Funeral Song of the Avenue

I have read the first three chapters of Dada's article. It is very good. It has its own unique insights and innovations. I hope you will stick to it and work hard to update it.

There can be more segments. The system settings can be explained clearly before. Otherwise, there will be people who can't understand what is being written (haha, the book friend below) Why the world of cultivating immortals is entered later, the purpose of the character's behavior is slightly far-fetched. For example, you can add systematic tasks, the man and woman encounter catastrophes, death crises, etc. To strengthen the conflict of the plot. ... A pretending boss passed by on the street.

Collected it, the author will work hard to update it!

I want to say that I didn't understand 😭

After reading the first five chapters, there is a certain sense of storytelling, but maybe because I haven't read much, I don't have the feeling of a big fantasy yet. The writing is relatively smooth, but there are some places where the "ground" and "the" are not distinguished 🤭. I didn't mark them out. You can modify them if you pay attention. Come on

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Receive it, accept it. Cheers to the author, hold on and don't stop updating!

I like your story very much, it's attractive, come on, I will follow it slowly!