Take the Dark World with You

Well, I quit after reading chapter 56. Let me tell you the content of the novel first. The general content is: Xiao Gu is a reborn person. One year before his rebirth (three hundred years ago), there is a golden finger, which is a stone ball bound to the soul. He can enter the world of Diablo to fight monsters and upgrade, with some realistic pretense interspersed in between. It's a slap in the face, and the emotional scenes are so awkward. After all, I'm over 300 years old, and I still have my first love... In the end, it's still a spare 😂. The writing is a bit stiff, and I'm familiar with dark games, so I quit it in the end. My personal feeling doesn't represent other book lovers. You can still read it, but it's a bit new, and newbies may like it.

The author's highly poisonous writing style actually gave me the feeling of reading earthy love stories, which made me feel soothed! Highly recommended! Much better than a serious novel! 👍👍👍👍

I have played Diablo 2 for a long time and read a lot of fan fiction. The author's idea is relatively novel, similar to Diablo and apocalyptic novels, where the two worlds shuttle between each other. I feel that the world built by the author is too complex. If it can be controlled well, it can make the scene magnificent and the Bai people contend. However, the requirements for the author's writing skills are too high. At present, I don't see that the author has such control ability. Hope to make some progress in the future. If you can't, you can grasp the development of the two main lines of darkness and reality, and it will be a good novel. Looking forward to it. . . .

I hope the author can write Darkness more rigorously. Everyone who came to read this book came for the dark side, but what was written in the end? Is any of the content about Darkness correct? The equipment is all wrong, ridiculously wrong; upgrading to level 6 before Chapter 37 has a total of 50 mana points (see the author's statement in Chapter 31 for details), which means that level 1 fire bombs can be used 25 times. Basically, there will be no mana after a battle, and other attributes must be piled up; according to the description, the equipment is put into the equipment slot to take effect, and it will automatically appear in the hand. I forgot which chapter it was from, but it was written in the main hand with the staff (one hand is unknown), and the crossbow and crossbow bullets were placed in the off-hand. Isn't this nonsense? The crossbow is a two-handed weapon, and the crossbow bullet is an off-hand weapon. There are many, many other mistakes. I suggest the author go through the information. Even downloading a modifier to automatically generate equipment is much better than writing this nonsense.

Author, do you know the concept of a weapon weighing more than 20 kilograms? Let me tell you this. The Miao sword I am practicing now is 145 centimeters long and weighs 3.7 Kilograms. It is difficult for me to practice now. I can swing a sword weighing more than 20 kilograms freely with a weight of 40 kilograms. In ancient times, even if it was not as good as Xiang Yu and Lu Bu, it is probably not far behind. One kilogram in the Three Kingdoms period is equivalent to 220 grams today. Lu Bu's Fang Tian Hua Ji weighed 95 kilograms, which is equivalent to 45 kilograms today. Zhao Yun's gun weighed 45 kilograms, which is equivalent to more than 20 kilograms today. A sword weighing more than 20 kilograms should no longer be called a Han sword. It should be called the Great Sword of Demacia. I'm not targeting you, I'm just telling you what a terrifying concept it is to be able to wield a weapon weighing more than 20 kilograms freely while carrying a weight of 40 kilograms... Based on my more than ten years of experience in reading thousands of magical secrets, your book is also very good in the same type. Come on!!! Finally, don't be an eunuch, otherwise I will really send you a big sword weighing more than 20 kilograms.

End this relationship as soon as possible. What is the concept of blood and fire for more than three hundred years? We have only been in love for three years, and all the emotions have been exhausted in such a long time. Why are you still struggling here? If you don't have the time, it's better to end it happily and start a new life.

Using something that had great influence in the past as a tool to attract readers is a common method for online articles. The original origin is unknown. The earliest work that can be accurately found is Infinite Horror, the founder of Infinite Style (there should be earlier ones, but the image is not deep, and it is estimated that the influence is not so). It used movies. Later authors introduced other elements such as games, TV series, and famous online articles, and quickly developed data flow stories. From constant time-traveling, the protagonist traveled to a relatively fixed world as a single player. However, I discovered a phenomenon: Except for infinite streaming, most time-travel games, when giving plug-ins to the protagonist, give almost all elements of the game theme to the protagonist alone. I guess the author wanted to give full play to the appeal of the game elements. Take the commonly used World of Warcraft as an example. Assuming that the protagonist's plug-in is to explode the soldiers of Warcraft, then the protagonist will be set to be able to explode all the soldiers in World of Warcraft. I guess the authors all thought that--some people liked the ax-swinging power of the green-skinned orcs, and some people thought that the human alliance's minions were full of plate armor, so they might as well have them all, so that all readers would be happy. But, here comes the question: When will the Alliance and the Horde be at peace in the game plot? Either at war or on the way to war. The hatred between the two sides is as deep as the sea. Greenskins and human infantry both working for the protagonist? Isn't it against the law? Can you imagine a situation where a sword master who wants to kill all humans has to work with a human paladin? If it is written like this, will these elements still be the same? Can it still attract people? At most, it may attract a few people for a while, but after a dozen or twenty chapters, the unrecognizable transformation will not please both parties, and the book will gradually be sold out. This is just an example. For example, let the protagonist wear a certain game template of a priest's stick, and then find it unexciting, and then let him summon skeleton soldiers. People with these two abilities in the game are originally mortal enemies... And so on. Will have similar effects as mentioned above. Because of this kind of thing, most of the online articles brought into the game were rejected. A few were okay for a while. If you pay attention, you will find that the authors did not reference elements that are incompatible with each other. For example, only the content of one profession in the role-playing category is brought in, and other elements in the game that are obviously hostile to it are not referenced. Actually... Going back to the old online article, I personally think that the solution to this contradiction was given at that time: as long as there is more than one person who travels through time, but a group of people, each with their own abilities, isn't it over? Why can't the infinite team battle mode be applied to a fixed world? For example, they are all stories about fighting and dominating in ancient times. It can be told in several lines. Five people can travel at the same time to five different corners of the fictional world and get plug-ins from five different camps in the same game. Among these five people, there are enemies and friends. And as the story goes on, the enemy and we are constantly changing, and they are constantly fighting with their own plug-ins. In this way, all elements of the game are present, which can attract more people. At the same time, everyone's abilities have no big bugs and are very coordinated. However, so far, very few authors have written this.

After reading a few chapters, I felt a bit choked up by the poison, and I couldn't express some words quickly. As a veteran who lived for three hundred years before being reborn, he was betrayed, betrayed, imprisoned and tortured to death. After rebirth, not only will you be full of rage and prepare for revenge, but at least you will concentrate on accumulating strength. After all, you have a treasure, and if you don't have strength, you will die in the end. Instead, you have written several chapters with an ex-girlfriend who gave up on you. Brother, who still remembers her after three hundred years (т⌣̀_⌣́). I admire you for remembering your classmates in elementary school, and your grandpa, a high-ranking official who wanted to save his college roommate with a treasure. Ha, a high-ranking official will have a lot of people paying attention even if he dies, not to mention someone who was about to die but was saved. This is equivalent to It's the same as leaving five thousand yuan outside the door of your house. There won't be many people you see who won't take it away. It's just looking for death. As for finding a backer, it's more funny. Power belongs to the personal world, and strength is the biggest backer (*￣m￣). My personal suggestion is that it doesn't matter how you write this book, but if you want to be a professional, don't write it so naively. Even if you write about a ruthless madman, some people will read it, but no one wants to read a fool who can only live by relying on the aura given by the author to the protagonist, or a fool who thinks he is smart.

Basically, all the poisonous points are gathered together. The classmates are all the children of high-ranking officials. To save the grandfather, they force to show off, force to show off, force to be open-minded, and force to be mature. What a waste of the dark theme

After reading so many comments, they all say that the author's emotional drama is toxic, so I won't talk about the emotional drama, and let's talk about other aspects. First, after reading 30 chapters, 90% of the content is about a live-action dark game. I don't talk about the plot, it is really a game. It feels like the author is working as a game anchor. Second, in the previous life, the protagonist exposed the equipment of the dark world and was hunted for hundreds of years. This time, when he was still a weakling, he took out the healing potion and cured his friend's elder for the sake of so-called friendship. Then the friend's family exposed the protagonist in a very high-profile manner, and then used the protagonist's healing potion as a favor, and then various big shots went to find the protagonist. Whether it is poisonous or not is up to you. Thirdly, my first love of three years was snatched away by a young master from an aristocratic family, and I didn't even let go of it. The young master from aristocratic family didn't give up and sent someone to remove one of the protagonist's legs. As a result, the protagonist killed the two young men who were sent there. He also verbally warned the young master from aristocratic family over the phone. Then he just waited for the young master from different levels to provoke and retaliate. Shennong, is this poisonous or not? Anyway, I am about to be poisoned to death.

The relationship line has been revised from scratch, thank you for your suggestions! Some of the points I forgot to mention when writing, resulting in some awkwardness in the later text, have been adjusted. Finally, I welcome everyone's reading and suggestions after discovering any problems. Thank you.

He was originally chased to death for more than two hundred years because he exposed the dark world. After being reborn, he will be exposed again in Chapter 12? You are so wise. Poison hair.

Stop at chapter twenty-three! The subject matter is okay, but the plot is really poorly written. 1 There is no ex-girlfriend anymore. It's enough to still miss her after being betrayed. 2 I still want to give away potions. I was like this in my previous life and I don't have a long memory. 3 In the park, someone saw him hacking away. . . With the virtue of pig's feet, it is true that he deserved to be hunted down in his previous life.

A swordmaster who has lived for three hundred years, is always vigilant but is sneak-attacked by the lowest level monster, the Wire-haired Rat. And then he predicts that he cannot defeat five sinking demons, but after being discovered, he easily kills the sinking demons without any injuries. predicts that he can kill all the zombies, but is almost killed in reverse. I don't know how to complain about the author's character and plot.

I vomited before I finished reading Twenty Four ~ The protagonist has lived for hundreds of years, and is still a being who has been hunted by the gods for hundreds of years. This kind of person gives people the impression that he is either a cold-blooded, cold-blooded, decisive and true man, or a cunning, changeable and clever person. But why is the protagonist still clinging to me now that he has been reborn? I was poisoned half to death when I saw the woman who betrayed me in my previous life. What happened before anything happened? You fell into a manure pit and drowned in your previous life. Now when you come back in this life, you feel that you are not dead yet and you continue to dance? As a reborn person, you already know the direction of the future world, but you still create an atmosphere of sadness, depression, and nostalgia with that girl. You keep saying that you don't care, it doesn't matter, and you are indifferent. Then you just let it go and it's over. Why are you writing so many inner dramas? When people are away, you are worried about making calls, chatting on the phone, and making appointments at the coffee shop. How can your incessant and messy appearance be able to escape the state of mind accumulated by hundreds of years of being hunted by the gods?

It's just for Diablo, what kind of plane are you doing? Have you figured out the situation? Who wants to watch the emotional drama It's settled. After 300 years of pursuit, escape and killing, there is really no one who can use all his skills.

It was really poisonous to me. It was poisonous from the first chapter. I had to wait for the protagonist to break up for more than 20 chapters. Who knew that I finally asked her out to talk. I was speechless. I haven't contacted her for almost half a year since she came home. Every time I called her, she hung up after just a few words. If there was anything to talk about, I knew from my roommate that she and her crush were together. I don't know how many times we asked her out. It would be much better to just say break up directly on the phone. I haven't paid attention to you for so many months. I probably don't know how many times I've been to the hotel. I don't know what to do.

In the first chapter, the author writes about the protagonist's awesomeness and lightning. He has been chased and escaped for many years, and faced severe torture from the gods. He has been unwavering for a hundred years. Well, the author has set up the character well. If there is even a little bit of poison in the subsequent plot, your book will lose a lot of readers and make no money. 🤔 Three hundred years of practice, if there is a situation like dog licking, it would be really haha

No, I couldn't help it when I saw that the woman's grandfather was about to give medicine. People have betrayed you. Why are you still licking it? And in the last life, you died because you were not strong enough. You exposed your golden finger. In this life, you have just started again. You don't have the strength to expose the potion. What do you think? If you want to contact the country, you only need to be strong enough. Don't use too many methods. You won't be taken advantage of. You were cheated on in the previous life. I'm going to betray you again in this life. Why should I help her?

What a vicious start. Just lick it hard, it's been three hundred years and everything has faded. I don't believe you haven't had a second one for more than three hundred years.

I vomited, this author is really just enjoying himself and doing it for love. First, I write about first love, and then the old man is forced to break up by his old family. Then the old man of the woman is seriously ill, and the protagonist takes action to cure it. The old man is optimistic about the protagonist and forces the woman's parents to marry their daughter. My God, what kind of routine is this from ancient times? ? ? Moreover, they are in love with each other after all, and you, the male protagonist, are just a spare tire. The female idol has returned from abroad, and no one has contacted you to get married to the male idol, so the male protagonist is still begging for help? ? ? I threw up. Is being a disgusting reader any good to you?

I'm very resistant. . . Normally I would just leave if I can't stand it anymore, but this plot is full of bad points one after another. The reason why I watched it was just to take a look! ! ! Is this a routine I'm familiar with! ! ! Hahaha, when Meng Hui fell into the pit, but I can't stand it anymore 😜

Calmly analyze the failures of this book: 1. Personally feel that the setting and plot problems (I only persisted to more than twenty chapters): 1. Failure to do a good job in market research. Since the author writes about Darkness, he must first understand that most of the readers who have played this game are over 30 years old. And most of them are men. Boys at this age are no longer interested in relationships. The author started with three emotional royal chapters, which naturally dissuaded a large number of readers, and when many readers expressed resistance, he did not just cut it off neatly, but delayed the end for twenty chapters. (If you really want to write a good book, it is recommended that the author do a good job of analysis, such as the tastes of the target readers, and use strengths and avoid weaknesses instead of writing about emotions. I think this is the reason why the author hastily started writing without investigating the taste of the market) 2. What is the poisonous point? I personally think that the poisonous point is that it goes against the common sense of most people. There is a saying that goes well, every time you suffer, you gain wisdom, since the protagonist leaked the dark props in his previous life and was hunted to death. Then I fell into the same pit again in this life. The readers must think that this behavior is very feeble and makes people feel uncomfortable. They must feel that it is extremely poisonous, so they gave up the trap (I also fell in this paragraph). Even if the author said that the author was disguised when writing, he would be exposed in a big way. 3. There is a problem with the plot arrangement. The climax is not high, just plain water. When it comes to cooperating with a country, ignore the fact that cooperation requires strength. For example, if you insist on cooperating with the country, then you can pretend to be a cooperator and give the old man a potion. Then you can pretend to be B based on your mage skills. It not only improves the number of words, but also enriches the content, and the characters are more three-dimensional, rather than being brushed off in one stroke. The above content is my true feelings after reading this book. I only read a little more than twenty chapters and couldn't continue, so I point out that there may be something wrong in what I said, and I hope everyone can help me correct it.

The protagonist is really easy to bully, he sells micro-healing potions, and he doesn't keep his word and is indifferent even if he is shaken. His love rival repeatedly sent people to break into the house and kill people, but he still let it go. What a good temper.

I'm a newbie, and at the beginning, the emotional scenes were really not very good, so I've been taking the time to slowly change them recently, but it will be a little slower. Thank you for your reading and encouragement, as well as your suggestions and opinions. Whenever you see something unreasonable in the book, you are welcome to point it out and I will take the time to readjust it appropriately. Finally, thank you all for watching, and I hope you will support me a lot! Thanks.

The dark plot is boring, the realistic plot is frustrating, goodbye

After reading Chapter 25, except for the darkness, everything else was poisonous and I was poisoned to death.

It's poisonous enough to say goodbye.

Too poisonous. Write about feelings, the first few chapters, a short composition on Zhihu, posted on the forum more than ten years ago, telling stories.

It's too poisonous, disgusting, simply