Taoye, Run Quickly

Because I left a message saying that I must read it carefully, so I, a little scumbag, really read every word. Later, just write a short book review. First of all, the prologue is very beautiful and the writing must be very good. I like the first few paragraphs and I feel like I can save them. But there are some small points like "The ultimate beauty is what Phoenix calls it." The translation is that the ultimate beauty of Phoenix is ​​not as good as it said. I still managed to translate it almost through modification. I don't know if it's a matter of punctuation or something else, but it's a bit unsound. Of course, it could also be that my literary comprehension is too low, but it doesn't flow smoothly. Second, we say that details determine success or failure. Some punctuation is unclear and the reading is not very smooth. Thirdly, some characters have a dialogue or an action, so the plot is pushed back. Maybe it's because I've only read the first three chapters, but the plot could be tighter and the pace a little faster. Fourth, brother! ! ! Can you write more than one chapter? It's not enough.

Let me mention a few minor issues with terminology. First, there are too many dialogues in the article. As you scroll down page after page, basically every page is filled with long paragraphs of dialogue descriptions. There's certainly no problem with dialogue advancing the plot. However, if the plot is only promoted through dialogue, readers will suffer from aesthetic fatigue. It is suggested that some of the introductory words can be changed and narrated next to it. Or intersperse something between the dialogues. For example, after a character talks for two or three paragraphs, intersperse the character's inner activities, which can be written in one or two separate paragraphs. Of course, you can also intersperse environmental descriptions, not meaningless environmental descriptions, but environmental descriptions that can heighten the atmosphere and express the characters' moods. Environmental descriptions can also promote plot development to a certain extent.

Good brothers! Develop a good habit and get a recommendation ticket after reading it😊 I love you Fried Chicken. I love you. A recommendation ticket can bring us closer to each other.

The author's writing is really great! ! !

The author has something to say. Do you remember what I said about movements before? Later, I looked through the books of famous writers and found that there were not many descriptions. In other words, you must pay attention to controlling the amount of movement. If you fail to write well, I will apologize (you can't blame me if something goes wrong~) 😃

Springs and valleys, the world in July.

If I change the book cover and change my writing mood, my good brothers won't be able to find me, right?

The beginning is very good, so I saved it and will comment more after reading it ❤️

Thumbs up for you! ! Very well written! ! ! I just hope the author can update it soon and look forward to the following content,,,😿

The newbie came to visit, and we hope to come back for a return visit! ! (It's so well written, I'm envious 😜😜)

Hehe, come to read a book 😜😜🤓🤓

Fortunately, the number of words is too small and I can't see much.

The word count is a bit short, but the writing style is okay. It's pretty good. I'll read it again if I get fatter.

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I'm lazy, I'll update on time tomorrow, dear brothers ❤️

Woohoo, your word count has exceeded mine. Woohoo!

Taoist priest's recent update is a bit scary [shivering]

Accept it, thank you, author, for making progress together!

I'm here to vote again! ! ! Happy Dragon Boat Festival, let me spread the flowers with a hundred thousand words~