Whose Earth Is the Earth?

This new book is really well written, I like it.

It's a very good book. I hope the author will stick to it. Come on.

You can divide it into more paragraphs, each paragraph is too long. Even if the writing is good, your eyes will get tired after reading it for a long time.

A good science fiction article. Remember to divide it into more paragraphs to increase the reading effect. Come on!

The plot setting of the story is okay, it is a very common type in science fiction. The conventional routines of this kind of story will all focus on the protagonist's emotional changes and changes in the way he views things in the dispute between humans and alien creatures. The plot is quite clear so far. It's just that there is a problem with your segmentation. It was okay at first, but later on you almost only have one or two paragraphs per page, which can easily cause visual fatigue and mental fatigue to readers. Because normal readers need to spend a lot of time thinking in their minds and automatically sorting out useful information when watching a paragraph. An overly long paragraph like yours will consume a lot of the reader's brain power and may easily cause the plot to be missed. So this is definitely not advisable in online writing. Some irritable readers almost stopped reading after one or two pages and quit. I personally recommend that you try to divide at least five natural segments into one page. Divide the content into key levels. This is also more friendly to readers. In short, the story is okay, but the writing method needs to be adjusted, so keep working hard.

I think the idea is actually quite good. Newbies are all writing single-player games at the beginning, so they should stick to it.