Hogwarts Immortality Story

👍👍👍 If that sounds like it, it is recommended to strengthen the system structure of cultivating immortals. For magical creatures, you can consider getting a beast-controlling partner to upgrade and evolve together.

It feels pretty good. I hope I don't want to be a eunuch. Come on, author!

From the author's point of view, the intention of this book is very good. I have always wanted to read a book about Harry Potter's world being invaded by the East. However, the power of cultivating immortality written by the author is a bit too high-end compared to Harry Potter. It is actually very difficult to write 180,000 words, and it may still collapse later! ! Restart it. I suggest you keep the BOOS unchanged and change the world of Harry Potter, or give up the system of cultivating immortals directly and change to the system of witches or the power system of Maoshan Taoist priests. The whole power system is equivalent and it will be easier to write. The main line can follow the plot and flow easily. The highlight is the contrast between the two cultures. In the middle, you can add to reverse the values ​​of some young wizards, change the monster-fighting process of the trio, and the protagonist can become a person who is familiar with the plot, and release it in advance. Sirius, catching Wormtail, subduing or killing the basilisk, change the whole process, don't write it along the lines of one, two or three years old, which will eventually lead to Voldemort not being resurrected, and then you can transcend Voldemort, albino himself, and finally create the fifth house of Hogwarts, so that Eastern magic has a long history. In order not to collapse and not expand the world, just write a small piece of Britain and Europe, which can let China fade out of the whole book without mentioning it. This is not difficult and the main line is clear!

The book is good, but there are a few poisonous points in the middle. I hope to pay attention to it. If I hadn't read the book for so many years and endured it, I would probably have left. First, Luo Fu, this is the biggest poisonous point at present. He passed on the skills and resources inexplicably. I didn't know how to cherish the skills I was given, but the key was to sell the elixir after changing hands without telling the protagonist before selling it. If you say you'll sell it later, then there's no problem. Second, the unicorn was too annoying when it first appeared. It stole the blood of the mythical beast and then ate it forcefully when it was discovered. It can be written that the unicorn is dying, and he will give him a drop as a favor, and then he will claim his master. But fortunately, I collected it later, so it's still okay. I know that whether it is skills, resources, or the blood of mythical beasts, these must be given. Otherwise, how would I accept my younger brothers and mounts? But the way of giving was wrong, so I felt awkward while watching it. In general, the writing is to my liking. The main character is Chinese, Hermione is not included, she doesn't hang out with the Iron Triangle, and it's not too procrastinating. It's only one or two hundred chapters long. This is almost a common problem with other HP writers. Finally, it is best not to have too many evil gods. One is enough. Twelve of them will weaken the charm of the original work. Voldemort will lose his B-square. It can be written that there is only one evil god left to run into the world and join forces with Voldemort. Otherwise, if there are too many evil gods, everyone will eventually become immortals and the taste will change. The most important thing is that it is possible to cultivate immortality, but write more about the integration of cultivation and magic, otherwise it will become the kind of magic world pretentiousness of the immortal cultivator that has just appeared on the Internet in the past few years. Come on, keep writing, don't be a eunuch

It's too short, can it be updated five times?🤭🤭🤭

The style is not quite right. Just by looking at the catalog, Muggles without talent will know that the protagonist will be ridiculed or something, and then pretend to be slapped in the face. You must know that admission to Hogwarts is written by admission. Every gifted wizard will have his name written on it when he is born. How can the protagonist be admitted if he has no talent? If you force admission to intervene in the plot, you will not please both ends. The introduction and the exercises in the catalog are completely different from Harry Potter. Compatible, if you want to watch Cultivation, there is no need to watch it in Harry Potter. If you have a completely incompatible system, there will definitely be no idea of the protagonist learning magic and improving magic. Then you can only write that the protagonist becomes invincible all of a sudden, otherwise it will appear that Cultivation is weak, and then the protagonist becomes invincible. It is meaningless if you intervene in the plot. It is difficult to write, and it is like playing house. You can only write nonsensical things like Gandalf, Harry Potter, and Flying Sword, Hermione, which will look very stupid. . . . If you want to write about cultivating immortals, you should write that the protagonist has a wizard talent, but then finds that he cannot cultivate immortality as before in Harry Potter. The protagonist can only use magic, look up information in the library, combine past lives, combine magic elixirs, magic Nascent Soul, and then develop some Orientalized spells.

In fact, I still don't know how the protagonist's realm is divided. What I've always seen is scattered information.

There is a reason why your book is not good