Dynavale and Hogwarts

The introduction says not to interfere or get close, but to follow the original plot at all times and everywhere. Find various reasons to follow the original plot. Those reasons are all prepared for the protagonist. The protagonist can use them to deceive himself, but none of them are suitable for the author. The author deliberately arranged this to make it easier to copy the original work. Apart from this, there is no other reason to explain.

I agree with the previous post written by Universal Knowledge. This is the first time I read an HP fan who can maintain the taste and write my own things bit by bit, so I read it in one go. After catching up with the progress, I actually had a "withdrawal reaction" 😂 There are so many so-called suggestions, opinions, complaints from readers, and even the so-called evaluation of "studying the original work intensively and reading the fan works widely". In fact, just take a look. The more self-centered this type of evaluation is, the easier it is to stand up and talk without back pain. Although it is important to cater to the market, a few people do not represent the market. I hope the author can stick to writing things with his own style. (However, I feel that Dana's strength is slightly weakened now. This is the feeling that he has defeated the student world. But think about it, if we only consider students, I estimate that one person can cut from the basement of Hogwarts to the tower without blinking. In the original book, he was really plotted by Lao Deng to death. Really hard steel, I feel that unless Lao Deng does not die, no one can survive)

The book is still good. It is better for the author to write according to his own ideas. Don't overly feel the readers' requirements when writing a book. The work is not RMB, and not everyone will like it. If you care too much about the readers' thoughts, the book will be unreadable. Write your own thoughts. Everyone also comes to see your views on the magical world. Caring too much about other things will not make you write better, it will only make you irritated. Come on, don't be a eunuch. You are considered a good writer in the fandom.

Chapter 21, Persuading you to quit, Snape inexplicably used Legilimency on you, a new student, you are sick, or do you think that after practicing Occlumency, he did not use Legilimency on you, you feel that the practice was in vain

The protagonist is too pushy. Although he has various plans, he always thinks that he is a god and does everything by himself. He says that he is not involved in Harry Potter, but all he thinks about is that I want to kill Voldemort with my own hands.

Please advise. It's like having a persecutory delusion. Every day, you feel that someone will peek into your private memories. They can use Legilimency, but they will definitely look at your memories? They don't know that you are a time traveler. I find that most of the people who write this have persecutory delusions. . . . . Among those who traveled to American comics, there is also Ancient Yi. . .

It was really good before going to school, but since then I have felt awkward. Snape and Quirrell faced Legilimency with the students every day. I asked who would dare to do this except Lao Deng. The protagonist started to get good grades after two classes and was exempted from classes. Boss, you don't dare to do this even if you have a system. Why are you going to school? Just find a library.

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The book is still worth reading, and it's not bad among fans. However, many details and character descriptions are inaccurate ~ Flying carpets are banned items by the British Ministry of Magic, but someone actually made a flying carpet to go to King's Cross Station. For example, when the protagonist went to the kitchen, the elf didn't carefully ask the gentleman if he needed anything. Instead, he asked the little wizard what he wanted to do, and then exchanged gifts with the protagonist. He didn't act like a slave at all. For example, Snape actually used Legilimency for all first-year students in the first class~ Professor McGonagall actually exempted the protagonist from class because the protagonist has mastered the knowledge of first-year students. Because if you perform well in the classes of spells and herbal medicine, you don't have to do homework, and you don't even have to write papers. There are many other places where the descriptions are not very consistent with the original characters. For example, Neville's character doesn't quite fit. Then in the second design, the protagonist meditates, but there is no such thing in the original work. I think this is the second design. The protagonist can also see the heald contract in his consciousness when he meditates. However, it's not unusual to have two fan-fics, as long as they don't change too much, there's nothing wrong with it. Overall, the book was okay, but the original character's personality didn't quite match.

In Harry Potter, when wizards meet each other, they use Legilimency?

I have read 174 so far. I personally think that the settings of magic and magic in this book are too materialistic, similar to ordinary cultivation. I think the settings in Harry Potter should be more idealistic. In addition, why is the protagonist's alchemy level so outrageous? The scientific research capabilities of the twins in the original work have exploded, and the items they have developed are restricted by Rowling to prank products with unstable performance. However, the protagonist is able to develop cross-generation mass products at every turn, and it is very slow to make money. . . I am really impressed that I have my own unique invention in the cutting-edge monopolized alchemy market. What I couldn't stand the most was when two people on the Quidditch team were arguing about position changes. The protagonist, as a transparent member of the team, stepped in without saying a word and created an illusion to simulate the happy time spent in the team in the past? What kind of secondary operation, if I were the person involved, I would definitely not be in the mood to watch this kind of operation. Even if I did, I would be extremely embarrassed and dig my toes on the ground, and maybe even get angry. However, this operation does fit in well with the protagonist's Madonna persona. Many people have mentioned that Snape and Voldemort lurking in the teacher's body gave the whole class Legilimency, which is unheard of. I don't know where the author got his inspiration. . . The protagonist's name is Dana, which is also weird. I did some random browsing and found no male names with this pronunciation in the Latin family, only as surnames or female names. The only special case I have found is the Japanese-invented name Dyna in Ultraman. The characters of Navi, the elves and the teachers are very strange. I personally feel that they are not extreme enough and are completely different from the original work. They feel like the characters of ordinary people. Finally, I personally think the writing style is a bit fluid. I personally believe it is highly toxic, so if you don't like it, don't spray it.

There are a lot of things you think you think. The protagonist, a child, can think of a way to do something that no one in the wizarding world has thought of studying for thousands of years? Few wizards from pure wizard families can learn magic before entering school. This is what the original book says, because the magic power of the young wizards is in an unstable state. Aren't you afraid of killing yourself by learning or practicing magic so early? Purebloods are not fools. If they can practice magic from an early age, they can't help but teach their children! Also, I think if you don't join the protagonist's team, it's best to enroll in school early. Firstly, you can learn magic first to improve your strength. Secondly, as a senior, you can more easily intervene in the plot.

I think that since the author has proposed the concept of a four-person group, the role of other people should be highlighted more. Instead of just the protagonist sharing those magic spells, other people should also have their own unique or great abilities to help each other. 😁😁Personal opinion, please don't comment

There aren't many poisonous spots, and they aren't too big either. It's a matter of taste. It's just that the writing is very average, has no special features, the writing style is average, the plot is average, there is no interest in reading it, and it can't arouse the interest.

There are 890,000 words, so the excerpts from the original work shouldn't be that small. Doesn't this make it clear that this is a poison classic…

This ending🤔🤔🤔

The boss volume is a complete hit, and the eyes are inserted. The book is unfinished, and people can turn around later.

That correspondent is either the author's trumpet, or he is paid. When someone makes a comment, he will put aside his words and retort wildly, as if he is renting money and is in a hurry to pay back.

Persecution paranoia, the mediocre protagonist feels as if his heart is as high as the sky... This is the wrong idea

The author doesn't know a lot of common sense in the original work, so he just set up the second guess. Transfiguration is divided into three categories: summoning, transformation, and disappearance. As a result, the summoning spell is said to be a creation made from nothing. How can it be so awesome? Several basic rules of transfiguration have been ignored by you. You dare to say that the protagonist is exempt from transfiguration. It's too poisonous.

To recommend my own book, I would like to thank the author in advance for {"NickName":"Book Friends 20180609063755056","UserId":317397907}'s permission🙏 "Hogwarts: The Ice Journey" mainly tells the story of the protagonist who enrolled in Hogwarts in 1981 and solved the mystery behind the cursed treasure house. This is my first time writing an article, but I will try my best to write it well.

It's so good to read, please give it a thumbs up to the author! Www, give me a reward

Another bad book? I searched for novels related to Qidian HP, but none of them were readable. . .

I am Shen Nong, and my evaluation is that I can barely read it, but if there is no book shortage and I am hungry, don't read it 😜

I think the author writes very well The story reads very smoothly It makes people feel very comfortable But there are a lot of typos😁😁

The writing in the fan fiction is more generous, but it's a pity that the ending is so dull. Baldru came and died together with the boss, and there was no mention of where the protagonist went with Snake. You have no intention.

Ending 6 is mine🤔🤔

To be honest, when I saw it on the shelves, I found that the advantages and disadvantages of the article were particularly obvious. First of all, what about the protagonist and his strengths? Adventure? The description is very interesting and innovative, but other characters in the article sometimes feel a bit OOC, and some places are not thorough enough. Let me talk about the points that I personally find a bit unacceptable: 1. Since the protagonist is so good at starting to create spells and treatments on his own (even the only one in the magic world), and he is an adult soul, he has not considered applying for a patent to protect his income, nor has he thought of getting anything from it. (And the world in the article is not very friendly.) 2 The Longbottom family received help from the protagonist Tianda. After reading Chapter 97, I didn't see any active response from them. It seemed that Mrs. Longbottom just said a polite word and then disappeared? Thinking about it, if you and I, our relatives and friends were rescued, they just said that if anything happens in the future, just ask yourself, and then just put it aside, it doesn't seem appropriate. Seeing this is a bit...

Persecution paranoia, but also perfectly integrated into the age of 6

It's really good to watch. The protagonist is not omnipotent at first, but through his own efforts, he slowly understands the mysteries of magic. He doesn't have too much contact with the protagonist. The whole story revolves around the protagonist, without licking the protagonist. The trio is not even a supporting character. It's very interesting 👍 I hope the author will open the next story where the protagonist is dragged into another world~ (the curse of Defense Against the Dark Arts is still not broken) Hahaha, the protagonist has not been taught for a year~