Is This Really a Love Research Club?

There are too many shortcomings, just briefly mention them. First of all, let's talk about the character design. The male protagonist is not like the male protagonist, and the female protagonist is not like the heroine. The male protagonist, besides being handsome, is beaten and bullied every day, and no one would step into the role of such a person. The heroine is flat-chested, wild, and prone to violence, and no one wants such a girlfriend. Basically, the daily routine of youthful love is on the street. Then the plot. Running account, calm and steady. There seems to be no need to say the rest. . If writing a book is for self-pleasure, then just write casually. If you want to achieve results, at least give readers a sense of involvement.

The male protagonist asked the female protagonist a question and made a little joke. The female protagonist slapped the male protagonist in the street, and the male protagonist wanted to apologize to her. As I said before, the male protagonist is not a masochist, but he still plays like this. Sorry, it doesn't suit my taste, and even made me uncomfortable, so I slipped away 😐

The protagonist has no golden fingers. No plug-ins. It's really a piece of trash... No sense of immersion at all. How many times does that girl have to hit the male protagonist in one chapter? Even if he was slapped, the male protagonist would not object at all. Anyway, I could tell after reading Chapter 21 that the male protagonist is a loser.

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I started writing it when my mind was hot, but now I feel more and more unable to do it, and I regret it~ But I still have to let my son have an ending. 😭

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To be honest, it's a bit too bland, and the plot is even more boring. I don't think the protagonist is very powerful. Although it is a daily novel, it is still a daily life. How about letting the protagonist pretend to be a b?

The main character is written with such a lack of temper. It would be really uncomfortable for readers to read it.

The writing style needs to be improved, but I'll save it for now so I can read it in the future. It's quite interesting.

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It's too bad that there are no comments. I'll leave some. Well~ after reading the previous part, let me make some suggestions (please delete it if you don't like it) A large part of the reason for the poor performance of this book is that the description of the male protagonist is not enough. The male protagonist of Japanese light novels does not have the attributes of Asashi, which is absolutely indispensable in the dark style. In short, the male protagonist does not necessarily have to be able to fight, but he must be charming. No matter when or in any event, the "charm" of the male protagonist must be described. Sometimes it is unflattering to write about the personality of a female character in a large space. You can refer to My girlfriend is a voice actor and my system always wants to force me to confess my love. Write the male protagonist first and then expand it step by step. Go directly to the main story and write about the events and female characters in a large space and ignore the male protagonist. This will lead to comments such as "no sense of substitution" and "the male protagonist is weak". In fact, it's not that the male protagonist is weak, but that he's not familiar with it enough. I just haven't understood it enough after watching it so much, so I'm not familiar enough with it, so I'm going to find fault with it.

Dog licking article? ? Then I'd better dodge

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You can think more about the writing style, Gou Haihai's is good

Too useless, too weak, too violent.

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Having form but no spirit is ultimately a boring work

I think most of what you said downstairs is reasonable. The author had better learn a lesson and move to a higher level. Come on.

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