One Piece: I Have a System Under One Person

Thoughts, for the reference of the author/reader, for reference only From the initial point of view, the setting is very good, the one-person system of the magic modification, the missions are also okay, the first mission is still in line with the entertainment of light novels, the mission penalties are okay, a bit awkward but not stomach-ache. Then the interaction between the protagonist and the system is also a good setting. If it is well written, it will be very eye-catching, but at present, I feel that this system is worse than dead. Two There are many problems with the sentences, the most serious ones are various errors in punctuation Of course, it is commendable that there are relatively few typos, and it can be seen that the author has paid attention to it... Three In terms of writing style, it is very immature and has a lot of flaws. The sections are awkward. The characters' language is blunt and they don't seem to need to breathe. In some places, the name of the person added before the quotation marks is also very awkward in order to show who is speaking. There are some places where it is not necessary to use parentheses for explanation. It is best to integrate the explanation into the plot and give it through the language or description of the characters. The most important thing is that the author's complaints in the article make people feel like tearing up the book every minute, especially the third chapter, which is very dramatic and uncomfortable. It makes me feel that the author is purely amusing himself.

From the Pirate King! I just like it and collect it! Take your time and watch! Come on update! Welcome to visit us again!

I invested, and it's actually the first place. Come on, author.

The story is really well written, I support it! Great support from the author. It has been collected. Welcome to visit again!

The name is not good, what is there under one person, the Eight Wonderful Skills, why not call it the Eight Wonderful Skills of the Pirates. After strengthening the Eight Magic Skills, Liuku Xianthi can live forever, be invincible physically, and can eat and absorb. Kaido is considered a bear, can control the spirit and dispatch the general, and can control the Rocks. It is very disadvantageous to use both hands. Wait,,,,,,,, think about it yourself.

Sorry, after reading the introduction, I have no desire to read it.

It's boring to feed Charlotte Lingling, only a real man dares to sleep with her

If your life is arranged by others, what's the point of living again?

I've always had a question. Is domineering a type of internal strength? Armed Haki (inner power turns into armor), there seems to be other forms behind it, I don't know. For example, things that can be released outside the body or into other people's bodies. Have you read too many martial arts novels? My personal guess is, if you don't like it, don't comment.

Wouldn't it be nice to replace Ace's immortality in the introduction with Momonosuke's death? 😄 Ace died just to advance the plot (the fall of the white group made the pirates go berserk and Luffy grew up)

If it were me and I killed Roger directly, I wouldn't be able to let him say that.

Just now, my phone had no screen, and then I put it in my pocket, and when I cut it together, I happened to place a reward, 😅😅😅. I have to say that the author is very lucky.

Intermittent explosion of corpsesah

Why do I always feel that the beginning of the introduction is all FP, and the body is in parentheses?

Is the author too lazy? Even if I don't have much time when school starts, I can still update once a day, right?

Gan! Ace is immortal! Collected! I really like Ace! I also want to write novels, but it's a pity that I am a junior high school student who can't support my writing skills, and I still don't have the patience to update. . .

Oda wrote Ace and Whitebeard to death just to represent the end of the old era of pirates.