New World

I know you're a newcomer just by looking at the title of your book. After reading the two chapters you posted, I don't know what the theme you want to write about. I don't know the purpose of the wild boar that just jumped out at the beginning. I suggest you design a strong conflict or very attractive suspense at the beginning. The content of the first three chapters must be refined and meaningful to the main character. Delete all the useless lines, and keep the ones that are definitely useful to the development of the plot. I don't know if they are useful, so delete them as well. I suggest you read more at the beginning of the book of fire and learn from your experience. Don't learn from the master platinum master, but learn from the new author's book. If this is still the case for your follow-up book, I guess I won't be able to sign the contract. Please forgive me for some personal opinions.