chapters are enough to make people give up—the beginning is too cliché.

Back to the pit, back to my keyboard warrior mode. What I really want to talk about is the issue of satisfying moments. I've read up to the part where the protagonist first meets Underwood, and the author describes the protagonist's attitude towards Underwood like this: "Given that Xia Mu dared to kidnap Lu Cheng's lover, Lu Cheng had already mentally filled out a death notice for him."