I Merge Everything in Tokyo

To be honest, I'll read a few chapters for now and then I'll talk about it. The problem of typos is human nature, but if there are too many, it will also affect people's mentality.

Philosophy of Life

I always feel that the relationship between the protagonist and his sister is handled too sloppily and abruptly. In his predecessor, he basically did all the bad things to his sister, but the protagonist suddenly starts to treat his sister well without any explanation. How to put it, at best it means that the protagonist has no self-awareness, at worst it means that the protagonist is brainless. At the beginning, I feel that the author was a little rushed and did not handle the relationship between the protagonist and the characters well, which was a bit sudden. I hope that the author can handle the characters and relationships between the characters in the novel more appropriately in the future, and it will be fine if he takes his time and does not have to rush it. Give some personal opinions and suggestions.

Can it be combined with figures? Want to see 👀

It's beautiful. I heard that the author has 500,000 saved manuscripts. Is it true? 😏

To be honest, after knowing that my sister is a superpower, but she still shows such a big difference, it feels like the protagonist regards everyone else as a fool,

Sorry, I fell down in Chapter 5

I just read Chapter 7, and there are a lot of small flaws. In the previous life, he often treated his sister roughly. After the protagonist's soul traveled, he suddenly treated his sister well the next day and made breakfast for her. This was very unexpected. What do you think of a witch sister who often deals with supernatural beings? The protagonist's younger brother calls the protagonist Brother Yang, which is a bit confusing. As someone who often watches anime, I know that one should call him Kazuo, unless the protagonist is Nishimura Yo. But the flaws do not hide the advantages. The setting of this possessed object is still very interesting. I am currently following it...

Overall, Goldfinger is very fresh, and the background design is also pretty good. . . . . . It's just that the author's writing style is a bit lacking (the foreshadowing and foreshadowing are too straightforward, it's better not to write them. There is a suspicion of deliberate foreshadowing, and the result is not fresh, but disgusting.), But it is still very good. . . . . .

Author, I have three golden chapters, but you are trying to persuade me to quit. If I continue reading, I will have a psychological shadow and quit.

I don't know why, but they look so similar

The mentality of the protagonist is quite reasonable when he first traveled through time, but the transformation from bad to bad can be said to be done in one step. This is the biggest failure and the main point of persuading him to quit. He was still worried about being discovered by others, but he was accepted directly and forced to advance the plot It is suggested that the author can modify the previous part to have a normal relationship with his sister when he has time. In school, his personality is more like a gangster student, or write a transformation process to make it more acceptable. However, if the transformation process is not well written, it will be quite toxic.

Having said that, the heroine is a witch. When seeing her brother acting so abnormal, shouldn't she immediately suspect that she is possessed by a ghost? Or is it that the heroine still has a little fantasy?

Can I become the fat person on a girl?

Why did you suddenly change and treat others as fools? It's so embarrassing.

My sister is so cute, the protagonist must not act like a human being