One Piece: the Strongest Fantasy Beast System

This introduction makes people have no desire to read it. I guess he is Long Ao Tianwen, more like a novice.

Although I really don't want to say it, what is it about? Kap has a mansion? ? ? You don't even understand clearly when writing about pirates? Also, when Garp recruits disciples, he never looks at whether you work hard or have talent. He just needs to see if you have the right eye. Who knew that Kerby had talent back then? ? ? Wasn't it also accepted? Also, even if Garp has a mansion, it is his headquarters, not Donghai. In addition, not everyone knows about CP9, and it is not under the control of the Navy Headquarters. You don't even read the original work, so you write a stupid story and still recruit people? Don't you know that most people in CP9 were raised by orphans? Rob Luqi was trained by CP9 since he was a child. He is a military force capable of destroying a country by himself at the age of 14. This was mentioned from the beginning of his game.

Just look at your resume and you will know that nothing written on it is థ౪థ

Just the introduction alone makes me have no desire to read further.

Doujin, what is doujin? It is an adaptation based on the basic settings of the original work. Do you know why the novel that started a genre is a classic? It may look ordinary, but it is a classic. Because this design was proposed by him at the beginning, and when he proposed it, the basis of this setting was stipulated by him. If you write a fanfic before he has finished writing it, he only needs to add the setting to you, and your book will completely collapse. Maybe his writing is average, but before he finished writing, he made the rules of this book. Maybe he had a loophole in the front, and you filled it yourself. It turned out that it was not a loophole, but a hole he dug, which will be explained later, then you will easily collapse In addition, let's talk about the problem with your novel, Some people like pirates because of freedom, Some people like pirates Military, because of justice Everyone has their own opinions, and my opinion of your novel is that it is a random modification and random compilation. Maybe you have not even watched the One Piece anime, or you have not checked the information. After reading a little novel, I feel that I should be able to change it The overall evaluation is that as a fan novel, this book is rubbish. As for some low-grade ones, maybe it is okay.

I reviewed it once before, and I found that there were many things that I didn't criticize. First: Brother Ming is a character who must retaliate, but if you are useful to him, or if you have a certain strength, he will put down his punishment and come to cooperate with you. You can see this by going to Gilder Tezolo (the Golden Emperor) before. He stole three evil spirits at Brother Ming's auction house. Regarding the magic fruit, from the underground bounty at the beginning to the later cooperation, it can be seen that Brother Ming will let go of punishment as long as there is benefit, but the premise of everything is strength, and Pig's Feet didn't even have the strength of a hair at the beginning. Why would Brother Ming cooperate with you? Or what do you have to cooperate with Brother Ming? (Don't take what you wrote as an example. According to Brother Ming's character, he will definitely test your strength and talk about cooperation.) Second: Are the pig's feet and this golden finger serious? Why do you feel like you are just a jerk? Now that you've given the golden finger, don't go around here or there, otherwise others will think you're just a faggot. Third: Garp's character, which is why I said you haven't watched One Piece. From seeing Ace being executed, Garp revealed his inner thoughts openly. In the memories before watching, Garp has always had a carefree character. It is not difficult to infer that he is a person who does not bring his emotions to his face. He may be in a daze silently when he is alone, but he will never show sad expressions in front of his subordinates. Fourth: How come there are no eunuchs in the fanfic One Piece you wrote? Everyone has rushed to the street, so hurry up and go home to farm!

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Just a tool, no ideas of his own, doing this and that, thinking he is smart,

If you are dissatisfied, you don't have to read it. Anyone who has been to university, or middle school knows that we need to seek common ground while reserving differences. You don't have to love, but please don't hurt Comments are used to raise questions, discuss shortcomings, and seek improvement. "People who seek reality in fictional stories must have something wrong with their brains." I like to talk about the plot of the original work so much. Go read the original work yourself. In the original work, Kaido is immortal and Blackbeard eats three Devil Fruits. Why don't you talk to Oda about it? 🙂🤔🤔Some of them have been slapped in the face, so I won't mention it You guys haven't even read any of them and yet you are so confident in what you say in the comment area, and every sentence you say is reasonable. Come here and I will give you a chance. If your work exceeds this author's performance at the same time, or is the same, I will shut up and admit defeat.

The ability is quite good, but the combat power is set too quickly. If you write something like this, you will be invincible. This year, the combat power has not reached the level of a general. If it is written as invincible and there is no atmosphere, it will not look good. I hope the author will try his best to write about the process of becoming stronger, so that the writing can be long, otherwise it will be invincible if it is released at this speed. Not much left to write.