Supreme Desolate Realm

The soldier in "Taoyuan Suppression of Bandits" loved learning, so he collected the book and gave the author a 👍

I read part of it, it's good (*๓´╰╯`๓)♡, come on, I suggest you divide the big paragraphs into smaller ones, so that it looks easier.

Not bad, I suggest you divide it into paragraphs and describe it a little more, so please try to update it (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡

The writing is okay, but the paragraphs are a bit thick and long, which seems a bit difficult to read.

It is recommended not to write a paragraph that long

The writing is pretty good, divide it into more natural paragraphs otherwise your eyes will be tired from reading it.

Divide into paragraphs and be careful not to use words several times in one paragraph.

Come on, some long sentences can be added with a period and divided into more paragraphs.

Come on, remember to segment appropriately. Collected.