My Gold Finger Is Useless

Frankly speaking, it's not well written. Of course there are many problems, but aside from the mistakes you made, what I care about more is your understanding of the concept of "story". Obviously you lack a benchmark in your heart, and you don't have a "perfect look" in terms of writing. If you follow the analogy of copying, you don't know what a good story looks like at all. Without a concept, there is no "likeness". If you only rely on your own understanding and simply tell others about the setting, the story will not be able to rise to a certain level anyway, and the ultimate goal of your writing is definitely not to not be bad. The solution is for you to understand some concepts first. Read the book "Alienation" by Angry Banana. Then go to Zhihu to read his answer. In this way, after you have the idea of ​​"I think what I wrote is not good", your revision will naturally make progress. Take your time first. Without knowledge and practice, the work will not look better just by changing its appearance.

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After reading the first two chapters, I felt that the first chapter was okay, better than some vulgar beginnings, but I felt more anxious later on. There was a lot to say, but there was no focus. The writing structure was biased towards narrative. I still felt that some detailed things should not be written together with the main body. It felt very scattered. The above is my immature suggestion 😜