Dreaming Back to the Past Life and Breaking the Bad Relationship

The writing is excellent! Worth a look! Collected permanently! Take your time and watch! Come on update! Welcome to visit us and give us advice!

1. The title of the book is very girlish, quite average, so it's pretty good. Personally, I think the layout of the introduction can be changed and not be so dense. 2. Pay attention to punctuation marks and short sentence descriptions, and try not to have typos. Many readers will worry about this. A cleaner page will make it more comfortable to read. 3. The first few chapters are still a bit confusing and a bit tiring. 4. The writing is very attentive, but the writing style is a bit immature, please improve it gradually. Come on (ง˙o˙)ว

It's another weekend, the sun hangs high in the sky, scorching the earth. A man who was wrapped up tightly met a rich second-generation man wearing sunglasses. (Note: The one with Guang Guoyu wearing tight scarf, the one with Feize sunglasses) When Feize saw the person coming, he felt that this person was a little strange, so he shouted to him: "Hey, why are you wearing so many clothes? Isn't it hot?" Guang Guoyu stared at the man through the tight scarf, and then couldn't help but cursed: "Does it have anything to do with you?" Feize heard the man's cold words and felt that he was rich. Dai's identity was insulted, so he rushed forward, grabbed the man's collar, and lifted it up easily: "How can you talk to people? I still care about you after all!" Wang Baoyu, although his feet could not touch the ground, was still very calm: "Then just grab my collar? Oh, then thank you for your concern." Feize put Bao Baoyu down, not wanting to look at him, who made him so deflated! But then he suddenly became curious about this person's appearance. He felt that as long as he was a normal person, he wouldn't wear so much on such a hot day. And this person is definitely "abnormal", which means he must be some kind of star! This kind of brain circuit is quite novel, Feize himself thinks. But Feize hates celebrities. He thinks celebrities are boring things. He still likes scientists. He thought about it, and when Bai Guangyu wasn't paying attention, he reached out suddenly, pulled the scarf away from the knot, and then took away his sunglasses. Ah! Well, so beautiful! He, he is that person who is extremely beautiful, extremely attentive, and devoted to everything—White House Yu. That is, he is his only celebrity idol. Mainly because he takes everything seriously. Not long ago, in order to ensure that the heroine appeared normally, he even put on women's clothing. Therefore, he is also nicknamed "Women's Clothes Zai Zai" and "Women's Clothes Boss", but he doesn't care at all. He only cares about his works - presenting excellent works to the audience. And now, there is still a lack of an actor, so there is no way for this to be released. Many girls went to the interview wearing men's clothes in order to stand with Bai Baoyu. Unfortunately, they were not qualified and were rejected. Idol, idol is looking at me? Feize came back to his senses, only to see Bai Guangyu looking at him coldly, with a thick layer of frost already forming on his face. "Idol, idol, what are you looking at me for?" Feize's face turned red all of a sudden. Who made Bai Guangyu suddenly come closer and look at me so carefully? "Oh, it's okay, bring me the things." Bong Baoyu stared for a while, retracted his head, and shook his head: It's not him, not that boy! So he stretched out his hand and asked Feize for something. "Oh, here." Feize stretched out his hand and gave the scarf and glasses to Bai Baoyu blankly. White House Yu turned to leave. "Wait a minute, idol, why don't you sing? Your songs are also very nice!" Feize came to his senses again and hurriedly said something to Guang Guoyu. White House Yu stopped, but did not look back. The corners of his mouth raised slightly: "I understand, thank you." His tone was not as cold as it was at first. It turns out to be you, little boy... We finally meet again! White House Yu smiled and walked away. And Feize just watched him go away blankly, everything was so quiet and beautiful together! This is the first small theater, I haven't finished writing it yet, I will write it when I have time! This has nothing to do with the main text or extras, it is purely for entertainment! 🙂

In the first world released so far, who do you like best? Contestant No. 1: Suwei Contestant No. 2: Jiu Yu Contestant No. 3: Zhou Su Contestant No. 4: Xihe Contestant No. 5: Feize Contestant No. 6: Guang Guangyu

The writing is really good. I have saved it to find some inspiration. I can't write such a detailed article.

The big entry point is very interesting. The writing is smooth and the pace is fast. I support the collection. Thank you very much＾0＾~

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Hmm... How to put it? When I first read the beginning, I felt that the author must be a child who is not too old. Then after reading the words you wrote at the beginning, I was sure that he was indeed an underage student gang. I admire your perseverance in studying your studies at a young age while not being afraid of hard work in writing your own story. Then next, let's put aside your real identity and briefly talk about some of your opinions on this book specifically about the work. They may not be correct, but it's just for communication. 😊 1. About the title of the book It is very literary, and I clearly know what the story wants to express, and there are no flaws. 2. About the characters and content The first is the description of the characters. I feel that in the author's writing, the characters' personalities can be roughly divided into two categories, but they all have a common characteristic, which is simple sensitivity and easy to get hurt. Maybe this is your character, because it can read the emotions you want to express, but one problem is that the psychological description of the character is not easy, which makes the character's dialogue a bit weak. In addition, there does not seem to be much description of scenery. "Blending of scenes" can often add points to the writing style. When you don't know how to describe the inner activities of the characters, you can use the surrounding scenery to set it off. Just like the description of "the solitary smoke is straight in the desert, and the sun is setting in the long river", we can understand the loneliness of the poet without too much explanation. Perhaps due to experience, the author's writing style seems a bit immature upon first reading. To be honest, I can feel the wonderful outline of the story hidden in your mind, but it is difficult to express it completely. It is like "looking at the picture to speak". Translating a comic into words will always lose some of its luster. Then there must be foreshadowing in the novel. It can be seen that the author is very aware of this aspect, but it seems not natural when you foreshadow the writing. For example, in the previous chapter, every critical moment was preceded by the sentence "Suwei didn't hear clearly...". The more times it happened, the more readers would feel like "this guy has bad ears" (I personally feel this way). You can try to write it in a different way, similar to the kind of "he hesitates to speak", for example, the other party wants to say something but does not say it and is only moving in his heart, and Suwei notices and wants to ask, but the other party changes the subject and does not give him a chance, etc. Finally, to sum up, the story is attractive and the setting is novel and interesting. However, the writing style is a bit immature and the detail processing is not very good and needs accumulation. (I accidentally became a chatterbox, but please believe that the book review is very sincere, and there is absolutely no intention to criticize😊) One more word, "come on", whether it is studying or writing, "come on". Of course, comparing the two, academic studies are still more important, and you cannot ignore one. 👏👏